The life of Bent-G.: The one who has to choose

by NicLove

Chapter 1: Discovering

Chapter 1: Discoverer

“Bent-G.! Wake-up!” My mom called from the kitchen.
“I’ll be down in a sec, Mom!” I answered. I got out of bed, and went to my calendar: “Just two more months before my fifth birthday!” I said to myself. Afterwards I went straight to the door, passing my tea-set with all my dinosaurs and Army-Ponies drinking tea, while eating some imaginary-cake. I avoided stepping on my set of dolls that were lined-up for war.

I love playing war with my dolls then having Tea with my army of dinosaurs when it was all over.

I went down-stairs to the kitchen, my mom was levitating a frying pan with her magic, making pancakes, while my dad was reading the newspaper . When I was done eating the pancakes, my parents sat down with a serious look on their face.

“Bent ... I bet that you have noticed that... there’s something different with you, from the other kids?”

I knew that, I could still remember the day that I found out.

(Months ago)

“Mom.. Dad... where do babies come from?”

My parents look at one and other, then nodded their heads with a slight frown on their face. They went to the couch, sat, and levitated a book that said “the Phoenixes & the Manticores (the Birds and the Bees)”. I didn’t know how a book about animals would answer my question. Maybe they were going to start with where baby-animals come from? My parents gave another glance to one & other then decided to put the book on the side table, and started.

“Well... when a mare and a stallion REALLY love one another, they... give each other a special-hug.”

“A hug?” I replied.

“Yes, yes.” my parents said back to me.

I thought about it for a moment “Can you do that alone?” I asked.

“Noo.” they answered back. They know that there are species that reproduce asexually, but ponies weren’t one of them.

“Does it have to be a mare and a stallion, can’t you do it with two stallions or.. two mares?” I asked knowing couples that were that. Not knowing why ponies made a big deal about them.

“Umm..” They looked at one and other. They knew that they was a very rare spell that cold helped two mares to have a filly together, but for some reason the same spell couldn't make two stallions have a colt together. However they might need to find & know how the spell works.

I was about to ask more, but before I could, somepony was at the door, knocked on it. My parents went to open it . It was one of my parents’ friends; they left to have a chat in the kitchen leaving me on the couch. Starting to get bored,
I decided, to go outside and ask the ponies in the town, “Where do babies come from?”. But most weren’t big help.
The mother of the flower-Triplets, just fainted when I asked her.
Carrot Top’s mom said something about foals coming from a garden.
Vinyl Scratch’s mother said by making lovely music with one another.
Berry Punch’s mom said that if you drink a lot you would get a foal. I never understood why ponies would drink something that makes you act funny and become sleepy.
And the strange earth pony stallion with the hourglass cutie mark, kept rambling about Timey Wimey or something!
None of them made sense, why would you need exactly one mare and one stallion if foals came from gardens?
And now that I that I think about it, which one am I? And which one would I need to make a foal, do I need a stallion or a mare?
I went back home in frustration. When I got back, my parents were still talking with their friend. I saw that the book was still on the side table next to the couch.
I took the book of “The Phoenixes & the Manticores” and went to my room. I sat on my bed and started reading the book.

Skimming through the pages, the first part talking about the stories that I heard from the town’s pony, I found out really quickly that the book wasn’t about animals, the book was about an event called puberty, where a filly becomes a mare and a colt becomes a stallion. I was now more curious was I going to grow-up into a mare, who needs a stallion? or stallion, who needs a mare to make a foal? I flipped through the pages to one that had a growth chart. On the right side of the growth chart there was the average body of a grown mare and a grown stallion with transparent wings and horns. They were sitting on their flank with their back legs spread open wide. What they were showing made me uncomfortable, showing parts of the body that most ponies kept to themselves and their doctor. But based on what it said above the chart, it made sense why they would be showing that, yet, I still didn’t like to picture that that’s how my parents most likely look like. There was something off about those ponies´ body parts, something that I couldn’t put my hoof on. I shrugged it off and looked at the other part of the growth chart, on the left side of the growth chart there was the average body of both foals of my age, also with transparent wings and horns. I looked at myself in my mirror, my face looking like a mix of a filly’s and a colt’s. My eyelashes were half way between the length of the filly’s one and half the number. My muzzle was square yet round at the same time. I looked at the rest of my body confused; my hooves looked like they were between the ones of the filly’s and colt’s. I continued with the rest of my body, the same results came. I was even more confused now; I knew some stallions that had a physique that made them look like a mares and mares that were bulky making them look like a stallion, but even though those ponies were like that, I could still tell what gender they were. Yet for some reason I couldn’t tell what gender I was. I looked at more the images trying to find the answer. Then I noticed the parts between the legs of the two foals. Perplexed, I went to the door, closed and locked it, walking back to my mirror, looking back into it. Then I started removing my clothes. Levitating the book with my magic, I examined myself in the mirror. I was pretty sure that I was in possession of both of them. I opened my legs up…I was right. It’s at this point that I finally realized, “I’m both…” I began to cry.

Author's Note:

Can some-one please do a speal-sheck? please.

P.S.
xe = he/she
xem = him/her
xyr = his/her
xyrself/xemself = hisself/herself/himself

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[Osiris Grandeur]

P.S.
xe = he/she
xem = him/her
xyr = his/her
xyrself/xemself = hisself/herself/himself

Should be in the Author's note.

just 2 more months before my 5th birthday!

Capitalize the J and figure out a way for xem to say it out loud.

will eating some imaginary-cake. I avoided stepping on my set of dolls that were lined-up for war.

Is will a person? If so, the first letter should be capitalized and a comma should be right before him. Otherwise, what are you talking about?

will my dad was reading the news-paper.

Again with the will. Is it the father's name? Newspaper, not news-paper.

I could steel remember the day that I found-out

Still, not steel. found out, not found-out.

“the Phoenixes and the Manticores (the Birds and the Bees)”

I guess this works, but I really wouldn't do it. Just get rid of the book entirely. Have them tell xem the hug thing. You could actually probably stretch this out and have him ask around town. That would probably end badly, but be a bit of fun to read.

Before I could ask if I was a mare or a stallion somepony at the door knocked. My parents went to open it. It was one of my parents’ friends; they went and chatted in the kitchen leaving me on the couch. Starting to get bored, I took the book of “The Phoenixes and the Manticores” and went to my room. I sat on my bed and started reading the book.
I found out really quickly that the book wasn’t about animals, the book was about an event called puberty, where a filly becomes a mare and a colt becomes a stallion. I was now more curious—was I going to grow-up into a mare or into a stallion? I flipped to a page that had a growth-chart. On the right side of the growth-chart there was the average body of a grown mare and a grown stallion with transparent wings and horns. What they were showing made me uncomfortable, showing parts of the body that most-pony keeps to them self and their doctor. But based on what it said above the chart made sense why they would be showing that, yet still I didn’t like to picture that that’s how my parents most-likely look liked. There was something off about those pony’s’ body parts, some-thing that I couldn’t put my hoof on. I shrugged it off and looked at the other part of the growth-chart, on the left side of the growth-chart there was the average body of both foal of my age also with transparent wings and horns. I looked at myself in my mirror, my face looking like a mix of a filly’s and a colt’s. I looked at the rest of my body confused; my hooves looked like they were between the ones of the filly’s and colt’s. I continued with the rest of my body, the same results came. I was even more confused now; I knew some-stallions that had a body-figure that made them look like a mares and mares that were bulky making them look like a stallion, but even though those ponies were like that, I could still tell what gender they were. Yet I couldn’t tell what gender I was. Then I noticed the parts between the legs of the two folds. Perplexed, I went to the door, close and looked it, walked to my mirror, and removed my clothes. Levitating the book with my magic, I looked at myself in the mirror. I was pretty sure that I have both of them. I opened my legs up…I was right. It’s at this point that I finally realized, “I’m both…” I started to cry.

I honestly can't tell you what I see wrong with this. It just feels wrong. Maybe it's a little rushed. I think it is going a little fast. Quit using these (-) you should never use these unless your character is reading something that has those symbols on it.
That's everything I can see. I hope this helped

[NicLove]

6916777

You should never use these in a story. I suggest finding another way to tell your readers that they are unicorns.

Ok, I'll jest have them levitate and use magic.
p.s. The Earth-pony doctor that to !?

Should be set like this: My parents frowned. “How long do we have to make our choice?"

Can, thanks

A lot of people will claim Sexist if/when you chose its final sex.

That is life.

6916822

Should be in the Author's note.

it is.

Is will a person? If so, the first letter should be capitalized and a comma should be right before him. Otherwise, what are you talking about?

Ops, I meant
", well eating some imaginary-cake. I avoided stepping on my set of dolls that were lined-up for war."

Again with the will. Is it the father's name? Newspaper, not news-paper.

will, well. I for get.

Still, not steel. found out, not found-out.

sorry.

I guess this works, but I really wouldn't do it. Just get rid of the book entirely..

The book comes to play a bit more, later in the story, like xyr teen-years, and ...

Have them tell xem the hug thing.

Before the parents’ friends knocks !?

You could actually probably stretch this out and have him ask around town. That would probably end badly, but be a bit of fun to read.

To who ?

I honestly can't tell you what I see wrong with this. It just feels wrong. Maybe it's a little rushed. I think it is going a little fast. Quit using these (-) you should never use these unless your character is reading something that has those symbols on it.
That's everything I can see. I hope this helped

So, I should go more slowly !?
p.s. If you think this is fast, look at this

P.S. Can you see that/this ?

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Do you want the Google-Doc ?

[Osiris Grandeur]

6917119 Yeah that would work.
Welcome
Yep
Don't think I saw it
Alright then
It's alright
Same as previous
Alright then, just phrase it a little better. I didn't get the book until I was thirteen
Never mind then
Just anyone in town. Maybe Berry Punch?
yeah, stretch it out a little bit. Otherwise, the story moves too fast and people start to lose interest
I don't really want the Google Doc. It asks me for my gmail and I don't wanna give that out.

[NicLove]

6950588

Yeah that would work.

ok

Welcome

Yep

Don't think I saw it

it's ok

Alright then

It's alright

thanks

Same as previous

What do you mean ?

Alright then, just phrase it a little better.

what is not phrase well ?

I didn't get the book until I was thirteen

ok, and ?

Never mind then

why ? I'm thinking of changing that part

Just anyone in town. Maybe Berry Punch?

About the hug or what gender xe is ?

yeah, stretch it out a little bit. Otherwise, the story moves too fast and people start to lose interest

ok, your rite

I don't really want the Google Doc. It asks me for my gmail and I don't wanna give that out.

ok, sorry.

[Osiris Grandeur]

Same as previous answer
I mean, just bring it in a little better than just his mother and father telling him at five years old. If you remember, when you first find out about all that stuff, you lose your childhood forever. So maybe have Cheerlie or someone else bring it up? Or give a really good reason for them to tell xem early.
Have xem ask Berry about the talk in general.

[NicLove]

6950916 P.S. Can you please use the [quote ][/ quote] please

Same as previous answer

And what answer was that ?

I mean, just bring it in a little better than just his mother and father telling him at five years old.

But they didn't. They were going 2 do the stork-story

If you remember, when you first find out about all that stuff, you lose your childhood forever.

I learned how babies were made when I was.. 7

So maybe have Cheerlie or someone else bring it up?

ok, I'll have Cheerlie do that.
p.s. What other pony ?

Or give a really good reason for them to tell xem early.

Xe asked, and they want 2 ask what gender xe wants

Have xem ask Berry about the talk in general.

You see them as friends ?

[Osiris Grandeur]

It's alright
Then why did they bring out the book?
Wow... Guess I got lucky then...
Maybe... (If this was a random fic, I would say Celestia or Discord) Twilight?
That works, I guess...
Naw, but Berry Punch is best pony, so I try to suggest her every time.
gtg

[NicLove]

6951011

It's alright

What is alright ?

Then why did they bring out the book?

They were going to tell xem that xe is intersex, and ask what gender does xe want
To show xem what a filly look like and what does a colt looks like

Wow... Guess I got lucky then...

What do you mean and why ?

Maybe... (If this was a random fic, I would say Celestia or Discord) Twilight?

Why them ?

Naw, but Berry Punch is best pony, so I try to suggest her every time.

a, ok

P.S. Can you please use the [quote ][/ quote] please

[Osiris Grandeur]

What is alright ?

Never mind.

They were going to tell xem that xe is intersex, and ask what gender does xe want
To show xem what a filly look like and what does a colt looks like

Okay, that makes sense.

What do you mean and why ?

I managed to make it through 13 years of my life without knowing about the birds and the bees.

Why them?

Because it would be funny.

[NicLove]

6953973

Never mind.

ok

Okay, that makes sense.

ya

I managed to make it through 13 years of my life without knowing about the birds and the bees.

And you didn't know what why you dad was loling at the kid-movie

Because it would be funny.

ok

[Osiris Grandeur]

And you didn't know what why you dad was loling at the kid-movie

When you're a kid, you don't question that kind of stuff. You just enjoy the fact that your parents enjoy a movie as much as you do.

[NicLove]

6954007 But I knew why they were loling

[Osiris Grandeur]

6954079 I guess we had different childhoods growing up then.

[NicLove]

6954088 ya

[sailorcancer]

that's a very good first chapter that you've wrote.

[NicLove]

7153325 7153358 Thanks

[sailorcancer]

7154104 you're welcome.

[NicLove]

7156670 U 2 !

[sailorcancer]

7157309 * I give niclove a highfive.*

[NicLove]

7158599 Thanks ! :D

[sailorcancer]

7158600 you're welcome.
so how are you?

[NicLove]

7159991 ... good

[sailorcancer]

7159999 that sounds really great to hear.

[NicLove]

7160107 Ya.

p.s. can we have this chat in the PM

[sailorcancer]

7160110 that we can.

[great and powerful spike]

Great story so far, I love that you put Doctor whooves in the chapter. I hope you continue the story. If you need an editor just message me.

[NicLove]

7487931 Thanks will do

[NicLove]

8643892
You think I should put my story in that group ?
now ?

[Walabio]

This is potentially an important story. It shines light on the issues associated with the intersexed.

[NicLove]

8643918
ok, thanks

p.s. Do you want to help me with my story
make it better, make sure that everything is correct.

[Walabio]

8643924

Sure, but it is pretty good already.

[Walabio]

8643914

Sure, the story can go into the group.

[NicLove]

8643931Yes, thanks,
but make sure that I get every think rite about intersex.

8643936
now, or when it's done ?

[Walabio]

8643944

I can help with the story. As an example, most cases have genitals intermediate between male and female, but it is possible to have a case like Bent-G with both male and female genitalia.

You can add the story whenever you feel comfortable to the group. You can also make a thread in the forum asking for help if you want.

[NicLove]

8643978
What do you think ?
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/814257/the-meaning-of-g

[NicLove]

[NicLove]

[Ponyess]

Chapter 1: Discoverer

Feels like it is wasting words here
should have been easy to edit out?

[Ponyess]

Most of the story seems fine, but then you miss the entire Point of Paragraphs here.

I stil want to follow the foal, desiding what to do and who to be.

Will you make the choice, or leave it as is?

Though I guess this choice may be the cause of the Hiatus in the first place.

Then again, you could make a sequal for each option before you. I assume this isn't about naming one gender better or more important than the other here!

I enjoy the notion of the same sex couples being mentioned, as well. In context, I guess that just had to be said.

[NicLove]

11873084
Do you want to be my Editer ?

11873096
Thanks

Though I guess this choice may be the cause of the Hiatus in the first place.

it's mostly because I was/am helping a friend out with Their story

and trying to find a way to introdus
MoonRacer
Kirouac
FlashTruth
Farmer
and everything else that are part of the sequal(S)

[Ponyess]

11873390

What do you mean ?

the "Paragraph" is all Jumbled and messed up..

you're rite, I'll change that
thanks

You're quite welcome, just happy to help

Why not,
it's their life

Sometimes you just have to accept the fact that your story ends up divicive,
or you have to give up a perfectly fine and wholy enjoyable story
couldn't have that, now could we?

Now I/We just have to wait and see if your foal will choose?
From where I stand, you have four options available;
You can stand as you are, go female/male or neither?
Though I think this is up to Ben(t)-G to choose! (which the fun in the story)

[Ponyess]

11873394

Do you want to be my Editer ?

If ytou do continue the story, I guess I could consider+

it's mostly because I was/am helping a friend out with Their story

How is the story going?
I hope it is going well..

and trying to find a way to introdus
MoonRacer
Kirouac
FlashTruth
Farmer
and everything else that are part of the sequal(S)

Sequel(s)
of what?

[NicLove]

11873514

the "Paragraph" is all Jumbled and messed up..

do you want to help me edit this ?

You're quite welcome, just happy to help

Sometimes you just have to accept the fact that your story ends up divicive,
or you have to give up a perfectly fine and wholy enjoyable story
couldn't have that, now could we?

Now I/We just have to wait and see if your foal will choose?
From where I stand, you have four options available;
You can stand as you are, go female/male or neither?
Though I think this is up to Ben(t)-G to choose! (which the fun in the story)

I already know how the story ends
and how and why it goes their
bit I need to find a way to set up the sequal(S)

11873516

If ytou do continue the story, I guess I could consider+

Thanks
do you have Discord ?

If ytou do continue the story, I guess I could consider+

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Sequel(s)
of what?

of this story !