Better than jail

by Whitetashi

2. Fresh Air

You pick up your bags and step out of the train, into the most beautiful weather you ever experienced. The sun shines with a warmth you never witnessed before, and you feel like you would never get a sunburn from it, no matter how long you stay inside it's warming light. The wind is going lightly, or not at all, you can not tell for sure. You hear some birds singing and the mumbling of a small, distant river. You just let go of your bags and breath the purest air you ever breathed.

And as you stand on the platform of this little train station , your eyes closed, in the middle of what feels like uncommon paradise, you hear a smooth, melodic voice: "Hello? Darling, may I help you?"
Being reminded of your surroundings, you slowly start opening your eyes while saying:
"Yes, sure, I just arrived and am currently searching for....oh....wow....hi."
Well; there goes your eloquence, the moment you realize whom you're talking to. In front of you stands a beautiful girl with purple hair. Her skin is completely white, but not the common never-seen-the-sun-pale, it's if it's pure marble, almost unreal, but in this environment it looks just suited. Her hair seems almost impossible, you have never seen that perfect located hair. She wears a very light blue shirt and a tight long, purple skirt with 3 embroidered sky blue gems on it, and the same gems on her long purple boots and as a beret in her shimmering, flowing hair.

She giggles at your reaction of her appearance and blushes a little under your amazed gaze, which makes her even cuter. You endeavor to bring out the right words, in order to attempt becoming 20% cooler again, and eventually get to say:
"....Princess Twilight Sparkles Castle....I am the new guy."
Not your masterpiece, but it will do it for now. "Enchanted to see you dear", the girl answers; interesting style of speaking by the way; you say to your self, "I have heard that you will arrive today, must have slipped my mind. I am Rarity, pleasure to meet you." You tell her your name, too, and start to calm down a little.
"So you do you know....why I am here?", you ask her nervously, fearing what might come.
"Yes of course darling, Princess Celestia told us everything, you did a cappricio on an important person in your home town and now you're here to learn the values of friendship. And there is no better place for doing so then here, in Ponyville."

She gives you a big, heartwarming smile and you decide to allow that to stand. If their sovereign decided, that this is was they need to hear, you better not interfere with that, your not even sure you could explain it to her.
"So, you know where Princess Twilight Sparkles Castle is, right? Because I am meant to meet her there and as far as I know, I also will stay there while I am here in Ponyville."
"Oh of course my dear, how could I have forgotten! You are so lucky to stay in this marvelous Castle, I am just so jealous about it, all those remarkable treasures and all the beauty...."
"Er....Rarity, the castle? Lead the way please?"
She stops midsentence and blushes to a bright red. "....Of course, sorry my dear, I got carried away...." And with a sweep trough her hair, she turns on the spot and starts walking a little to fast along the platform. You smirk, pick up your bags and follow her through the wonderful weather.

Comments

[gamer4COD]

Totally gonna have a good time.

[Texus]

your chapters should be around 2000 words at least.
hhhmmmmm there is not enough to say, that you rush the story, but take your time please.

The idea is not bad i guess, but i feat that it maybe going to be bad, if you make it that short, and well rush everything.

His reaction to Rarity is probably okay, i can´t say anything against it, but it was just a little scene, and well it seems to be something, like those 2-5 minutes short videos.

Since i can´t explain it good enough right now, just make it a bit longer, take your time to describe more i guess, and please don´t rush the romance.

I give you a chance, but i don´t vote yet, it is not really bad, but nothing special till now.

[Texus]

new chapter please