Doctor Whooves Adventures

by WingzBolt45

It's worth a fight

"There's one catch though you three."

"And what's that?" Dash said, making a stern, impatient look.

Clones of the Queen then started appearing out of nowhere:

"Which one am I?"

The Doctor then smacked his head with his hoof:

"OH YOU HAVE GOT TO BE KIDDING ME!"

"The clock is ticking Doctor."

Twilight then turned to The Doctor:

"Doctor what do we do?"

"Well! We could just search through all of them, Or! we could probably check THIS ONE!"

Twilight then turned to Dash, then turning towards The Doctor:

"Doctor I don't think that's her."

The Doctor then checked:

"Your right, not her."

Twilight then sighed:

"One second Doctor, I got this."

After one second Twilight released a burst of energy turning all the changelings back to normal.

The three then looked around but Queen was nowhere to be seen, Dash then turned to The Doctor:

"She's not here."

The Doctor then focused his attention towards the door to the watchtower at the end of the room:

"I think I know where she ran off to, let's go!"

The three then ran towards the door,

Changelings running after them in the process until Twilight forced them away with a magical force field.

The three then ran into the room, The Doctor using the Screwdriver to lock it in the process:

"What is that thing?" Dash asked facing The Doctor:

"This is a Sonic Screwdriver;

It works on metal, computers, locks and such, it doesn't work on wood, but I'm trying to fix that."

"Okay that's cool." Dash said turning away towards the stairs:

"So what? We just go up?" Twilight asked looking at The Doctor:

"Well! We could, that is a very sensible thing."

"Thanks." Twilight said, walking up the stairs:

Upon getting to the top floor The Doctor shoved in front of them to observed the door, in case of traps:

"Well Doctor?" Twilight asked:

"It's okay, I'll just unlock it and we can enter."

The Doctor then used the Sonic Screwdriver, successfully unlocking it.

The Doctor then opened the door entering a rather large room overlooking Equestria.

The door then shut and the Queen turned around facing the three ponies:

"Well I can see you finally arrived." Twilight then stared at the Queen:

"It really wasn't that hard to be honest."

The Doctor then faced the Queen also:

"Look your majesty, I can help you.." The Queen then cut The Doctor off:

"By help you mean you want to arrest and kill me?"

"No your Majesty. I just want to get you help and save these Ponies from destruction.

The Queen then started to laugh:

"But destruction is what I was born to do and you can't stop me!"

"I can though." The Queen then turned around coming face to face with Princess Celestia:

"But..You.."

Princess Celestia then smiled:

"You have ruled this Country for long enough, I'm Restoring order and your not saying otherwise."

"Oh we'll just see about that." The Queen said after running towards the bookcases on the other side of the room:

"We got it Princess, you go back to the throne room and we'll finish this once and for all!"

Celestia then nodded in agreement and ran towards the door:

"So what do we do now Doctor?" Twilight asked:

"The same thing we do all the time Twilight, Save the world."

"Let's go!" Dash said flying towards the bookcases:

"Okay I have a plan; Twilight? You take the left side of the room, Rainbow Dash? You take the right side of the room,

and I'll take the middle way, that way we can try to corner her." Twilight and Dash then agreed and ran off.

While walking down to hallway The Doctor then heard a voice coming from down the room:

"You can't stop me Doctor! Even if you do today, I'll figure out a way to get back!"

"Please, you have to listen to me. If you leave, you can rule your own country on an abandoned planet somewhere!"

The Doctor shouted attempting to get her attention:

"Pah! Rule an abandoned planet? You mean Exile?"

"Well! In a sort of way yes!"

"Then forget it!"

The Doctor then started to run towards the end of the room after hearing to voice get louder.

After a few minutes The Doctor then found the Queen:

"Ah! There you are!" The Queen then smiled:

"Your not stopping me!" As soon as the Queen was about to shoot the Doctor Twilight then ended up behind the Queen.

The Doctor noticing this then shouted towards Twilight:

"Twilight NO!"

The Queen then turned towards Twilight. Twilight then shot the Queen; throwing her towards a wall, knocking her out:

"Twilight!" Twilight then turned towards The Doctor:

"Doctor I'm sorry, it was a reflex." Dash then found the others and the three ran towards the Queen:

"Wha..What happened?" The Queen asked; starting to open her eyes:

"I'm sorry Queen." The Doctor said:

"But your time is up."

The Queen then groaned with anger as the three helped her up and brought her down to the Throne room.

In the Throne room the Queen then held a court to decide the fate of the Queen:

"Queen Chrysalis; Queen of the Changelings!

We find you guilty of war and endangerment towards your fellow people!

Your punishment will be Exile to an Abandoned planet on the edge of the solar system;

thanks to The Doctor and companions!"

The Queen then turned towards Princess Celestia:

"Before you do that, I just have one last thing to say!" Princess Celestia then turned towards the Queen:

"And what is that?"

"No matter where you put me. No mater where I go. I'll still escape and you'll be the first to go!"

The Queen was then dragged away towards a shuttle fixed on the abandoned planet, then was shot off.

After the ship left The Princess then faced towards the window:

"Well, she's gone now." The Doctor then nodded in agreement:

"Where do you think she'll go?" Twilight asked The Princess:

"Who knows. All I know is that we won't see her for a long time."

"Why not? I mean can't she just fly back?" Dash asked. The Doctor then faced Dash:

"I seriously doubt that! She'll be on the edge of the solar system, it'll take her decades to get back."

"I guess you right." Dash said.

The Princess then turned towards the three:

"I should thank you three." Twilight then look confused:

"For what?" Twilight then asked:

"For knocking some sense in me." Twilight then faced The Princess:

"No problem Princess." Dash then faced Twilight:

"I should probably thank you to Twilight. If it wasn't for you two, I would have been rotting in that cell forever."

Twilight then turned towards Dash: "No problem Dash."

"Well! I think we should get going!" The Princess then turned towards the two:

"What do you mean?" The Doctor then faced the Princess:

"Well! We have to get back to the TARDIS!"

"I'll come with you." The Princess said:

"It's the least I could do after you ended up saving my kingdom." The Doctor then nodded in agreement:

"Well then let's go!"

The four then made it back to Ponyville:

"Where is your TARDIS?" The Princess asked:

"It's right..Ah! There it is." The Doctor and Twilight then ran towards the blue box:

"Wait!" Dash said:

"Are you saying that small, blue box is your time machine?"

The Doctor then nodded:

"Yes! This is the time machine! Want to look inside?" Dash then sighed while walking towards it:

"Sure, I mean if it's small it's gotta be, HOLY HORSE FEATHERS!"

Dash's mouth then went agape after seeing the inside:

"Welcome to the TARDIS!" The Doctor said walking around the control panel:

"This is the time machine? But..It.." The Doctor then smiled:

"Okay I'll tell you; It's small on the outside because the inside is part of a paradox like portal."

"What?" Dash asked; confused,Twilight then sighed:

"It's smaller on the outside because were in a separate world." Dash then nodded:

"Anyway!" The Doctor said:

"That ends the tour."

The three then walked out. Upon arriving back to the Princess, the two waved goodbye until Dash stopped The Doctor:

"Wait! Doctor?" The Doctor then turned towards Dash:

"Yes Rainbow Dash?"

"Can I..You know..come with you? I mean I think it would be fun; Traveling the universe, Fighting monsters and stopping

major disasters from happening."

The Doctor then stared at Dash, thinking on what to do:

"Well you see Rainbow Dash, traveling is not all fun and games, it can get very dangerous at times..."

"Please?" Dash asked floating in the air; like a young filly attempting to get their parent to get them something:

"Well..." The Doctor said; rubbing his chin:

"Sure! Why not! It's always fun having more than one companion around, besides;

you can fly very fast and that would be useful for such an occasion."

Dash than ran up and hugged The Doctor in a way to thank him for agreeing to let her come along:

"Well what are you guys waiting for? Let's go!"

The two than walked towards the TARDIS than turned around and waved goodbye to the Princess:

"Thank you for everything Doctor!"

The Doctor than waved goodbye and the two then walked into the TARDIS.

At the controls The Doctor turned towards Dash and smiled:

"So! Where do you want to go first?"

Dash then thought for a moment:

"Well...Let's go back to the Middle Ages and see whats going on there!"

Twilight then turned to Dash:

"Why the Middle Ages Dash?"

Dash then turned towards Twilight and smiled:

"Because I heard that tomorrow is the anniversary of King Solaris' coronation and I want to witness it for the first time!"

The Doctor then pushed all sorts of buttons on the panel:

"Well then. I guess were off to see a Prince become a King."

The TARDIS then flew off and the Princess walked towards the train, silently thanking The Doctor again.

Comments

[WingzBolt45]

853434 Um I'm just wondering did this story piss you off or are you glad to see a story that I took months of planning since I just recently came back to Fim Fiction? I'm just wondering.

[MaxKodan]

860835

He likes the idea and the premise, but the way you have the story cut up, it doesn't flow. The paragraphing is very jarring. When there's a blank line between every line of dialogue and every action, it cuts it up and makes it difficult to read. The best suggestion I have for you is that you should go read a few pages of a book and see how they do it. When dialogue starts, it should be on a new line, but actions and words can be on the same line, and they should be. Also, instead of saying

{The Doctor Said: "Wibbly Wobbly Timey Wimey,"}

Use

{"Wibbly Wobbly Timey Wimey." Said the Doctor.}

It sounds better, and tends to be a lot more professional. So practice cutting it down to paragraphs rather than lines, and look at how an actual book is written. Strive towards that. Take second read throughs to fix grammatical errors, and try reading things, especially dialogue, aloud. Anything that doesn't sound natural, fix it so it does. You can have the best story in the world, but if it's formatted improperly it won't be as well received. Anyway, I'm gonna go ahead and keep my eye on this.

Also: You said this is a DWaA fic, but that's the one with Ditzy o.o...Doctor Who Adventures is with Twilight.

[WingzBolt45]

861010 thanks for the tips. I'll also change the Title.

[MLPgirl122]

What an awesome story, man! (See? I'm speechless!)