Huh. I'm curious as to how the changelings will be received here. The story is already such a strange mix of silly and serious, I'm not sure if Cadance would be traumatized, enthusiastic, angry, or dismissive..
I actually spent a good moment pondering just how much sense "insurance against alicorns" would make. Wouldn't it be more sensible for alicorns to have liability insurance? Or does the Equestrian law consider them forces of nature?
Okay, this is more like it, the chapter tells a coherent story with no interrupting flashbacks, we get regular does of humor, and there's an interesting plot development. This is what I wanted from the start.
5304492 If any story involves the details of love in any way, there are two factors that will appear. Candance and Changelings, it's like a Fimfiction trope by now.
will be a living testament to your abilities as a princess of love?”
Her application was obviously without peer and no pony would dare challenge the princess of love at her own game. Except...
her bag and bowed low to the princess of love while Twilight groaned.
Princess of Love ______________
And it was all undone in an instant by the alicorn of magic
Alicorn of Magic _____________
The princess of the night cannot be bothered by such trifles!”
Princess of the Night ________________
Keep in mind. Titles get capitalized. Here's a good link on Cap rules. Other than that, this was an amusing chapter. I honestly hope that both Luna and Cadance become her managers.
Why do ii get the feeling that niether princess will get the position as advisor? I can see Twilight choosing Cloudkicker just to get all three of them to stop bothering her.
MAKE IT HAPPEN. I don't care how, if it makes sense or really anything else for that matter. I just want to see the full frontal stupidity that is Queen Chrysalis being in Twilight's harem!
I wholeheartedly approve of Chrysalis' involvement in this. Partly because I always feel a little sympathetic toward the Changelings, and done correctly, it could help them survive and thrive peacefully and openly alongside ponies, which is nice. It's also partly because I think that if Chrysalis walking into the library and offering herself to Twilight would be hilarious. Mostly though, it's because Twisalis/Chrysalight is one of my top ships and dammit, I wanna see some sexy bug lovin'.
I like that Blueblood was on Twi's side, at least as far as he knew, even though they where politically opposed in general. I's a nice subtle nod to Twi being a great Princess.
I rather enjoyed the interviews as well. The CMC, lol the CMC. That Scootaloo was considering going along with it anyway was particularly enjoyable for me cause I like shipping Scootaloo and Twilight and given that Big Mac basically stated that he was ok, if not interested in the idea of possibly being put in an incestuous scenario with AJ I don't think a little foalicon is out of the question. Speaking of Big Mac, I loved that whole conversation. Makes me wonder how AJ feels about it...
Derpy, yay!
I find the idea of Chrysalis getting in on this interesting on a number of levels. Will she just show up and say, "I wanna be in your harem, Twilight cause I'm so hot for you and totally not attempting to gain a political and possibly military advantage"? Or maybe she's go in disguise and end up falling for Twi for really?
Blueblood actually being on Twilight's side, simply because she is the only pony with power that still respects him enough to take his ideas seriously and to give him feedback—even if it's always negative—really makes a lot of sense when you consider how he tends to be portrayed in the expanded universe. I like that he's not being played as a vindictive, evil foil, but appears to be a well shaped character, even if we don't get to see much of him so far. It also occurs to me that alicorns might fall under 'acts of God' for insurance purposes and so they would likely carry their own liability insurance to cover these sorts of 'episodes'; Twilight's premiums would probably be through the roof .
Seeing the applicants was great, especially the CMC (and their usual lack of comprehension), the terrible OC, and Bulk 'YEEEAAAH!' Biceps. Also, the nods to 'winningverse' CK were well done, and I laughed far more deeply than I thought I would at her jumping back in line after each rejection.
The competition between Luna and Cadance was a nice addition, and I'm looking forward to seeing how that goes in the next chapter. I kind of want moonbutt to win, because she's awesome, but Cadance's resume is going to be hard to top.
The addition of Chrysalis feels like it was an inevitability, but I did enjoy the snarky comments from drone 117 (I'm curious if this is a nod to Bond, or Halo though). I do so hope that this turns into an overly elaborate plan that inevitably "never survives contact".
5306481 If so, then they failed miserably in my case. I always refer to that ship as 'Fleshlight', because it's far funnier.
5313312 Now see, that is why I hate Flash x Twilight so much. I keep goofing it up and saying fleshlight instead and that is just too disrespectful to poor Twilight... it always makes me feel bad. She is so much more than a cheap cum receptacle.
5313372 Nah, I see it the other way around. Flash is just eye-candy; a sex toy to be used as needed and then dressed up in his guard uniform and placed in a corner until he's needed again. That's why he has zero personality and is simply used as something of a status-symbol in EqG. It's look at the pretty arm-candy that Twilight is rocking.
5313590 See that works well in Xeno because with the inverted gender roles it is a direct parallel for him... but, I have never encountered any reference or hint of Flashlight in any setting that wasn't fairly 'human'. It always hits me when my brain is in human mode. ... I'mma shut up now and quite jacking this guys comments... NOT LIKE THAT!!!! HIjacking!! Git yer minds outta tha gutter.
5314279 I won't say anything further, because you're right we're kinda hijacking the comments here, but I can't leave you with that terrible train of thought. Just think about how he's treated in both movies. He is, quite literally, there to be run into (I know I've seen compilations of Twilight constantly running headlong into him but I can't find them now) and be eye-candy. He has no personality beyond an ability to play guitar which serves only to raise his appeal since it's never really used in a meaningful way to build his character. He has no history beyond having been the boyfriend of another character. He is shown to have no real will of his own and no sense of personal agency, he's a prize to be won, and nothing more. He is, to put it quite simply, a trophy-husband; even in a human setting he is the equivalent of a sentient dildo. In a Xeno setting, he'd only be good for anal because Celestia knows you don't want those genes being passed on he's not worthy of Twilight. So never fear referring to them as Fleshlight, because Flash is, without a doubt, the cheap sex-toy of that relationship, regardless of the setting.
“Alright...but can you at least promise me that this is solely for Twilight's sake and not because putting together a harem...or whatever, will be a living testament to your abilities as a princess of love?”
There was a long silence that stretched out to the point of discomfort.
was where my health began to rapidly decline. By the end, I nearly died from laughing.
yay, been waiting for this blasted thing to update ( I am an impatient sod ) but thanks for the update, i like your work.
Wow... just... wow
I like it, thanks for the update!!
Huh. I'm curious as to how the changelings will be received here. The story is already such a strange mix of silly and serious, I'm not sure if Cadance would be traumatized, enthusiastic, angry, or dismissive..
Oh my gosh, let the changelings in.
I actually spent a good moment pondering just how much sense "insurance against alicorns" would make. Wouldn't it be more sensible for alicorns to have liability insurance? Or does the Equestrian law consider them forces of nature?
I am just waiting to see what happens when Big Mac shows up!
well this will be interesting...
i fucking knew changlings were going to come in at some point. it was inevitable.
Great
A sound strategy for Chrysalis, though I doubt it'll get to far before it's discovered. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work.
Was the bouncy ball an Order of the Stick reference?
*Reads end of chapter
ppppppffffttt!!! ... eeeeewwww... now my monitor is all sticky.
Otherwise, please sir, could I have some MOAR!(?)
Oooh This is gonna get very intersting very quickly!
Changelings!
Suddenly everything is five times better.
Okay, this is more like it, the chapter tells a coherent story with no interrupting flashbacks, we get regular does of humor, and there's an interesting plot development. This is what I wanted from the start.
A creature that can fulfill any physical desire being introduced into a harem? Sounds kind of sexy.
Proving her loyalty and calming her ego due to the status drop from foreign dignitary to ordinary citizen will be interesting to see.
Why was Spike at the CMC HQ?
I know a loophole of that law.
5304492 If any story involves the details of love in any way, there are two factors that will appear. Candance and Changelings, it's like a Fimfiction trope by now.
Lots of story, lots of bangin'. I want more of this, moremoremore. I am SUCH a sucker for Twi-harem fics.
5304440 Acts of gods clause?
So we have Cadence, Luna AND Chryssy all about to come together at the same point over a Twilight Har-em-Mar-em-Scar-em collision?
You now have two minutes to reach minimum safe distance...
Huzzah for ignoring Flash. Boo for rejecting Cloud Kicker :P
Celestia is going to get a crown in a really awkward place I feel.
Admittedly, Cloud Kicker is pretty funny.
Where was Big Mac? I saw him talking to AJ, but after that?
Princess of Love
______________
Alicorn of Magic
_____________
Princess of the Night
________________
Keep in mind. Titles get capitalized. Here's a good link on Cap rules. Other than that, this was an amusing chapter. I honestly hope that both Luna and Cadance become her managers.
Aww even the Cutie Mark Crusaders tryed to become Twilight's harem ponies, and they were the very first in the line.
Oh let Applejack join the herd. I love AppleDashLight shipping senes.
Why do ii get the feeling that niether princess will get the position as advisor? I can see Twilight choosing Cloudkicker just to get all three of them to stop bothering her.
Ok, the background pony section was just too meta... especially for Rainbow Dash. I mean saying she doesn't have an 'official' name?
Speaking of Flash Sentry, I wonder how the writers picked his name? Do you think they named him Flash just to get shippers to say 'Flashlight'?
excellent, and from the binding oath of the harem, Twilight would be in control of all the changelings.
5306111
Probably just a lead in for whats set up to come next, like the part wit the changlings/Chrysalis
MAKE IT HAPPEN. I don't care how, if it makes sense or really anything else for that matter. I just want to see the full frontal stupidity that is Queen Chrysalis being in Twilight's harem!
5305952 Come to think of it, does this Cloud Kicker's resume include being arrested for hitting on princess Luna while drunk?
Chrysalis will probably get quite far, though I expect her inability to love to glitch her collar when she tries to take a vow.
Also, rejection on the grounds of 'background pony' was just mean. Lots of ponies we know and love started as background ponies.
I wholeheartedly approve of Chrysalis' involvement in this. Partly because I always feel a little sympathetic toward the Changelings, and done correctly, it could help them survive and thrive peacefully and openly alongside ponies, which is nice. It's also partly because I think that if Chrysalis walking into the library and offering herself to Twilight would be hilarious. Mostly though, it's because Twisalis/Chrysalight is one of my top ships and dammit, I wanna see some sexy bug lovin'.
Hey Crysi, you know, no plan survives contact...
*prepares to dodge anything resulting from the the bad joke*
117? as in like 007? nice....
also big mac is best pervet
also all the interviews, very funny, the nameless bg charcter, the awful oc....
Does this mean Twilight will own the Hive?
Also, go AJ, go AJ, go AJ! (And all harems need Mac.)
Bit of a twist with Blueblood. I like it when he's not just a one-dimensional baddie.
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117 as in the Master Chief. Most likely
This was a really enjoyable chapter.
I like that Blueblood was on Twi's side, at least as far as he knew, even though they where politically opposed in general. I's a nice subtle nod to Twi being a great Princess.
I rather enjoyed the interviews as well. The CMC, lol the CMC. That Scootaloo was considering going along with it anyway was particularly enjoyable for me cause I like shipping Scootaloo and Twilight and given that Big Mac basically stated that he was ok, if not interested in the idea of possibly being put in an incestuous scenario with AJ I don't think a little foalicon is out of the question. Speaking of Big Mac, I loved that whole conversation. Makes me wonder how AJ feels about it...
Derpy, yay!
I find the idea of Chrysalis getting in on this interesting on a number of levels. Will she just show up and say, "I wanna be in your harem, Twilight cause I'm so hot for you and totally not attempting to gain a political and possibly military advantage"? Or maybe she's go in disguise and end up falling for Twi for really?
Super looking forward to the next chapter.
...Bet you can't stick it
This chapter was pure comedy gold. Loving it. Keep it up!
And things have become much more interesting. This is going to be one heck of a ride.
This was a great chapter, well worth the wait.
Blueblood actually being on Twilight's side, simply because she is the only pony with power that still respects him enough to take his ideas seriously and to give him feedback—even if it's always negative—really makes a lot of sense when you consider how he tends to be portrayed in the expanded universe. I like that he's not being played as a vindictive, evil foil, but appears to be a well shaped character, even if we don't get to see much of him so far. It also occurs to me that alicorns might fall under 'acts of God' for insurance purposes and so they would likely carry their own liability insurance to cover these sorts of 'episodes'; Twilight's premiums would probably be through the roof .
Seeing the applicants was great, especially the CMC (and their usual lack of comprehension), the terrible OC, and Bulk 'YEEEAAAH!' Biceps. Also, the nods to 'winningverse' CK were well done, and I laughed far more deeply than I thought I would at her jumping back in line after each rejection.
The competition between Luna and Cadance was a nice addition, and I'm looking forward to seeing how that goes in the next chapter. I kind of want moonbutt to win, because she's awesome, but Cadance's resume is going to be hard to top.
The addition of Chrysalis feels like it was an inevitability, but I did enjoy the snarky comments from drone 117 (I'm curious if this is a nod to Bond, or Halo though). I do so hope that this turns into an overly elaborate plan that inevitably "never survives contact".
5306481
If so, then they failed miserably in my case. I always refer to that ship as 'Fleshlight', because it's far funnier.
5313312 Now see, that is why I hate Flash x Twilight so much. I keep goofing it up and saying fleshlight instead and that is just too disrespectful to poor Twilight... it always makes me feel bad. She is so much more than a cheap cum receptacle.
5313372
Nah, I see it the other way around. Flash is just eye-candy; a sex toy to be used as needed and then dressed up in his guard uniform and placed in a corner until he's needed again.
That's why he has zero personality and is simply used as something of a status-symbol in EqG. It's look at the pretty arm-candy that Twilight is rocking.
5313590 See that works well in Xeno because with the inverted gender roles it is a direct parallel for him... but, I have never encountered any reference or hint of Flashlight in any setting that wasn't fairly 'human'. It always hits me when my brain is in human mode.
...
I'mma shut up now and quite jacking this guys comments... NOT LIKE THAT!!!! HIjacking!! Git yer minds outta tha gutter.
5314279
I won't say anything further, because you're right we're kinda hijacking the comments here, but I can't leave you with that terrible train of thought.
Just think about how he's treated in both movies. He is, quite literally, there to be run into (I know I've seen compilations of Twilight constantly running headlong into him but I can't find them now) and be eye-candy. He has no personality beyond an ability to play guitar which serves only to raise his appeal since it's never really used in a meaningful way to build his character. He has no history beyond having been the boyfriend of another character. He is shown to have no real will of his own and no sense of personal agency, he's a prize to be won, and nothing more.
He is, to put it quite simply, a trophy-husband; even in a human setting he is the equivalent of a sentient dildo. In a Xeno setting, he'd only be good for anal because Celestia knows
you don't want those genes being passed onhe's not worthy of Twilight. So never fear referring to them as Fleshlight, because Flash is, without a doubt, the cheap sex-toy of that relationship, regardless of the setting.Well, this was certainly contrary to usual expectations! The episode with Blueblood at the very least.
... Though now I really wonder if feedback from one of the earlier chapters had anything to do with it...
5308398 I need to play more halo...
Great chapter, definitely worth the wait.
Although...About here
was where my health began to rapidly decline. By the end, I nearly died from laughing.