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Dainn


Standing on the outside, dying on the inside.

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This story is a sequel to Goodbye Forever: Great and Powerful Trixie


The world had never been a simple place for Trixie. But she was never one to be stopped by a few unexpected obstacles either. When faced with a challenge, she'd always find a way to adapt and move on. End of story. But after being humiliated once again by Twilight, Trixie has lost everything, including her will to practice magic. So, the question now is, what do you do after your entire world has been shattered? Do you lay down and die? Or do you dust yourself off and start picking up the pieces?

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This was actually really good! I can't wait for more!

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Glad you liked it, and thanks for favoriting

aww poor trixie :fluttershysad:

jmj

Great follow up. I think turning this into a series was the right move. We all want to see what adventures lay in wait for Trixie and who knows, maybe she will become a showmare again. Great work, sir.
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Death. That is what I thought would happen without intervention. It appears somepony is about to try and prevent that. I'm guessing her illusion spell had been worn off. So whoever's coming will more than likely know who she is.

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Well ... I'll tell you one thing, the illusion spell hasn't worn off.

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With as weak as she is? She can't stand up, how does she have the strength to maintain her illusion?:unsuresweetie:

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:facehoof: guess it's back to the drawing board for me

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Nah, it's alright.
I'm just gonna rethink a few things for the next chapter.
The overall plot won't change.

This is awesome!:pinkiecrazy: and sad at the same time:applecry: really good cant wait for chapter 2 keep going man!

I liked it! Nice job with the nightmares. Very realistic and frightening.

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lol thanks Rainpath

Excellent!! Trixie is alive, but dead on the inside. Like I originally said, death without intervention. Now she needs to realize that she has self-worth. That will only happen, if somepony gives her a helping hand. Poor Autumn is going to go broke after her sister is done billing her.

jmj

I really like the oc's. Summer is such a bitch. So this could be a trixie motivational story or one that brings aboutna renewal or rebirth. I'm looking forward to see what happens. Or it could all be a set up for something terrible. The #1that rule of the drive in: anyone can die at any time. Lol

Wow, she already felt weak but... Not being able to move or speak ... :fluttercry:
Poor Trixie *Hugs Trixie* :fluttershysad: There, There, You don't need to worry anymore
We will take good care of you, You'll be back on your hooves in no time ^^

(if only it was true)

WICKED!!.....................Poor trix' if only 'twas real. I WILL FIX YOU UP TRIXIE!!!!!:raritycry:

2036150 Of course she is. you think being a warfighter doesn't tire you out?

I'm seriously enjoying reading about Summer and Autumn. :rainbowlaugh: Especially Summer, although she's a huge jerk.

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And just think, without you, it would have ended at "Great and powerful"

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I'm also glad you continued. Summer seems like a bitch (and proud of it) and Autumn is cheerful and somewhat naive. I'm anxious ti see what happens next.

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I just hope Trixie gets to rub everyones nose in it. :trixieshiftleft:
She got a crappy deal from the first time at Ponyville, granted the 2nd trip wasn't her finest moment. But she's no more of a braggart than Rainbow Dash.

Also, no where near as bitchy as Diamond Tiara or Silver Spoon.

Everyone was quick to give Luna another chance, and Discord, even after he abused Fluttershys trust.
But for some reason, Trixie is the MLP-verse favorite whipping pony.

jmj

Okay, sorry I have not commented. I didn't know you updated it and thought you were still working on it. Sorry, I didn;t get a "Dain has updated" message. Anyway, I think it's a great chapter. I love Summer and Autumn as well. Your OC's are really good.

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Glad you're enjoying it so far lol
And thanks for favoriting

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Ha, I put that warning up for a reason

jmj

Awesome chapter, sir. I really enjoyed it. I think you are making great progress with the character development and I wonder what will happen in the future.
Shorter chapters aren't a problem to edit. When they are 17 pages in length, it gets time consuming. Regardless, it was probably for the best since this is the best version of what I have seen so far. Good work. Keep going.

I'd be happy to help with editing. :twilightsmile: I don't mean to brag, but I'm quite the grammar Nazi.

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In that case, i'll try to keep them shorter next time.
I was origiinally going to split this into two different chapters and send you one half at a time.

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Not a problem.

jmj

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I don't get why this story only has 100 and something views when the original has 400. Doesn't make sense to me.

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There's a lot of stuff on here that doesn't make sense.

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But what surprises me is the difference between here and fanfiction.
On fanfiction this has over 600 views.

Comment posted by Dainn deleted Apr 21st, 2013

Wow. I really like how you put this chapter together. I'm looking forward to see how this story develops.:pinkiehappy:

Anyone else think that the part where Trixie loses the ability to stand was too over the top?

It's better than than this crap you just finished reading.

What you are writing is not crap. If it was crap, people would not have wanted more. Personally, I like what you wrote. I look forward to more.:twilightsmile:

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Actually, that was just me cracking a joke.
Along with having a few panick attacks seconds after updating.
Thanks for following along up to this point though Frankie.

I like the bits you added! I had to skim through, since I don't have much time, but I loved this chapter. Very good work.

jmj

Glad to see this updated. Hopefully, I will be back to editing for the next one. The only critique I have is that the font bugs the hell out of me.

well you earned a gold star... well fav

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well, this makes my morning.

Nice chapter! I like seeing Trixie's childhood memory, that was a pleasant surprise. :yay: It's just that there's one point where it says "everyponie's" and that should probably be "everypony's". :applejackunsure: Also, it may be me getting characters and names mixed up, but Lockpick is referred to as a mare and I'm pretty sure another pronoun said "he" in reference to Lockpick. This is probably me not paying too much attention, though. :twilightblush:

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I'll take your word for it.
Only problem is that I don't feel like reading through this again just to find 2 mistakes.

And so there's no confusion, lockpick is a male.

I'm glad to see this story isn't dead. I'm just waiting to see how long before Trixie cracks. She can't keep that neutral expression forever.

jmj

You write very well, sir. I've always thought that but it just keeps getting better. The dialogue is very good. Thanks for putting out another chapter and I can't wait to see another one. Also, thanks for the P2S mention. I think that's awesome!

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I agreed to help raise awareness for your stories back when you first introduced me to this site.
I always try to keep my promises.