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A Beautiful Night

Evening Breeze rests upon one of her favorite hills in Ponyville to truly appreciate the night she is given.

Entry to The Springtime Nights Contest.

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PinoyPony

PinoyPony #1 · May 1st, 2015 · · ·

Awesome story! going in my favs for sure!

By the way, I noticed a tiny error (sorry, my OCD takes over)
2nd Paragraph "winter rap up"- I think you mean "winter wrap up"

Again, Lovely Story! I've enjoyed it!

TheDiscontent

TheDiscontent #2 · May 1st, 2015 · · ·

5926747 its errors like this that make me feel like a foal ill fix that and im glad you enjoyed!

PseudoBob Delightus

PseudoBob Delightus #3 · Jun 16th, 2022 · · ·

Hello! I have come to review your story. And in case you're wondering, I think I found it through a random search of stories with less than 250 views.

I didn't find any particular details to complain about, but overall, I found the writing somewhat simplistic and long-winded. There's plenty of detail and history, but not as much character as it perhaps could have had, in part due to the simple writing style. Also I'm not sure why Lightning Blast is mentioned so much throughout the story, when he never actually shows up and seems to have no impact on the conclusion.

Finally, despite the lack of refinement, the beauty of the night you are describing definitely comes through in the end.

Thank you for writing this - I hope you continue pursuing this art, in one way or another.

TheDiscontent

TheDiscontent #4 · Jun 16th, 2022 · 1 · ·

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Thanks for taking the time to read/review this little fic of mine! Im glad you enjoyed it to some extent. I'd certainly like to get back into writing at some point. Although reading my own work tells me I had a lot to improve on. I felt I was a little repetitive in description in this particular story, but im glad I built a nice scene for you!