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This should be interesting. Do continue, sir.
I also presume you have the Dust supplies planned out somehow?
I wonder why Luna is not aware of Applejack's finding of Yang yet? Unless both stories are happening at the same time. Hopefully these two will be meeting up at the end of this arc.
KO awesome chapter, Weiss has awoken in Equestria and will have to work with the pony princesses and probably Discord to find her friends and reunite.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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7784625 All the individual character stories all run at the same time.
Cool to see this updated. I think your writing style has improved since the first part of "I burn". By that I mean this chapter's pacing and sentence structure flowed better. I would like to see a little shakeup of the standard "x-over/HIE" formula going on. It seems like the story is just ticking off another box of the formula.
[x] character winds up in the Everfree with amnesia/confusion
[x] character befriends or saves the cmc
[x]Discord implied to know something about character's appearance. He may or may not be responsible
Wait, how does Luna know about Atlas, how does she appear as a human (and if she's not why is Weiss not freaking out)?
7784625 My thoughts are these are happening simultaneously, when Weiss is waking up here it's likely around the time Yang is.
Well here start Weiss arc. Luna will be her pairing, though she seems quite moody. Discord was a surprise to be fair, but I guess he could be counted on to upend the mood aaannd making a big mess at the same time.
Anyway, keep on the good work and until next chapter.
Mistakes found:
Weiss
I think it would be more appropriate anatomically if you use the terms paw for his lion forearm and talon for his eagle one instead of hand.
Wait, Weiss thinks she's in Atlas, right?
Hmm...Luna is a secretive one. I'm guessing she used something related to her dream powers to both appear as human to Weiss and pull Atlas' name out so Weiss doesn't suspect much.
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This just got interesting...
Already a promising start. I wonder how much information Luna plans to withhold from Weiss and for how long.
Hey! It's Weiss... the Ice Queen... Oh well, let's see what happens.
7784938 I'm thinking for the first one, She would be a better fit.
Her arms,as if pinned
was rounded And nearly
1. Forgot your spacing.
2. Extra capitalisation.
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Surely, but since the mistake started the a "w" understandably Weiss was what Qrow intended to write.
Also good job spotting those I missed.
I can't wait to see how things go when Luna, and Celestia learn about Yang.
Glad to see this story isn't dead. Hope to read more soon. Good luck getting Weiss' attitude down-pat.
7785170 I can accept that answer.
Maybe.
Really I can't, but I have to anyways.
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Because Luna is dream walking when she's chatting with Weiss, so Luna could very well be accessing Weiss' memories for context when she builds a dream to chat with her in. It would also explain how Luna is a human- she's using dream magic to create a dream following a few basic parameters- ie. somewhat familiar decor, familiar creatures, etc.- and then her magic is just using Weiss' memories to fill in the blanks and filling Luna in on what the context is so she doesn't appear horrifically out of place within the dream.
7789459 Definitely a good guess.
7786528 This story shall never die. I was just in a break to take care of some issues.
7786063 It's sure to be great.
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7785305 Thanks for the corrections, you two!
7785268 I wonder too...
7785112 possibly!
7785074 Flowers in RvB is a cunning and manipulative bastard indeed...
7784962 For right now, yes.
7784809 I'll say this: Weiss, in this chapter, awoke before Yang did in I Burn part one.
7784807 You'll just have to find out...
7784766 Oh. I honestly forgot about the "saving the CMC" cliche. Though I'd like to think I put it in there for a much more interesting reason than most.
7784713 Around the same time frame, at least.
7784702 Indeed!
7784625 Even the princesses aren't all knowing, though I'm sure there are other reasons...
7784602 I do, yes. That will be explained in this arc.
7789585 oh, so this is before yang is discovered or wakes up? OK
7789677 It takes place before Yang wakes up.
7789751 Thank you
7789585 But wait, why does Weiss see humans? Magic on Luna's part? Discord? Or was she just hit REALLY hard on the head?
7790474 All will be explained soon. Very good guesses by the way.
7784807 I at first thought Weiss had landed in the Equestria Girls verse.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
7785261 what do you mean just? this has been interesting since the first chapter.
Luna knew about atlas and appeared human? She did some dream searching and dream communication.
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What interest me is how Weiss managed to project herself, Winter, and Goodwitch of all people onto Luna’s simulacron.
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Luna delved into Weiss's memories, and using those memories, she made a spell to make herself appear human. Since Luna is in a position of power, Weiss's mind drew on what she sees as the women of authority in her life - Winter and Goodwitch.
Damnit! Author’s note killed it. It was going okay, but i read half that note before i killed that switch. Don’t pull the rug out from under us, the reader has got to figure it out on their own. That’s what blog posts are for.