"Am fanfic game strawberry capri-sun"
Celestia makes a speech three days after the attack on canterlot and is challenged publicly by a pony with a strange hat that goes by the name Vilotyne. Ousted from her throne and alone in the wilderness, the former princess must rally her remaining supporters in ponyville and save Equestria from the evil that Vilotyne will force onto it.
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A perfect retort: "By that reasoning your overwhelmingly implying, we should get somepony stronger than I to be the leader of Equestria. Would anypony here like to attempt to defeat me in open combat? *Silence* Then kindly hear me out."
Maybe not as harsh as that, but the general idea should be represented enough in that example.
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Typo detected: "I would like to urge everone to remember that-" Firstly, ever? Secondly, one?! D:
Oh god. Oh god. Oh god. I can't keep the beast inside my pants from getting out and splurting its juices all over this story ....
OMG I JIZZED AGAIN
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This was good btw.. lol.. I liked the detail you put into the story.
723915 Thank ya
Well, I see you took my advice for this guy, he seems much more believable as a sentient being now!
This was a good and neccesary chapter to add to build on this guys character.
And I must say, even I'm surprised about him throwing that much of his money away.
Hmm, it can't be out of kindness... maybe he's cocky, or maybe bribing the innkeeper in a way she won't notice to keep her off his back.
Or maybe the bag is filled with shells.
Wow, about three houndred words. Look, that is WAY too short for any chapter! I personally recommend one thousand words or more for any chapter. Actually, it'd be nice if the entire chapter didn't fit on my computer screen with no scrolling.
If you can't find a way to make a chapter 1,000 words long, then maybe combine some chapters. An entire chapter doesn't have to describe one scene each.
Also, they we're just leaving the castle grounds right? And all of Canterlot went there for the speech? Then how did Vilotyne get knocked out by some guards (I mean, really, who else could it be?) with absolutely noone else noticing? I'd assume a capital is quite populated, so it'd take longer than a 10 sentence exchange for the entire grounds to be cleared out.
Sorry if this makes me sound pissy or rude, let's just say I've had better days.
745408 Understandable, but this chapter stays how it is for the simple reason that I feel i've dragged this part of the story out for long enough. I'm sorry if this is not up to par with your standards, but i'm just human and i'm telling my story how I see fit. If you think it would be better, I could change this to chapter 4.5 instead.
835237Thank you!
Whoah.
"I have the people fixed in my grasp Luna. If you send me to the block I can make them charge the executioner."
Oh, really? And what if he's casually murdered in a tiny room with only Luna and her accomplice as witnesses? If she's willing to launch a coup why would he expect her to follow procedure on executions?