Save the Queen!

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Two stallions hatch a plan to get back at Filthy Rich by kidnapping Diamond Tiara and holding her for ransom. Diamond, completely oblivious to how serious her situation is, believes that she and her captors are just playing a new game.

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Telaros

Telaros #1 · Mar 26th, 2015 · · ·

Well, that was an interesting cutie mark story. xD

Filthy is a shrewd business pony. Father of the year he no get.

Dainn

Dainn #2 · Mar 26th, 2015 · · ·

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2 likes ... and only 8 views.
4 of which came from me while checking to make sure everything looked alright.
I'm speechless.

Telaros

Telaros #3 · Mar 26th, 2015 · 1 · ·

5783051 Add to a group earlier next time. Most people don't spend much time on the front page. Word of mouth and story popping up on feeds tend to help bring attention.

Story had a few cute moments but it didn't really go anywhere. Many already guessed how it ends from the get go. The way Filthy acts and the emphasis of how much no one wants Diamond Tiara because she's a monster brat is probably just going to turn others away since it's slightly overplayed in many mediums, including movies and especially in Cartoons.

And having OC+Diamond Tiara, a description that basically is the whole story, and an uninteresting reused show picture don't do much to reel in attention. I won't go much into the story, it was nice. But so are a lot of other stories right now. It's an arena out there! Use groups to your advantage when you throw a new fledgling story out there!

Not in any groups? Look around. If you intend on writing, they can certainly help. Though, I'll admit that I've already taken up a lot of my limited time to comment on basic knowledge, I do at least want you to know I cared enough to be honest and that yes, more people than you just clicking on your own story, viewed the story.

Fic was fairly average. 3/5 but that's not bad. You'll likely get more views and thumbs tomorrow when people are normally more active. Again, front page is a war zone and you only get to stay on the front page for a short time before newer stories bump you off.

P.S. Good night!

jmj