Obviously it's tough as a changeling. Low food supplies, constant orders, and the world shunning you. One has cut himself off from the hive though, refusing to give in to his former queens devious methods of procuring food. Logically, Ponyville would be one of the safest little places to live, right?
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Interesting take on the "Changeling in Ponyvile" plot; it seems like our protagonist hasn't just now arrived; it's also interesting to see him found out this early in the story.
Watching this, definitely.
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I have a watcher?!
I am confuse!!!
In all seriousness though, thank you!
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I'll take that as a compliment. If that means "where's chrysalis?" though, she's in the story, just not yet.
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Keep going - While it's similar to what I'm in the midst of writing and re-writing, I love to see what others can do with Changelings.
It looks good, He's a rebel, I can dig it.
Moar!
For Great Justice!
This is good. I demand moar!
Poor guy.
So-far-so-good. I enjoyed this chapter and I eagerly look forward to more.
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Wut? So many ponies... like my stuff!? Now I've got to work twice as hard!!! 
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569518 Yes, we like it.
Wat? We've inspired the author to do even better?... 
!
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Don't rush. The quality of the prologue was great and I wish to see future chapters continue the trend of awesomeness.
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Oh, no fear of quality drop. I'll wind up not even touching the document for a week or something, get a rush of ideas and type it in one go. Email it to my editor for grammatical and pacing errors and it's good to go in under 48 hours.
Awww, he's still cool with his friends.
Great chapter, though Rainbow seems a bit...crazy here. As in, borderline murderous.
Granted, she'd be REALLY pissed at the Changelings for attacking Equestria, but I dont think she'd attack a helpless prisoner just because they were a Changeling.
I wonder how Celestia will play into Mask's situation. Twilight's gonna have to tell the Princess about him eventually, methinks.
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Sketchpad: "Really think Dash is being out of character? I tried to emphasis that she didn't even view him as a him, but an it. I figured her mindset wasn't so much prisoner as "very smart trapped animal". I'll give it another looky-loo though and see if I can do anything."
Mason: "Mindest, shimindset. You just can't write Dash for crap."
Sketchpad: "I'm getting better, leave me be!"
This is one of those cases where Dash could be written one of two ways. She can be hard to convince of anything when she gets an Idea in her head (Not as Bad as AJ gets though!)
This is a situation where they're picking off stragglers from an invasion, she's already all riled up and would be a pain to convince that they're good.
If she bumped into him and found out by accident however, they'd most likely be fine, so long as he kept his head.
I halfways want to do some editing to this, but my workload is as loopy as the lunar goddess.
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Sketchpad: "Thanks for the input, everything helps!"
Mason: "And Arceus knows you need it."
Sketchpad: "Who the BUCK is Arceus?"
I must say that this is shaping up to be a great fic. Kinda curious about how rose will react though.
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Sketchpad: "Me too!"
Mason: "What do you mean, 'me too'?"
Sketchpad: "Oh, you think I plan this stuff out? I just open up the story and see what happens next!"
Mason: "... You're an idiot, you know that?"
Can't tell if two people, or just insane...
Anyways, quite enjoying the fic so far. My only complaint is that Monochrome Masquerade sort of breaks the four syllable rule, but he seems like a very interesting character. My only qualm is that Twilight did seem a little easy to convince, though I commend you for not wasting too much time on the interrogation. Quite a tricky little thing you had there, tough to write your way out of perfectly, but you seemed to handle it fairly well. I eagerly await to see what happens to our friend next.
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Mason: "Might I just say, I love the name."
Sketchpad: "... Creeper."
Mason: "Shut it! Anyway, no we're not insane... sometimes."
Sketchpad: "And I get what you're saying about Twi. It will be explained later, but after hearing him speak up about Rose and how he seemed to disprove of the method used to siphon more love power, she feels he deserves ONE chance."
Mason: "Or you just can't write for Dash OR Twi."
Sketchpad: "... When are you leaving?"
Mason: "Never."
are you done with the second chapter? also, why is there a changeling that not feed on "love?" is twilight happy about letting him go?
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will celestia pretend there is a monochrome masquerade
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Sketchpad: "Second chapter isn't even started yet."
Mason: "He does feed on love."
Sketchpad: "She is not happy."
Mason: "And we have no idea."
Sketchpad: "We cover everything?"
Mason: "I think so."
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*rolls eyes*
you need a PARTY CANNON!
Pinkie, I don't think that's what they need. Then what do they need?
A motivation. HIYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA * slams sledge hammer into Mason's leg* I will keep doing that every Monday until you finish the second chapter.See ya.
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Mason: "OH SWEET MUFFINS YOU PONIES ARE F***ING CRAZY!!!"
Sketchpad: "Celestia! The buck, AJ?! You can't use a sledgehammer to get rid of writer's block!"
Mason: "I'M NOT EVEN THE ONE WRITING THIS ONE!!!"
Sketchpad: "Alright, let's get you to Redheart. Geez, girls are buckin' crazy."
Mason: "Agreed."
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Hey! Ah didn't slam a hammer in the poor guy's leg! Dawn did!
Yep. I did.
Now you two apo.. aplog...argh darn these buckin' long words...say sorry ta me.
Commentor's notes: Dawn is my OC. Also, what the ponies add will be bolded.
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Sketchpad: "I apologize AJ, but I still say girls are crazy."
Mason: "Pretty pony..."
Sketchpad: "That'd would be the hospital drugs."
I really like where your story is going
But maybe you should get a better cover picture for it,
your story will get more attention when the picture looks good.
Yes, we humans are picture whores
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Mason: "What can I say, I love to draw my own stuff. I'll look into at least getting it drawn up in flash though."
Sketchpad: "You?! Please, you can barely use a tablet as anything other than a coaster!"
Mason: "You're seriously starting to irk me."
Very interesting, gonna follow this one.
MOAR!! Um... If that's not to much trouble...
Pretty decent so far. Keep it up.
too bad this is dead.