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The lulamoon in red

At sweet apple acre,in the barn,a mare think about her past,the stalion at her side about his mare.

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Windlife

Windlife #1 · Apr 23rd, 2015 · · 1 ·

Watch out, Past Sins, it looks like your days are numbered.

Inkwell Prose #2 · Apr 23rd, 2015 · · ·

I'll give it to ya. It wasn't half bad. Only mistakes I really saw was some grammatical errors and spacing. You had sentences going like this: blah blah,blah and blah blah.blah need to get those fixed.

Imperator45 #3 · Apr 23rd, 2015 · · ·

Thank you alI for your reviews i will take this into account

Frankie2

Frankie2 #4 · May 13th, 2015 · · ·

I can see why there were down vote. Not spacing after commas, and using the wrong words can do that.

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