The journey

by eduvera18

Chapter 1

The journey

Description by Zecora on the night of the incident that caused the big hole on the night of the full moon:

The everfree forest was quiet that night, the sky was clear and it was full moon,the animals were nowhere to be seen, they where hidden of an unknown presence, even the dangerous manticores didn't dare to confront the strange figure that was walking that night, the strange visitor who was causing fear in the depth of the forest was covered in a dark robe that perfectly merged with the darkness of the night and the only thing that make him visible was a strange green glow coming eyes, the silently figure kept walking for hours, he didn't stop to rest at any moment or even show any sign exhaustation and even the agressive roars of the wild fauna of the forest didn't made him step back.
After many more hours the presence arrived to a strange edification in the middle of the forest, it was partially destroyed and they were only ruins of the place but even in this shape the building was easily recognizable as a temple. The presence walked slowly to the ancient temple, as the presence advanced to the building the glow that came from his eyes illuminated the inside of the temple, the place was filled with strange figures of stone that resemble a strange bipedal form of life, the figures had features that were similar to chimpanzee, it had two legs and what seem like mutated legs in the upper torso, the head was round and had normal facial figures like eyes and nose but still very different, the torso was large and bulky and the butt was round but lacked a tail, but the strange forms of the figures didn't amused the presence, it only kept walking into what look like an altar that was illuminated by the light of the full moon, when the presence finally reached the altar it stopped, it stood there for a few moments and then it started to morph into a new form, the robe became darkness itself and looked like a ball of energy, the eyes expanded and came together to form a big circle of light, the presence now turned into what seem very similar to a constellation advanced to the center of the altar, when it reached the position, the presence started to glow more intensely,the glow was so intense that it illuminated all the temple and the area outside the temple, as the light show continued the earth started to shake very violently but it only occurred in the temple, the force of the internal earthquake started to destroy what was left of the temple, the pillars that sustained the roof fell first, then the roof itself until all the edification crumbled into pieces, the destruction of the temple left a big cloud of dust that dissipated after many minutes, when the dust finally cleared away and made the place visible again, the view of the place was shocking, the temple was gone,even the ruins had faded away and in there place was a hole of immense proportions and so the presence that was in the center of the disaster, the thing didn't suffer any damages of the destruction of the place but the glow that came of the center of his body had disappeared, the presence then started to become transparent until it finally became invisible, after that there weren't any more incident that night.
But what ever happen thar night it is still a mystery to me, I don't know what the strange presence was and I certainly don't want to find out, this what I know and the rest I ignore but I still hope that the information had some use to you.

When the princess finally finish to read all the report that Zecora had sent her away, she couldn't but to feel consternation, worry and even a little bit of fear, as the ruler of Equestria she had a wide knowledge of all the lifeforms of Equestria itself and outside of her kingdom, no creature was unknown to her and that was why this letter made her so worried, the mention of the new species was unknown to her, she knew that in this new discovery laid a potential threat, her thought were suddenly interrupt when she hear her name called by her sister Luna.
The moon princess entered to the study slowly, she looked tired and worried, she had also tried to find what had been happening in the everfree forest for the past weeks but with no succes at all.

My scouts haven't found any traces of the creature- said Luna with an accidental yawn.

-It seems that you had also past your limits my dearest sister- said Celestia with a sweet tone-remember that as much as important it is to find about what is happening outside our kingdom it is also important not to push yourself to your limits, you need to rest for now, I don't wish to see you in such troublesome situation.
The last words also were responded with a big yawn, that made the princess blush for her little accident.
-It seems that you had also haven't sleep a lot my dear sister- responded Luna with a big smile in her face.
-Yes sister, I haven't rest as I had need to do, this whole situation had kept me in insomnia for many hours but you must know that this my duty as ruler and also your big sister-responded Celestia with a calm voice.
-You know that you can't take all the big work for yourself and leave me with nothing to do, remember that with rule as sister and that means that we must take care of our kingdom and ourselves- exclaimed Luna.
Those words made Celestia smile, the company of her sister always made her happy and so Luna was happy to made her sister smile in such hard times.
But the moment of happiness was only momentarily as silence made himself present in the study, the lack of words made both princess remember all of theirs worries, such worries had begun when the first incident in the everfree occurred, it had started whem scouts of Celestia had spotted strange light from the forest itself, when then scouts tried to search the source of the light it suddenly disseaperead, these strange events started to occur more often,the fouth instance the socut finally could gasp a little view of a strange orb that supposdesdly caused the glow but when they tried to get close it suddenly exploded, this incident caused many injuries in the scouts, they had to be in the hospital for many days, when the doctors tried to see what had caused the injuries they were amazed that the injuries had been cause by unknown form of magic, but the incidents didn't stop there, the animals that lived in the forest started to act different, many manticores were encounters outside the forest, the dangerous animals seemed scare, also many birds started to migrate to others places, the dragon that lived in the caves of the forest also decided to fly away from theirs homes leaving their treasures behind, they were running from something. When the most brave scout decided to venture again in the forest they found why so many animals had decide to escape from the forest, the gruesome discovery was of death or to be more specific of many dead bodies, the mutilated bodies of manticores and theirs bones also, it seemed that they have been hunted and used as food for an unknown predator, but what was more shocking was the peturbing image of the disfigured dead body of the black dragon that was the leader of the dragons that reside in the everfree forest, when local doctors researched the bodies of the manticores they found that the same type of magic had caused all this but when they research what had cause the dragon death they were amazed that magic haven't cause that, it seemed that the fatal wounds were caused by physical means, all this events had caused fear in the hearts of all ponies in Equestria, no pony dare to adventure in the Everfree forest at night, this whole situation had the rulers of Equeatria occupied and worry, they didn't dare to tell their loyal servants that they didn't know what was happening, if ponies knew that even the powerfuls princess didn't knew what was causing all this missfortunes events they will go into a crisis.
For all this the rulers knew that they had to complete their duty, but such efforts had left the princesses tired and exhausted.
Finally after thinking what they must had to do, one of the sister decided to break the silence.
-Luna I think that for know it is important to rest and worry about this whole situation tomorrow- said Celestia- it is important to keep our energy so we can concentrate better on what to do and what must be done.
-You are right, we can't made the right decisions in this state-responded Luna
-We will continue tomorrow, goodnight Luna-said Celestia
-Goodnight to sister-responded Luna

Both sister returned to their chambers after saying goodbye to each other, when they reached their rooms they decided to cease their silence with the wisdom of the softness of their pillow, they slept into a deep rest that they needed so much.
The castle was in silence and in peace, a sensation of safeness surrounded the castle and Canterlot itself, but in a far place, in the dark woods, something appeared, a light that cut the dark itself, a green glow but only this time with a new form, the form of a gate, a portal that connected to different worlds and from the portal itself a thing came from it, a creature, the arrival of a human to Equestria.

Comments

[Axz]

First!!

the story im sorry to say im not the hugest fan of, i didn't like the format and the overall read just felt a ruched.
but if you serious about it i would advise you to take more time in writing it and possibly get some pre reader

[Parcly Taxel]

Gah! Queen Chrysalis, you pipped me!
: Zecora is only mentioned once, and that's at the very end. The punctuation is all messed up. It looks like this came out of an Internet chatroom!

[MetaLucario]

ill read later

[Cheezy805]

492210
You couldn't tell that from the description of the story?
I got no memories of who i am, from where i am, or why i am in this forest, it is night and strange creatures lure in the night, i can heard them, i know i can stay here for much longer, with not many option i walk, towards an unknown destination.
>I got no
>i
>i
>lure in the night
>i can heard them
>i
>i
>with not many option i
>Shitloads of unnecessary commas.
I'm not even going to read this...

[EDIT]
>i know i can stay here much longer
So what's the story? If you can stay safe for much longer, where's the storyline?

[Parcly Taxel]

492314 I knew it was like that all along, but I wanted to dramatise it.

[Flyingspud]

492164 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VbfP6ESo4EE Here's my opinion of your comment. And Discord's better than Chrysalis.

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As for the story,
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Terrible formatting, terrible grammar, at least spelling was ok. Watch your run on sentences, they aren't dramatic, they're bad grammar.

[Dracoraun]

The description is so grammatically incorrect that I almost died upon reading. Also, I nearly shat my pants with laughter at this part, " why I am feeling so much pain?! " If you were goin' for a good story, you missed. Better luck next time!

[Parcly Taxel]

492564 I could say this is the Big Rigs of MLPFIM fanfics. It's incomplete and is really bad, both in plot idea and execution.

[Zixinus]

Due to amnesia being mentioned, I'm sorry, there is no way I am reading this.

Really, amnesia is the most creatively bankrupt story ideas. It means that you have no confidence with building characters or placing a setting, and so on.

Plus, the description's poor grammar is not encouraging either.

[Johnfreemanwepon]

Half life: Full Life consequences, anyone?

[Zauber Junge]

at first I was like
then i was like
and now im like: fix this up and it may be good.

[IraqLobstah]

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Yea that seems about right.

[Axz]

492470

lol you need to chill and smile instead good sir

As for the Discord's better than Chrysalis argument, it is something i have bean thinking a fair bit on actually but haven't form an opinion yet,
its quite the hard question scenes bouth villain have aspects to them i relay like.

In discord we have this deity/god he cares for nobody but himself and treats the word as this personal toy set, he have no real agenda or plans he just fools around hand having fun at others expense,
and then we have Chrysalis, tho she is no doubt powerful and if she have a strong sorce of love to feed of she can out muscle Celestia, but she is far out of her league compared discord,(even to we can only speculate on this, but its a pretty secure assumption).
so no she is not a deity, no god like powers or anything along those lines for her, no she is just the ruler of her race the changelings, kinda in the same way as Celestia and Luna is the ruler of pony kind.

As for her motive she actually have one in contrast to discord, she wants to conquered Equestria as a source of food for subjects her, (even tho i think there's a bit of a ego problem and power hunger in there as well) her motive is somewhat understandable, its a if they don't eat they die scenario, even tho being fed apun don't harm a pony (she did it at shining armor for days) the outcome of her conquering equestria who'd not have bean good for the pony race,

but don't let the if we don't eat we die thing fool anyone, Chrysalis is still bad, she was eave happy looking out the window from the Castle and seeing her army destroy the city and hunt down the fleeing ponies, or it might have bean bliss in knowing her subjects was going to get there food, ho know.
point still remains she will hurt people to further her goals, and those of her people

Both Chrysalis and discord are awesome villains, and i don't know which one i think is bets at the moment, thats somethign i will nead soem more time to think about that.
I did not join this fandom until 3-4 days after luna eclipsed was aired so i don't know who the fandom handled Discord at first, but as for Chrysalis i still think the fandom is trying to define her, in the last 3 day´si have seen so many fanfictions staring her, just small short story's under 4k words, where people are trying to pour the curiosity and thought on her as a character,
i think this will continue for some time until the fandom comes to turn on what Chrysalis and the changelings as a race will mean for the fim universe and lore, on a side note i must say that i find it quite interesting that an overwhelming majority of these short story's have been shipping's, quite interesting because i find it so unfitting for her character (and diet)

And as for the changelings as a race i think that they are one of the best tings to have happened to mlp fim in the whole season, they kinda remind me of Wraith from SG Atlantis and Zerg´s form SC so what we have here is basically a Zerg/Wraith pony hybrid, and that in itself it just awesome

Up till now the vocal point of evil have always bean one individual NMM, discord.
Sure queen Chrysalis is a major bad guy but unlike every villain before her she have minions, and not only mindless slave or thugs, they are independent beings united as a people, with i assume have an kingdom cities or at least a culture.
and that is something we haven't seen on the show until now, that single fact along is enough for me to welcome them as a positive edition the the franchise the rest just makes them epic as hell.
something i haven't really thought of until now is that the event of the last episode technically leave equestria at a state of war whit the changelings, sure they won the battle but unlike NMM and discord they weren't turned to good or imprisoned, they only repelled them but the war still rages on, and the meaner of Chrysalis and her army´s defeat leaves it very easy for the animators to bring her back, it's almost as they ended the episode with a continue next episode sign.

[Flyingspud]

493678 Hory Sheet your response...
Indeed, I may have been a little harsh on the "first" comment. I just have a thing against it, I hate finding them on everything.

As for Discord/Chrysalis, my reasoning is as follows:
Discord is the Spirit of Chaos, which means he has unlimited power. The only thing more powerful than him is the Elements of Harmony.
Chrysalis is the leader of the changelings, and is powerful in her own right. She was able to defeat Celestia, but only after being essentially ubercharged, if you'll forgive the expression.

While Chrysalis may have a clear motive, Discord has one as well, although less clear-cut. Originally, it was to cause as much chaos as possible and just have a good time. After the princesses defeated him the first time, you know what happened. Then, there was his return, at which point he wanted his revenge on Celestia and Luna for overthrowing him.

Of course, the fanfictions and fanart of Chrysalis is the thing that's getting to me, as well as people on certain forums outright saying Chrysalis is better. I find there's way too much, and so much illogical things occurring in these Chrysalis fanfics. Mostly shipping her. I really wish the community hadn't gone to that so quickly, certain characters just shouldn't be shipped. Especially ones like Chrysalis.

I see that you have no particular allegiance, nor have declared either one to be superior in terms of power. So I won't go into my other points regarding them. I still prefer Discord, although I acknowledge Chrysalis's capabilities. She is considered by me to be the second best villain, if for her appearance than anything else.

I also noticed the zerg thing, but I never noticed SG Atlantis thing. It's even better considering the changeling actually is a Zerg unit.

About bringing the changelings back: that would be interesting, I wonder if they'll actually do that...

You may want to improve on your spelling/grammar as well, it's in a very weak spot right now.

[Axz]

493834

yeah i know it goth a bit longer then i planed, but if you get me started on a subject i enjoy to discuss i have a tendency to ramble on.
and yes i can understand you hate for "first" comment poster´s, i do find it quite annoying my self sometimes and i rarely do it, but the few times i do it´s most for the reason to "save a good spot",
i see a story that looks interesting post a first comment so it gets at the top of the list, then red the story in peace and quiet then edit my comment and voice my opinion on the story, i know that is kinda hypocritical to do so but if you spend the time to voice your opinion online then why not try to make sure so many people as possible read it?.

Oh and i agree whit Discord being the most powerful being so far shown in the mlp fim lore, no contest there he fuck things up in ponyville big time and if celestia and luna whod have the power to stop him they whod have done it themsealf, so its safe to say hes most PO so far.
and Chrysalis was surprised that she tock down Celestia and it was only becouse as you said she was " ubercharged"

As for anyone of them beaing better then the other i dont know, first of we need to define what we mean with better, both of them have difrent acpects i like more and less.
All i really hope for is they both will return sometime in future episodes, and mabye we eaven will see somecooperation between them, tho that is unlikley as i dont see dicord as a team player.

"certain characters just shouldn't be shipped. Especially ones like Chrysalis" YES FINALLY SOMEONE GETS IT, im not saying it cant be done but as you said, i really wish the community hadn't gone to that so quickly, im so tierd of all the second rate shipping storys that have flooded the internet, no offence to any author how might read this but A LOT of the shipping story's that have come out have bean nothing but dog shit,
and speaking of quickly, yesterday i even saw that the porn featuring her have already come out sometimes i think this fandom is to enthusiastic

as for the wraith thingi didn't mean their appearance, just the fact that they both use sentient beings as food, even if the ponies don't die by being feed upon i still thinks there is some similarities.

Oh shit everyone bail the grammar police is here
jokes aside i know i don't spell the best, and english is not my native language, and the only subject i really struggled with in school was spelling/grammar and since this is just a comment on a story i wroth late at night i didn't care to read it true a second time and correct any mistakes, so you are just gone have to live whit that.