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596660 yeah sorry for anticlimactic ending but I wanted to end on a happy note
596683 holy shit me too when I was writing it
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in case you don't remember the cover pic I based her wedding attire on this
596709 *legasp* i think a sequel IS in fact in order...this pic could in fact be Twilight and Luna's daughter? tell me what you guys think
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Awesome! Besides a sequel, I think some chapters especially these towards the end might be deserving of a reworking/touch up.
596717 YESYESYESYESYESYES
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And so, the Marriage of Twilight Sparkle, the Unicorn turned Alicorn turned General turned god who saved the world, and Princess Luna, the goddess of the night sky, was set in motion.
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Best line of the entire story.
596717
I approve!
596717 A sequel about their daughter? Terrific idea! Make it happen!
why why did the story end THERE MUST BE A SEQUEL OR YOU DIE IN THE DARKNESS OF YOU SOUL BY DEATH INCARNATE
596773 i know there were some pacing issues but I'm happy with them. how would you revise them?
I have a question
Now when the Twi is Alicorn she kept all her abilities that she already had?
and the motive with Dim Sun seems to be cut off
596873 Yeah sorry about that...my mind was changing what was going on as I wrote it, but I'll touch more on that a bit during the Sequel :3
Ok, i started my comment on 33, then i just came here
C33:
...I...ehh...umm...argh...ok, for one...this felt anticlimactic and rushed toward the end...great story otherwise. But anticlimactic and rushed toward the end.
Epilogue:
True, its a happy note to end on, although it feels out of place with such a dark and edgy story. Also, your update pace was an amazing speed, and you didn't sacrifice quality for quantity, but this wasn't really the ending i thought we would end up with. (i would say what i was thinking, but this is your story not mine.) As a whole, a very good read. I would love to see a sequel to this.
What do we want?
SEQUEL!!!
When do we want it?
AS SOON AS POSSIBLE!!!
596907 gonna go write some chapters for other stories and finish at least one of them before i start the sequel because, like this story, I want to go straight through it before I lose the drive for it
I LOVE HOW FAST YOU UPDATE you might be worth following out of all the authors ive read from
596717yess do it
also retouch the ending a little bit
596986 eh for now I'll just leave it, I was distracted while writing it. I'll probably end up rewriting the entire last chapter and maybe split it into two, but for now I'm moving on
596833
I think a bit more length and detail into the battle scenes would be a good start. Following that up, I think there could be a lot of content added to Twilight's conversations.
Also pacing wasn't bad, just too quick in places.
As for the sequel, what about twilight still being lead, but the other characters be the children of her teammates?
I liked getting the full story rather quickly, though i strongly felt that the entire series could have been 3-4x as long, not chapter wise, but in individual chapter length. Please consider this constructive criticism, but despite Twilight being badly wounded no less than 4 times, there was very little sense of threat, they were not put in true jeapordy, everything always worked out fine, and Twilight was always back on her feet quickly. I feel that there was a lack of conflict elsewhere as well, places where interpersonal conflicts could have arisen, they were glossed over, where details could have been added, there were none. The story was a decent one, but i just felt it lacked a dimension that could have truely made it shine. I hope to see more work from you in the future, and i hope to see you improve. Don't be afraid to explore the pain and interpony relationships, that is where a lot of the meat of some stories arise from.
Cool Story
597036 I'd rather not think too much on the sequel until i start writing it to avoid losing focus on what i choose to pick back up which will most likely be EQU or HaN
597048 there's nothing I can do about the chapter length, it's an unconscious reaction for me for some reason...once i hit four pages my mind thinks the chapter should be done. I've tried to extend the lengths, it's just for some reason I can't write enough to fill the chapter up and keep it all relevant. in the sequel I'll try to improve upon that though
as for everything turning out ok in the end, for it to not turn out ok someone important would have had to die and I wasn't going to do that. the lack of conflict elsewhere was intentional, it was starting in Equestria. the reason most of the other races agreed to help was because if they didn't and Equestria was lost, they were next. technically I'm still just an amateur, and I'm a rather antisocial sixteen year old guy so I'm not the best with the rest of that stuff but i try
597107lol...so is my algebra grade
597085
Yeah I understand, I was just seeing so much I decided to put in my two bits about it. Regardless or that, I do think some touching up would be good especially in the scene with Twilight's parents and the ending battle.
597185 I was trying to imply that with all of her friends there giving her power the fight was trivial to her. I'll redo that last chapter later though
well to be honest the ending seemed a bit rushed it felt weird going so far to recruit and shit and boom it felt like they did to much for such a sadexcuse of a bad guy i mean comeon he got raped in one chapter.
other than that it was awsome and fast story holy shit you love writing dont you?
and before i forget how come almost every story on this site is well gay i mean almost in every story the mane 6 is lesbians how come?
Haha, well thats a good B-day present as any. Great story my friend!
you punched out this entire story in 11 days...words are insufficient to describe how crazy that is...
damn awesome story all in all, the last 3-4 chapters or something like that almost felt rushed to me; but in the end you tied everything together nicely pace wise. someone already touched upon the subject of "Dim Sun" or whatever her name was, so ill skip that.
as for a sequel; GO FOR IT!
It was a great story and im happy to know about the sequel.
All that epic AND a sequel, you are truly spoiling us!
I say if you add a sequel, can I suggest an OC for it? If the answer is yes, I'll PM you. Oh, and I think twins might be in order.
A sequeal you say? Hell yes! Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaasssssssseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! This story was epicly awesomely amazing.
i just want to say your awesome, and thank you Dark0592.
597792 yes I'll take OCs and twins will be the main characters. technically not twins but close enough
598796
Cool, well I made up an OC a while ago but I never actually used him in anything until BigWig6666 asked for OCs for his fic, so I described Rising Knight to him, and now he's one of the main characters in BigWig's fic. Anyway, I'll PM Knight's details to you ASAP. You can alter them to suit the story as much as you need to. If you want, I can also give you a list of techniques I made up for him in relation to one of his special skills.
I'll miss this story so bad and I wish there would be more as well
596773 agreed the ending was short and the secong ending didnt seem like apart of the story more like a troll chapter other then that BRAVO!
SEQUEL!!!SEQUEL!!!SEQUEL!!!
(P.S. I liked, no LOVED your story)
Loved the story but i had to slow down reading to figure out some typos throught the story not that big a deal though. Oh and something that i find funny is that the only reason i read this fic was because the cover pic was freaking bad ass(no offence or anything) but im glad i did read it.
A sequal would be great too.
601054 lol the cover pics usually do bring in more people than the summary
And thus ends the tale of OP twilight
The Element of Magic
The Ursa-major Slayer
The Hero
The Vampire
The Lunar-Loved
The Friend-abilities Empowered
The General
The Alicorn
The Eternally Married
Great story, I loved it.
And for how fast you released the chapters....
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602018 dear lord, i had to resist the urge to hi-five my screen...I hope you will settle for the much less flashy comment box Brohoof? /)?
602045
sure
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602268 ...fuck dude you win...you win everything
At last we all get to the point where many of us wish that never show up, the ending of a great series
i am completely loss for words so i give you this:
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now that was said and done, time to start reading the series again
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it's over?! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_RageFace.png
I started saying "OH MY GOD IT'S THE OMEGA CLOPIFICATION!!!" near the beginning.
(insert dirty thoughts here)
Oh the possibilities are endless!
This was a great story I do hope you make a sequel this story has a lot of potential I want to see how many ponies chose to stay vamponies as a show of respect to there General Twilight Sparkle