Finding Home

This story is a sequel to In Stitches

Eight years after the events of In Stitches Rainbow and her children along with new friends set out in search of home. Dark things wait on the road ahead and the Everfree only gets darker, soon a long lost friend will join them.

NOTE: you do not need to read the first story, although the lore will make more sense if you do.

Chapters (3)

Prolouge · 2nd Apr 2015 · 1,735 words
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Chapter 1 · 1st May 2015 · 2,115 words
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Chapter 2 · 18th Aug 2015 · 2,875 words
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Ice4smaster #1 · May 2nd, 2015 · · · unfinished chapters (AKA not even close to done/edited/final and stuff) ·

I havent read the whole story yet ( passed out from exhastion ) But heres a few things.

It is still quite a mystery how one get from one world to another here, i bet this be intentional and could be paired up with the Bermuda triangle, though i like when we learn a degree how it happening, like a gateway/ripple in reality of some short.

Storm character is likable, though it's quite quickly going to the flirty direction, From Dash Side i can imagine it, considering what a burden she been freed from.

Though this is where my issue comes in, how could she keep it a secret from her children she is blind? They seem to be old enough to understand that something is not right with their mommy, and ask questions, partly being innocent, and curious, and they should notice the difference too.

Another thing, if i were the doctor, and at this point should be quite intimate with the events happen to Dash ( what she could recall ) and would be quite protective of her, just as a being who took care of her so long, and even if Dash says okey, i think he would be still around with her untill he could be truly sure he means no harm.

The rest i yet to read, but these points could be refined some :)

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