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Head In The Clouds

I'm always thinking about Fluttershy, it happened again, I can't stop thinking about her.

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Art de Triomphe

Art de Triomphe #1 · Dec 20th, 2015 · · ·

The idea is good. RarityxFluttershy is one of my favorite ships. It's just the execution which was lacking. Mostly it was in how things were worded, as well as a few sentence-structure errors. For example, I think you're missing a word in the very first sentence. Secondly, and this may only be my own interpretation of the character, but Rarity is far too ladylike to throw around swears, even in pain. In that vein, no matter how classy she is, she would probably not used British swears (bloody hell). Not to mention that "bloody" is a substitute for "fucking" in this context, so if you are going to use them, pick one and stick to it.

Melody Knight Shadow

Melody Knight Shadow #2 · Dec 20th, 2015 · · ·

It was good but I dont think Rarity woud sware EVER as she is way to lady like. That is all I wanted to say.

Oh I almost forgot (Then Rarity wakes up and says "This is fucking bull shit! It was just a dream.") THE END

Sorry just had to do that

Nightmare mare #3 · Dec 20th, 2015 · · ·

LOVE IT!!!!!!

Pretty good story

Twyla In Wonderland

Twyla In Wonderland #4 · Dec 20th, 2015 · · ·

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Okay I've changed it so she's not swearing as much as she was

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Thank u

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