Rarity's Accident

by dbzponyninja

Chapter Three

Rarity's Accident Chapter Three

After receiving Sunset Shimmer's message Princess Twilight Sparkle and Spike rushed through the portal and Princess Twilight was now in Rarity's hospital room, Spike wished that he could be there but since he goes from being a dragon to being a dog when he steps through the portal and dogs aren't allowed in the hospital Fluttershy volunteered to watch Spike at her house.

Spike told Fluttershy "It's too bad that I'm not allowed at the hospital, I want to be by Rarity's side, but that's impossible." (sad sigh)

Fluttershy told Spike while petting him at the same time "Um I have a idea but you don't have to do it,unless you want to that is."

Spike asked Fluttershy in a curious tone "What's your idea, Fluttershy?"

Fluttershy told Spike "I volunteered to watch you today but how about tomorrow, I take you to the hospital with me and if any doctors or nurses tell me that dogs aren't allowed I'll tell them that you are a dog plushie, that way they'll have to allow you in."

Spike then told Fluttershy while wagging his tail happily "That's a good idea Fluttershy, let's do it."

Anyway the next day Fluttershy went about her plan and it worked now Spike was sitting right by Rarity's side just like he wanted, when doctors and nurses were present he stood still and did nothing but after they left the room he acted like a dog again.

Sunset told Fluttershy "Fluttershy, this plan of your's is brilliant, it's hard to believe that you haven't gotten caught yet."

Fluttershy told Sunset "Thank you Sunset, while I'm usually not one who likes to break the rules, Spike wanted to be right by her side so badly that I had to do something."

Princess Twilight told Fluttershy "You've made Spike so happy Fluttershy, he was so sad and upset when he found out what happened to Rarity but look at him now."

Fluttershy told Princess Twilight "I was happy to do something for him after all not only is Spike my friend but he's also a animal as well."

Princess Twilight reminded Fluttershy "Fluttershy you do remember that I told you that he's only a dog when he comes here back home he's a dragon right?"

Fluttershy told Princess Twilight "Oh I know Twilight."

Princess Twilight then told Fluttershy "Ok just making sure."

Anyway half a day later Rarity woke up and while she was in pain she still had a smile on her face, she was happy that her friends and her sister were all by her side.

Ten minutes later a doctor came into her room and told her "Ok Rarity we have good news and bad news, we looked at your X-Ray and you have broken ribs, a injured back and both of your legs are broken so you'll have to ride around in a wheelchair for a long time, the good news is that you can go home today, just remember to take pain medicine twice a day every day until you run out then buy some more until you hopefully don't need any more."

Rarity asked the doctor "Will I ever be able to walk again?"

The doctor told her "Right now I don't know that is something that we'll have to determine after multiple check ups, your next appointment is in three weeks but it is highly recommended that you don't go to school or work for a few days.

Rarity told both the doctor and her friends thank you as they helped her into her wheelchair.

Her friends also helped her out her room and the hospital and they also helped her get back to her home where they and Sweetie Belle volunteered to help her do things around her house for a few days.

Then after four check up visits to the hospital several doctors and nurses told her that she is in fact able to walk again but that she can't be on her feet for long periods of time otherwise she'll have to take pain medicine and put ice bags on her legs but other than that her ribs and legs are no longer broken and her back is no longer injured. The End.

Comments

[Stardom Freedom]

I put a thumbs-down because this was really rushed. It basically was like, "Rarity got hit by a car, she went to the hospital, she got better, the end,"

I mean, you should add more into it instead of just that.

And since you said that chapter three was the end, make sure to mark the story as complete! That part confused me into thinking there would be more, and I'm sure the same happened to others.

[Gallant Rage]

MLPLover852
Did you read when I was last modified? that was today! no wonder he still has to edit

[Dusk Melody]

6047785 i have to agree with you. this could easily have been 10,000 words or more. there's no description, no immersion. too much telling and not enough showing.

its a shame because the idea of the story has merit, its just this execution is so rushed its not funny.

[Stardom Freedom]

6047869
I know that. And I understand that he needs editiing. I'm just giving constructive criticism.

[firebolt3]

ok love the story but it needs work the story is too rush how about rewriting it take your time to look over it. another thing I notice is when the characters talk or make dialogue it doesn't sound right

[Sdrawkcabsitxetsiht]

Your description as a whole could be revised. Don't ever say something like "Will she survive? Lets find out." It just takes away from the experience as a whole.

[dbzponyninja]

6048713 Nice suggestion, I'll take that into consideration with my next story.

[Elric of Melnipony]

6047869
Editing should be done before the chapter goes up, not after.

[randome284]

The idea was good... But it was too rushed. (ya, I know I said this three times...) It's better to make something later but good then making something bad quickly.