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JustinTime2Win
Hello mares and gentle colts. Welcome to my page! If u ponies want anything specific for me to write then tell me. So enjoy my stories!!!
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I recommend making your chapters longer. Around 1,000 words is good, but less than that, and the message each chapter tries to get across is cut short.
5600893 yea I was kinda in a rush Ill promise to make chapters longer
There are multiple errors with both punctuation and capitalization, plus I suggest you learn the difference between "your" and "you're".
Also, if this is Twilight Sparkle hanging out with a young Sombra, where's your alternate universe tag?
Alright. Let's start the list
- you would've won generic title of the week if I didn't see a story that literally copied the title word for word of the first Modern Warfare game.
- grammar is shoddy and redundant. Example: "is Sombra really who he really is" has one too many "really"s.
- do you even know what tags are for? Let me give you a hint: no story is both a tragedy and a comedy. By definition the two are polar opposites.
- beef up your summary. That tells us nothing at all about the plot.
- your chapters are astoundingly short. If you can't write the chapter to 1000 words, then either put more meat on its bones or scrap that scene.