Lauren laid there on the couch with one of the pillows underneath her head. Since for her it was still the middle of the night, she was feeling rather sleepy. After all, she had been woken up at around two in the morning. She knew that Celestia most likely wanted to talk to her, but sleep seemed more and more inviting with every passing minute.
Eventually, she dozed off back into her sleep. About fifteen minutes later, a few of the maids came by to inspect the cleanliness of the hallways. The sleeping Lauren didn't go unnoticed by them, they both took a double take what was laying on the couch.
“Uh, hey Feather Duster, you’re seeing this right?”
“I think so. What do ya think it is Silverware?”
“Beats me, it looks like a monkey that has forgotten most of its fur.”
The doors behind them opened up. Quickly realizing who it was, they both gave a respectful bow to Celestia. The Solar Diarch eyed over to the couch to find Lauren there, fast asleep. She craned down her neck to their eye level. “Feather Duster, Silverware, would you two mind doing me a favor?” They nodded. “I need you to take her,” she pointed to the couch “and put her in my room for her to get some sleep.”
“As you wish,” they both said, Silverware lit up her horn to gently lift Lauren off from the couch.
“Put her in my bed,” Celestia added.
“Why?” Feather asked.
“Because, this here is somepony who means quite a lot to me, and she has come such a long way. So, I think she should have my bed for the time being until she awakes.”
“But, who and what is she?”
“I’ll tell you later. But for now, please do as you’re told. Oh, and one more thing: I need you two to make sure that this should be kept a secret for now.”
They nodded.
“Now get her off to bed.”
As the maids carry the sleeping Lauren off, Private Arrowhead asked, “You do know that Equestria will have to find out about her eventually, your Majesty?”
“I do think that one way or another, my ponies will find out about her. We can't keep her hidden for long, as ponies working in the castle will notice her. I just need to think how to tell everypony about this.”
“What about Luna?”
“I’m going there right now to tell her. Besides, she needs to know this anyway. And Private Arrowhead, I need you to do the same and keep this a secret until further notice.”
“Yes, your highness.”
Celestia made her way to the part of the castle where her sister’s room was. It wasn't too difficult to find the dark double doors with a few of the Lunar guards at attention. The guards gave their salutes as she approached the door to knock.
“Luna, are you up? I need to speak with you.” There was no reply. “Luna?” she opened the door to let herself in. As expected, Luna was under the blankets with several pillows burying most of her head.
“Luna. Wake up.”
“No.”
“Lu, this is important, wake up.”
Luna slowly sat up, causing an avalanche of pillows to fall. “We hope that thou hast a good reason for waking us up at this time of day.”
“Three things: first, again, it's 'I' and not 'we.' Second, yes I do. And third, it’s about mother, she’s… She came back.”
Luna’s eyes shot wide open, “MOTHER IS HERE!?!?!”
It took a few moments for Celestia’s ears to stop ringing. “Yes, she’s here.”
“Wait, where exactly is she?”
“She’s sleeping in my room for the time being.”
“Sleeping?”
“Tired out it seems.”
“She must have had a long journey here then. Very well, we- I shall wait.”
“But there’s something else that you need to know. Mother… Isn’t exactly the way we remember her.”
“What dost thou- pardon, what do you mean, is she ill?”
“No, she’s just… well-”
“Spit it out, what’s wrong with mother?”
“She’s a child,” Celestia blurted out. This gave her younger sister a very confused look.
“I am lost here.”
“I know it’s rather hard to grasp, but it’s true, our mother is here, yes. But somehow, in some way, she is much, much younger here.”
“How did she get here?” Luna asked, now getting out of bed.
“Do you know the tapestry of Clover the Clever, the one that is getting a restoration?”
“What about it?”
“Behind it, we found that there was a hole in the wall.”
“And what is so unusual about that?”
“Luna, there is nothing on the other side of that wall. But the hole made it seemed as if there’s a room on the other side.”
“Hmm. That does sound rather peculiar, but what does this have to do with Mother?”
“I’m getting to that, the hole itself was only big enough for one of our ponies to go through. So I summoned one of my guards who were nearby. He told me, what he found on the other side was a bedroom, her bedroom in the middle of the night. Apparently, she followed him back here.”
“And then what?”
“I saw them both crawling out of the hole, but Sister, I noticed something with her. She didn’t recognize me. At all. This makes me wonder-”
“Let us guess, that she may be not has yet dreamed of Equestria yet.”
“That’s what I’m worried.”
“How so?”
“Think about it Luna, she somehow came into Equestria before she’d even fully dreamed of it. What would happen while she’s here that would make her not want to create us? What if she vows to never create our world? What would happen then?”
“That’s rather a very dark thought.”
“Oh come on, you were thinking of it too.”
The two Sisters stood there in silence.
“Well, what do you propose to do then?”
“That’s why I’m here with you. I mean, Discord has just been reformed and Twilight is almost ready, there are a billion things that can go wrong.”
“Twilight…” Luna trailed off before she formed an idea, “Sister! That’s it!”
“What?”
“Hear u- me out here. What if we can influence her without her realizing it?”
“Care to explain?”
“What if we get the elements to meet her? That way, later on, she might be inspired by them, and she goes home to grow up to create this world. Sister, it’s a self-fulfilling prophecy!”
“I don’t know. But there’s something else that I can’t get off of my mind.”
“And that is?”
“I know she’s a child, but should we tell her she’s our mother?”
Very interesting.
I guess your decision how to continue depends on how you want to portray the adult Lauren, now.
I would think, I you wanted her to be an all-knowing creator, she should now about this time paradox.
If, on the other hand, you want her to create everything with unknowing innocence you should avoid to tell her.
I would like to read both, first they try to hide it from her and have a hard time doing so, but then, Lauren proofs to be to smart for that and asks the right questions. Finally they tell her and right then, when you could easily end the story THEN you should step on the gas as it would surely be pretty entertaining to see them handle all the problems that will arise with her knowing everything in advance. Especially if you add Discord.
Just imagine how Discord tries to manipulate the innocent child but ultimately only achieves what has already been predetermined:
Him getting created the way he has been created.
Enjoyed your second chapter as well. This could become one outstanding story.
Keep it up! I'll be awaiting you next chapters
i'm enjoying this story. and i must say i've never read a story like this before, i'm interested to see where this goes
stay classy
very.... interesting...
do go on
Why would they tell her she's their mother? Wouldn't that get her asking questions until it comes around to her dreaming of Equestria? Besides the being too young bit.
Becoming more meta by the minute.
5311817 I don't see why anyone is complaining, besides some spelling errors, this is pretty well written compared to most of the stories on this site
5313011 in my opinion, I don't care that much if the author acts cranky towards people on here, not every story that's on here is going to be perfect or how we want it, but that's to be expected on a sight where anyone can write a story, with talent or no. And it's just plain rude when someone moans and complains about the story, when they aren't writing one themselves.
I haven't read this.
Just saw it on what hot.
Dunno why people seem to hate/love it.
Don't care.
Will get around to reading.
Very interesting concept.
Gave me a brainfart almost as big as my own imagination multiverse theory.....
I'm going to stop thinking about this and come back when I am prepared
I like this story... I like it alot
First congratulations on the Featured! Second I am absolutely loving this story so far, keep up the amazing work.
Wait, you talk to us. Isn't that enough?
No, I want cool powerstuffs like you guys!
Would you pick mine or Darkus's?
Hmm... Darkus. He's got pretty much every power I wanted ever!
I just hope you wouldn't abuse them...
If he included that sentence in his comment, there's no doubt he'd try not to.
Good point.
Anyway, nice story, dude! It's quite the read!
Tricky slope Luna went down. Careful there man.
I say, at least for now, it's probably best not to tell her she's their mother. She probably wouldn't understand what that means.
I wonder if Lauren knows how babies are made and Tia tells her that she's their mother. She probably would be grossed out.
I think that ther should be a flashback of some sort and the princesses should 'tell' us about how they remember their mother.
Wibbly-Wobbly Timey-Wimey...stuff.
ok I am interested I will be watching this to see if it is going any ware.
has good possibility's as of now.
I don't care what happens, just so long as Celestia is struck by lightning. I don't care how it happens, as long as it happens.
5313541 Don't know, but she must be struck by lightning.
This seems to be a story to watch, I am certain I will enjoy where this story goes.
yay
The implications of this story......
The scene where lauren meets celestia seems rushed. And you'd think they'd be more surprised to see each other.
My mind is broken! I love this!
a bit short but worth reading
my mind is broken.. from confusion.. yet, im not confused continue please! this is great
My life to yours... lord-sama~
"It's Lauren," she said. "My name is Lauren Faust."
Doc Brown: "GREAT SCOTT!!" *faints*
Then appears the 'TO BE CONITUNED' title card.
very interesting and very good, i would say yes to telling her, would make for interesting interaction/plot stuff
Time paradoxes are the most fun things. Especially if one party is oblivious.
A few minor mistakes here and there, but apart from that it's an interesting read
Please, do continue.
And Alice fell down the rabbit hole.
Very curious where you take this.
Worth mentioning that Discord's reformation (and Twilight becoming a Princess) runs contrary to Lauren Faust's canon.
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Nah, this is ad hominem. You don't have to be a creator to be a critic. People shouldn't have to write horsewords just to validate their misgivings.
Keep in mind that the vast majority of your audience (like, 90%+) will not be writers. And if that group does not enjoy your work, then there's probably a reason why, even if they don't have the experience to articulate it academically.
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Forgiven them for what, exactly? For being honest with how they feel of your work?
Personally, I'd try to look at it a little more constructively. If you got rejected, perhaps it means that you can do better than you did. Rather than being bitter about it, it's far more productive to see what you can learn from it, figure out why it was rejected, and either improve it or strive to do better next time.
Imagination and execution always come hand in hand. You cannot be successful solely on the basis of one or the other. An idea isn't worth very much unless you can put it into practice.
Also, funnily enough, I had an idea for a fic in which Lauren Faust invented FIM after having been spirited away to Equestria as a child. I never wrote it, for multiple reasons (insulting to Lauren's creativity and effort spent creating FIM, plotline didn't mesh with how FIM was even created, etc.), but I'm pretty sure a lot of people have had the same or similar ideas.
Just a note: Normally, Celestia is referred to as the 'diarch' of the sun. 'Diarchy' means there are two equal rulers (Celetia and Luna, in this case). 'Monarchy' is when there is only one ruler (Cadence's rule over the Crystal Empire is a monarchy).
Anyway, my call is this: Celestia and Luna decide that it's best if Lauren not remember anything. So, they use one of Star Swirl's neuromantic spells to dull her memory of her time in Canterlot (and I hope the Mane Six make an appearance) before putting her back on her bed. She wakes up with the memories dulled to that of a dream. However, it is a dream that comes back to her time and time again.
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Because I can't give this comment more than one upvote, take it from Chuck and Harrison.
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You just said everything I wanted to.
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5314871 I'm not saying people can't be critics, i'm just saying that they don't need to be complete jerks about the review, it's fine if what they say is informational and helpful to the writer, but once they start tearing the author a new one, then that's when i find it wrong. Though I will concede with some of the points you made towards me and CrackedInkWell..
5315089 Oh, well in that case, I definitely agree with you. Everyone should be courteous and respectful to each other, especially when criticizing someone else's work.
I think part of the reason why criticism in general has such a negative stigma is because so many critics are just plain assholes about it, which causes creators to go on the defensive instead of taking it to heart. Then it becomes a flamewar. We're being compelled to fear it as a result, which really sucks, because critique is such an integral tool that we use to better ourselves and our craft.
I think a lot of critics just forget sometimes that the whole point of critique is to help others, not to tear them down. It's kind of sad, really.
Oh wow. best story concept EVER. and a pretty good story at that.
Whelp i was warned to bad i didn't heed his warning oh wheal
5315146 Don't get worked up. I've never seen a positive comment by that poster.
I'm not entirely sure anyone can really change the future. I mean, if you would be able to change the future to make it better, then the event which makes you want to change the future never happens and you wouldn't need to go on a time travel. That's why I think, when you travel in the past and change a particular event and then travel bakc to the future, you will just come to a "new" created dimension.
No, I'm not high.
No, I'm not dunk.
I wrote this stuff in full possession of my mental sanity... mostly.