• Member Since 19th Jul, 2011
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Apple John


A surprising series of events brings a young mare to the hands to the family of Carrot and Cup Cake. The couple show her hospitality as she begins to reveal herself and what brings her to Ponyville, making friends along the way!

Pic thanks to Echowolf800

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 14 )

Kind of a sweet little story so far, though I'm a bit uncertain of Pinkie's interpretation here, with a focus on some of the less fleshed out characters with the Cakes. I enjoy little origin-style stories like this one and I'm curious where you're going with it.

(also, you've got a typo in the title, it should be "Manic Depression," and I think the "not Cupcakes" disavowment was sort of...well, puzzling and unecessary. Summary as is doesn't dredge up any comparisons to Cupcakes nor does the story itself)


I see what you're saying about the "Cupcakes" note, and I took that out. Also, to the other point, the typo was completely intended: I won't come out and say why, though ;)


Well I guess we'll just have to wait and find out, won't we?

Still falling more on the adorable side than anything else with only that very slight break from her normal character. I'm wondering if we've got impending doom or impending happy with the party, though. Nice job.

I like how Derpy is a tad clumsy and has a somewhat poor sense of direction but is otherwise fairly bright. It certainly explains Winter Wrap-Up and dropping all that stuff on Twi.

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

I like your characterization of Derpy. I understand, but don't quite like the swings in Pinkie's personality (it's kinda the point of the story after all). Overall, nicely continued. (I think the perspective got a bit shifty at times, but it wasn't really distracting or anything)

Where the hay is this! I miss it soooooooooooo much! I understand writers block and all... But I want more! It kinda left off with a cliffhanger :applecry: I want more naow!!!!

What! Come on man dont leave us hanging:applecry:

3863743 its been three years...i doubt he's even still here

Reading pinkie liked that kinda hurt, but in a good way, cos I could tell what was coming .

I look forward to the next chapter, when mr. Cake will get a big surprise:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

I'll admit the switch from how pinkie was at first to know is a little odd, even thinking pinkie, but this is good so fare:twilightsmile:

Well, that didn't quite go how I thought, a pinkie not wanting to make friends was kinda weird for me, plus I'm tired, so that probably factored in somewhere.

Anyway, this was nice, a little confusing in regards to pinkie's past, but nice:pinkiesmile:

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