Lyra has been dating her human coltfriend for a little while now and wants to start a herd with Bon Bon. The problem is, Bon Bon doesn’t want to accept her feelings for the strange creature. Can the earth pony find love with the bizarre human?
Page generated in 0.039 seconds
Total duration
987 users online
2,253,789 hits today, 2,139,894 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
5741058
5741072 agreed
Hmm, reading the clop that always appears in the feature section makes me believe that the better statement would be: writing good, believable clop is hard... Maybe it's just me, but I believe you write some of the more believable/natural clop scenes of the clop that I've read.
Anyways, I feel sorry for Lyra. She knows what she is doing is wrong, but I do get the feeling that she genuinely believes this is the only way. If nothing else, seeing how Lyra is really running herself ragged could be what is needed to get Chris and Bon Bon to talk (and not necessarily Lyra's plan).
Someone really do that when she came? weird, my girl won't scream but only moan.
This.
i.imgur.com/1jPNHP4.gif
5741072
Oh I mean I hope the descriptions of how tired Lyra is won't put people to sleep. when I was writing those parts I was nodding off a little lol. But that was probably from the lack of sleep I have been getting.
5741200
Wait... I don't get it... why is the sloth scratching it's butt?
5741143
I don't know about that... I have read some questionable clop in the featured box before... I'm not sure if the featured section is really a good check for quality. but I'm glad you think what I have is good.
5741377 img0.joyreactor.com/pics/post/condom-gif-comics-nsfw-920797.gif
Hmm, I'm happy to see another update to this story but forgive that I simply skimmed through this chapter really fast and noted some of the dialogue or most accurately took a look at only the dialogue during the clop for the most part to see what they're saying. It's not that I'm not interested in the clop, I really like your clops scenes as they're genuine and heartwarming compared to most and I did enjoy the "Exploration" one from the first story, however I'm more interested in seeing the whole "How Chris and Bon Bon Finally Bond Together" part of the story and I want to read that more than the clop.
Though once this is all said and done I'll go back to the clop chapters and read them from start to end.
I know I've gotten reader's block a lot when writing my stories which causes me to stop my writing and put it off for days until something comes to me because I want the story to flow together the way I envision it and have the characters come alive in the scene with the personalities to the fullest. I try my best to perform the best of my abilities to write a good story (would like it to be one of the best) but an enjoyable and memorable story nonetheless.
I cannot wait until next chapter! Though I hope the whole "hate train" on Chris isn't bad...
I don't want to see "Everypony Hates Chris" fic here, I want to see him lovable to the species and be on a more friendly level with him.
PS: You mentioned in your story summary you drew the artwork cover for your fanfic and I must say it's gorgeous and I would like to know, what program did you use to make it? Paint Tool SAI? Photoshop? GIMPS? I plan on drawing a cover artwork for my story as well with my main character Chris on his butt looking up to see the Mane 6 around him smiling and interested with him, with Celestia, Luna, and Chrysalis in the back looking at the group... also Spike is there as well behind Twlight's leg looking at my OC. This is for my Anthro one.
Also what's the style you used to drew the picture for the CG-like look? Paint Spray, Watercolor for example.
I like to know to have the same visual artstyle for my cover art as well as it looks professional, gorgeous, and easy to look at.
Please and thank you!
LUNA! i found a nightmare! fix it!
5741557
There is a very good reason why I section the clop into its own chapter and its for the vary reason you stated. A lot of people would prefer not to read about the more intimate times with ponies so I make all that junk skip able. You really didn't even need to read the dialog in this chapter since everything that happens here will be stated again later. So you can skip the clop if you like and there is nothing to forgive.
Also... Who hates Chris? I know a lot of people find his actions questionable, witch is fine that's what I expected, but I haven't herd any hate about him yet. I mean I'm sure there are people who hate him... but I haven't heard about it.
And to answer your questions about my art. I use Photoshop and SAI the most. As for the style? Umm... well its my style? I'm not sure how to really answer that one, because I just do what I do and it ends up looking like that. Unless you mean like... the media I use witch would be all digital?
5741399
5741593
Lets just say... there's a reason I keep saying they entered into the dreamscape.
5741557
Stories where the majority love the out-of-worlder human are a dime a dozen and not that interesting or immersive. If something showed up next door to you with nine wiggling tentacles, six heads, and oozing slime out of a giant mouth on its chest, would you be all up on it wanting to be buddies (assuming you aren't a stereotypical anime schoolgirl)? Because that's effectively what a human is in a world of ponies. So completely alien and odd that they're not sure if they're supposed to befriend it or keep away. Ponies being the herd animals they are, skittish and such, would choose the latter option because their instincts caution them to be careful so as to increase survival chances. It'd take some serious events or a very long period of acclimatizing for people to warm up to him.
Likewise, the reverse is also true, when it's done in a completely retarded way where everyone hates for no reason rather than good, justifiable reasons. Both of these are factors in the Gary Stu/Reverse-Stu labeling that this fic is avoiding wonderfully. Which is rare, considering the main character is a human male hooking up with a pony - most of those stories tend to be horrible -Stuist fics.
5742287
I like you Aurora. Your awesome.
Chris must be the most chivalrous human that ever existed to not go fuck happy. Well, maybe not the most chivalrous, but still gentlemanly all the same.
He must care about getting blue-balled either...
5/5 would read again.
5742572
Yay!
5742568
But... But... Lyra was so tired... and she passed out... You wouldn't do that if your lover was really tired?
5742748
Yes.
5742748
5742749 Honestly, I'd think most people would try and get her to bed, if you see someone you care about dearly, drenched in sweat and a minute from passing out, shouldn't you care about them more then their demands?
Regardless, I do still enjoy this story even with my small nitpicks.
Hope this ends on a fun note and it's and even more fun trip!
5701311
I thought I commented one this. Well anyways... I love this.
Thank you, today was my birthday. And I got to read the next chapter of the story.
Hey Luna get your Shadowly flank over here and fix this nightmare in to a dream.
Like I said, I think Cadfael would be a great name for Bon Bon and Chirs first colt...
5742815
Oh wait you where being sarcastic. Sorry that last comment went right over my head. Yeah I thought that was weird when you say that he's chivalrous. lol
I hope you can still enjoy the fic. There will be a lot of shenanigans to come.
5742840
Whoa! Happy birthday! I hope you enjoyed the chapter and that is a nice name, but I think its a little early for figuring out what their foal will be named. They might not even get together in the end. Who knows.
5742982
Bwahahaha! I love your name. And I'm working on it as we speak!!! I'm hoping it wont be to long of a wait for you guys.
Jeez , the way Lyra was sounding at the end, she's about to royally fuck up. I thought she was just gonna lock them up together in a cabin off a while all 90s sitcom style; now she sounds like she's about to Frankenstein them together or some shit.
5742568
That's less a matter of chivalry than it is biology. Once we get worked up we enter a mating frenzy not much different than animals do once in heat/rut (albeit at much less intensity). It takes something sharply contrasting to jog our consciousness out of the pheromone-induced haze so we can start making rational decisions again (calling someone's name in a tone not related to sexual activity, a sound not congruent with current sexual congress, etc). So, it's more that Chris is keeping cool rather than becoming lust-addled like normally happens - probably because equine pheromones don't affect a human's brain in the same way. Otherwise it becomes very difficult for us to process higher thought activity without some form of training, be it intentional or simply familiarization's passive training.
5743068
The sitcom cabin is still going to happen lol. That's what she was talking about, but I could see how it seems like she was going to do something else.
5742131 Let say, keep relax, and everything will be easy.
Other wise....if you don't relex....i wili...watching you.
5743230
That link is broken.
5743393 seem Russian site don't like other nation some weird reason.
derpicdn.net/img/view/2012/11/13/150633__photo_animated_human_upvotes+galore_edit_lyra_irl_semi-dash-grimdark_hoers_funny.gif
5743473
LOL! Real life Lyra.
5743479 You waifu.derpicdn.net/img/view/2013/4/24/307303__safe_applejack_animated_human_wat_apple_lip+bite_funny_bucking_fun.gif
You bonus: derpicdn.net/img/view/2013/11/18/475060__safe_applejack_comic_human_blushing_artist+needed_blood_anon_topless_anonymous.png
Why Bon bon hate human stuff?
derpicdn.net/img/view/2013/5/18/328120__safe_animated_lyra_upvotes+galore_bipedal_bon+bon_lyra+heartstrings_sweetie+drops_frown_door.gif
Lyra Jack.
derpicdn.net/img/view/2012/8/31/87078__safe_twilight+sparkle_meme_exploitable+meme_g1_human+fetish_heart+throb_clopping+meme_prince+charming_through+the+door.png
5742129
I meant the "pony characters" in your story, not the readers of your story silly! XD
I remember your last comment to me about ponies hating on him in the upcoming possibly when I asked if the ponies finally got already to liking him now and that's what you replied back to me, got it memorized?
I find your Chris quite likable by the way. Sorry for the misconception of my previous message.
And a combination of Photoshop and SAI? So you use Photoshop for lineart or coloring and then use SAI for lineart or coloring before switching to the other program to finish it?
And when I mean "artstyle" I don't mean "your style of drawing things" I meant "methods used in Photoshop and SAI to get the coloring and shading your characters". I wanted to ask what tutorial videos you watched to help you experiment around to get the coloring and shading of your characters.
There are different ways of coloring and shading like Watercoloring or Paint Spraying or CG Coloring with the Photoshop and/or SAI tools for drawing and coloring, that's what I meant for "artstyle".
My apologizes for not addressing it clearly enough, I need to work on that a bit.
5742287
Well my story starts off with the ponies genuinely friendly to my Human OC, but other ponies like from Canterlot and possibly a few other areas like Manehattan well scoff at him and show disgust so he's not "loved" by all ponies, but at least he's accepted by a lot of them and I like to have the lessons of the past episodes reflect on their growth as well (and they're not ENTIRELY like real horses/ponies and so they're not as skittish) like the one with Zecora and not judging a book by its cover.
The lesson learned from there they apply to my Human OC to get to know him better... plus he didn't come into town dressed in a cloak and appear in an "ominous" look with their faces hidden like Zecora did (which made it easier for the ponies to be scared) and the Human appears in his regular casual clothing and he looks "huggable" by some ponies and very sweet and non-threatening looking ever. Helps that he's sort of shorter than the Anthro Ponies too.
But I don't mind some realism a bit with some characters not accepting other races so openly, but I've seen those stories too often and it kinda drags my down spiritual a bit so that's why I'm going with my way of telling a story.
Love it, hate it, I don't mind it's my story I want to share and I know not everyone will like it or think it's their cup of tea but it's how I envision my tale of a HiE story to be.
everyone's face reading this chapter
i.imgur.com/YnHG3gu.gif
so worth.
5743643
Hahaha! Peacekeeper, your the best.
As nice as the quality of your clop is I'm always a little disappointed when I see a chapter with that [Clop] mark because it means that the story has been more or less put on hold and I'm going to have to wait even longer for the plot to move forward.
I'm very impressed, within a month you've managed to publish 50+k words. I'm curious to see if you'll enter the November novel challenge thingy. I plan to try and enter myself.
Anyway, I'm curious to see where you go with this story. I mean Lyra's meddling has to cause some major problems for all them. Bon Bon isn't comfortable with Chris. Will the whole cabin thing actually work out, or just make things worse?
Can't wait to read more.
5743860
Well this is more or less a clop fic. It just has a story with it. I'm sorry this part held me up though. It did take me longer then I wanted to get this part out.
5744010
I don't think I will be doing that challenge. That looks like something for real writers.
I'm supper excited to start posting the cabin chapters. I hope you guys like them lol. A lot of stuff is going to happen.
5743568
OH! Well the pony hate thing wont come up for a while and might not even be in this story.
And I use SAI for line art and painting. Then I use Photoshop to polish everything up. Also Photoshop has nice tools like warp and stuff.
And the style thing. Well I just learned how I do stuff over time. I didn't really watch any tutorials. I just played around until things started to look right and use different tool to help get the job done faster. Sorry I know I'm not helping much.
5744697
Ah, I see! Well I prefer seeing friendly ponies toward Chris here like with the Bat Ponies at that restaurant in the past chapters, I liked them.
I see so you used SAI for lineart and coloring and with the layers you established you use Photshop to finish up the job. This is helpful here, thanks! Did you watch any tutorials for the lineart and coloring in SAI or did you experiment around? Mind giving me some tips on it so I could learn from it and improve my own drawing skills and digital drawing skills when using SAI? I got the Wacom Cintiq 13hd Tablet for digital drawing so I can get a better feel when drawing my pictures in SAI. Wacom Bamboo was OK for a bit, but it was so awkward looking back and forth from the tablet to computer screen to make sure I was drawing right.
And I see, that's OK. It looks CG so I'll look at some Photoshop tutorials on it and experiment around to get the lightning, shading, and coloring right when I do the final touch up points on my cover art I plan.
Thank you for answering my questions and taking a little out of your time to help me.
Look forward to the next chapter!
5744861
Well I would have to sit down with you to show you what I do... it's hard to explain... and I don't think people here want me to start spamming the comments like that.
And for tablets, your not supposed to look down at them. Your picture is on the computer screen, so that's what you need to look at, but you have a cintiq so you don't need to worry.
My best advice is just keep playing with the tools and drawing. Also watch others and see how they do things.
Personally i doesnt like when do clop and nonclop chapters. Its looks like "here is part you need to read. aaaaand there is some porn i just write for some weird people and this chapter doesnt matter anything".
Oh my English is terrible...
But anyway awesome chapter. Wait impatiently next chapter.
5744686
It has a lot of story with it, to the point that it outnumbers the clop three to one. And it's the story that I'm on the ride for. I'm ok with the clop, I like it even, but it's not why I check for a new chapter every night.
5743643 that was my wife's face while editing it
.... Mine too actually
5747496
Understandable. Well I can tell you right now... if there is clop again... It wont be for a while.