A pony named Comet Tale makes a living by tricking mares. After Applejack becomes one of his victims, her big brother, Big Macintosh is determined to make him pay.
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The thing about endings is that they are so seldom really endings. Far more often, they are actually beginnings. So should they really be called "endings" at all?
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6031378 Thanks, I'm so glad you liked it!
6031256 Thanks for reading. What would you like more details on?
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it's just that I would really like to see what else occurred after Big Mac worked over that piece of trash. I just don't see him walking off and leaving the others unmarked. I think that the most that Shining Armor will have to do is pick up the pieces
6033686 You make a good point. Originally this was a one-shot, but I have been debating making a sequel. I have a few scenes poking around in my head. Again, thanks for reading!
Another underrated story, great one-shot. If you decide to a sequel, I will definitely be reading it. Maybe AJ got pregnant or maybe Comet Tail is in reality a small part of something much bigger and more sinister, the potential is pretty high. Of course, it's also fine as a on-shot. Good luck at whatever you decide.
6115167 Thank you so much!
I haven't decided yet what to do but I have considered both of those options. I'm currently working on another story. An Alternate Ending to A Canterlot Wedding. It doesn't take place in the same universe as this one though. I'd love it if you'd read it and tell me what you think. 
BTW: Applejack is my favorite pony.
Hm, interesting story, but a bit more development of the characters would be nice. I'm also not sure why Comet would go so far out of his way to make sure AJ (as well as others---like Mrs. Cake) would know who he was. If he was planning on gang-raping her, why not do it in a more subtle way? It's implied he's done it before. He could, say, have stalked her to know her patterns and when she'd be alone, or slipped something in her drink. Was he banking on her being too ashamed to tell? If an Element of Harmony shows up in town with injuries, ponies will talk. Also---and this is just a personal preference----but why beat her so badly? It would have made for a deep scene if Mac couldn't immediately see injuries, and try to draw the story out of her.
Anyway, keep on writing, and have fun.