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LGHeart


A story writer that gets insperation from the most random of things, works to make every story enjoyable as best as possible so please enjoy to your hearts content. WARNING some stories get very dark.

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One night Applejack was supposed to meet her friend for an important meeting to help plan the repairs to Ponyville after Tirek's attack. Twilight had told all her friends to meet at the castle of the pony sisters because it would be the only place that they could all plan the rebuild without everypony trying to bother them.

It seemed like a good idea at first, that is until Applejack got lost and attacked in the Everfree forest because she was late.

Now AJ must quest with her friends, and delve deeper into the Everfree forest than they ever have before. What horrors await these ponies as they go to retrieve Applejack's lost memories.

let's find out.

*Edit* The story has been upgraded to teen because of the because of the rather violent scene that occurs in chapter 10.


Author's note: This will be my first story posted on FimFiction, I hope you all enjoy it! Chapters maybe be few and far between, but I promise this story will NOT die out or get canceled.

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 8 )

Looks interesting. I would recommend using "I" next time, so it'll be easier to read. Good start though :pinkiehappy:

5194833 I would, but I also wanted to practice writing a story with an accent. Makes for a good challenge and a fun experience, I'm glad you like the story by the way!:pinkiesmile:

It's "Taurus" I believe :pinkiehappy: Also, Rarity's magic is light blue. Other than that and a few grammatical errors (repeating words, it
's and its confusion, etc) I've been loving this story! :D

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Thank you for the information I will be making the changes as soon as I can.

By the way, I know Rarity's magic is an azure color, but because of Jackie's issues that have been affecting her mentally she will be seeing every one of her friends differently to some degree. like how Flutttershy now looks like Flutterbat. Rarity mostly has some more subtle changes like how Jackie sees her magic as a green color instead of azure, her main appears to be tied back in a "ponytail", and her eyes have changed in color and are now also shooting out flames just like you would imagine Sombra's eyes do when he uses dark magic, just in a yellow color instead of the dark purple.

I hope this post clears that up for you, I was intentionally giving Rarity's magic a different color because it shows how far Jackie may actually be in the progression of her brain shutting down.

Oooo, I didn't pick up on that; so interesting! (I mean, I knew the flames in her eyes weren't real, but beyond that...) I'm glad you actually know the magic colors; you'd be surprised how many people get them wrong and it annoys me soo much. For example, in one fic Luna's magic is portrayed as silver, I've seen Celestia's shown as blue and I think once it was pink, Cadence's magic as pink...:facehoof: And don't even get me STARTED on when people portray the Mane Six as alicorns. I mean, technically they can use any color they want since it never really happened, but seriously, Fluttershy's magic as yellow? :ajbemused:

“Jackie, you're me darling.”

Huh? Sorry this makes no sense and a lot of time you use the word 'my' instead of 'me' but other than that, good chapter!

5805807 derp. Sorry that was supposed to say

"Jackie, You're scaring me darling."

I'll fix that right away.

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