Sweetie Belle Tries Pop Rocks and Cola

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A Filly, some Cola, and a Box of Pop Rocks. What could possibly go wrong? Knowing Sweetie Belle and her friends, probably a whole lot.

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Hopeful_Ink_Hoof #1 · Jan 30th, 2016 · · ·

I'm... kind of indifferent to the story. It was not bad, but not exactly good for me either. The "for a ginger" joke was a full miss. Felt like a bad attempt at South Park style humor.

Two things from a more technical point. First is the size of the soda that Rarity bought originally.

Inside the bag as a large twenty liter bottle of Cola, and a box of Pop Rocks.

Are you sure you don't mean something like two liter? Because I have never seen anything that went above three when it came to liters.

And second:

“ARE YOU TWO INSANE, WE NEVER GOT OUTSELVES AND EVERYPONY IN PONYVILLE KILLED!!!!” Apple Bloom screamed in disbelief, clambering clumsily out of the crane and observing the damage around her.

Pretty sure you mean "nearly."

lordnyan

lordnyan #2 · Jan 30th, 2016 · · ·

6886732 Thanks for the comment. I've never really watched South Park, the ginger jokes just sort of been around forever and the idea of Sweetie Belle calling Apple Bloom a ginger simply popped into mind while writing the scene. As for the other things, yea those were spelling mistakes and i have gone back and fixed them. Weird that my spell check didn't catch them though.

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