Woho! Another chapter! Great work!

worth the wait... for sure.

When i saw this at the top of my favorites list I nearly had a heart attack.

Yup it was worth to wait for. Personally I wouldn't mind if Derpy and/or Lyra and Bon Bon could become the part of Twilight Sparkle's harem.

Damn, what an excellent chapter! That golem was awesome!

If Spike is a part of the Royal Family, doesn't that mean he has to follow that Harem clause?

I didn't have time to read this... but I did anyway.

Awesome to see another update.

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Yuhuuuuu real funny :) I'm really hoping to read more apple horse though :)

Surprise Boss Battle: HERE COMES TOM!

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That just means he gets a fancy title that ponies will insist on calling him by all the time. The Harem rule probably wouldn't come into effect unless he tries to actually take up a position of royal responsibility like one of the princesses.

Tom upgraded from Glamour Tom to Chaos Golem Tom. Tiny Tom (Tim?) is adorable though. Rarity should keep him as a pet. Or Cadence should.

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I hope Tiny Tom becomes a recurrent feature.

Suddenly action/adventure!?

Why is Twi still wearing that limiter anyway?

Spike is in full snark mode. Love it. Shining should help find some more ponies. It's a big brother's duty.

Although I was expecting more sex, this was funny as always.

more please!

Magnificent stuff! Please keep up the good work!

More story, more interactions, more exploration of relationships, more new and interesting characters, more story...!

Was indeed worth the wait.

I have no hands, yet I must make Tom Thumb jokes.

And then Tom joined the Mareum

it is very nice to see this getting an update! I love this story very much and want more of it! I also want to see more mares....

Have I said I love this story????? can hardly wait to see who Twilight gets added to the Mareum next!!!

Another enjoyable chapter. Good job.

The Chaos has only just begun. Wanna bet that in the aftermath of this and the rest of the harem mess everypony is going to forget that Tom was the Mirror Pool's "guardian."

Send in the clones

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I agree. That is a wonderful, great, nice, and all around awesome idea, after all.

See, there are two ways this story could go. The way I know it's going to, because of the kind of story it is. Which is fine, because it's a great story. The other is the way I think it should go, which ends with Twilight doing something equal parts precipitous and hilarious.

The Explosion Golem, brought to you by Mister Minotorgue

EXPLOSIONS!?

I think Discord will be proud of that one. It was crazy, destructive, caused quite a bit of chaos and was personal to some.

We are not putting a castle in the middle of Ponyville.

I was not expecting a monster of the day in a Meram story. Why is everything so wonderful forever?

I do love how delightfully witty this story is.

“Ah thought ah told you we don't use magic on mah farm, Twilight! You got something ta say for yourself?”

Ah

Ya

Yerself
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“Ah know ya mean well Twi, but I've given you all the chances ah can. Yer just not gonna learn anything without a hoof's on approach. You're supposed to be a third earth pony, ain't ya?”

Ah've

ya

Ah

Ya're [you're]
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“Aw shucks, Twi, I ain't no teacher, but I can show you a few things...”

Ah
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Luna was a different pony in the realm of dreams,

Cap. [Place / location. Even if that location is an abstract area of the subconsciousness. Since they were "there" in a manner of speaking, and interacted with that place. It is treated as a place.]
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“I need a weeks worth supply of dreamless sleep. The strongest you have.”

Cap. [Name of thing.]
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“Y'all got a better plan ah'm all ears!”

Ah'm
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“Sorry, sugarcube, ah was sure you had something to pull my flank outta the fire.””

Ah

ya
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“Fleet, do me a favor and get the royal guard up here to do magical containment and cleanup.

Cap. [Name of group / organization].

[Technically everytime you used Weather Team should've been capped to. Since they are an organization that works for the Weather Factory. But I can point those out next time I re-read the story.]
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“Rest all ya want Twilight, you ain't exactly a heavyweight,” she teased, setting an easy pace back to the library, making sure not to jostle the alicorn too much. “So why are you so tuckered out when Trix and Rares are walking just fine, anywho?”

ya
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“Spike, you here?” called out Applejack. There was no response. “Must of evacuated with everypony else.”

“Mmm...might have found something else to do. Library closes in event of monster attacks. Just drop me off at my bed, I'll be fine,” murmured Twilight sleepily.

“Ah think I'll stick around until Spike shows up just to be sure,” countered Applejack as she made her way up the stairs, gently rolling the alicorn from her back to the bed.

“Applejack...”

“Unless you got the magic to throw me outta yer house, this ain't up for debate.”

Twilight let out a resigned sigh. “Fine, but I swear if this has anything to do with the marem...”

“Now Twi, y'all know darn well I'm your friend first.”

“Right, sorry, just been kinda hectic the last couple days...” Twilight's voice faded as Applejack suddenly moved into view, her face just above her own.

“This jus' happens to be one of those times where ah can do both.”

ya

Ah

Ah'm

Ah'll

and

change the y'all to ya. Y'all is a plural pronoun. And in both both grammatically and in it's proper usage, other than in implied plurals. Is never to be used singularly.
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Okay. This needs to be said. You really need to watch your southern accent. You have lots of errors there, and keep switching between accented and normal dialects when writing it.

Other than that problem. This is a good fic, and I'm glad I was able to finally get to reading this chapter.

Liking this story more and more!

Did notice this though - "“Must of evacuated with everypony else.”"

It's must have, not must of. Common mistake as people mishear must've, the contracted version of must have.

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"You're" would usually come out closer to "y'r" (compare possessive "yer," similar to how "your" and "you're" are confused in other English dialects) with no vowels is a stereotypical southern drawl.

The name of a place or thing thing isn't capitalized unless it's the proper name of a very specific place or thing (usually a unique thing, but not always). Dreamless sleep probably shouldn't be capitalized, as it appears to be a common noun here.

The Realm of Dreams may or may not, depending on how it works. If the realm of dreams is specific to the individual consciousness, then it is a common noun, not a specific place, unless you explicitly mention which one it is.

Weather Team, again, is a odd case. If they are a single organization with a wide area of operations, then it should be capitalized. If each town and area has their own weather team (which is the way it appears to be in canon), then don't capitalize it unless it is an obvious reference to a single specific Weather Team (this usage probably does imply "Ponyville Weather Team," so capitalization would still be reasonable, but not required).

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While it is irgrammatical, it is also an extant dialectal speech pattern, distinct from contraction "must've". Don't correct it in the speech of someone who is likely to actually say it that way.

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"You're" would usually come out closer to "y'r" (compare possessive "yer," similar to how "your" and "you're" are confused in other English dialects) with no vowels is a stereotypical southern drawl.

Honestly writing in a southern dialect is weird and I'm a born a raised southerner. Never really knew how to write that one, although I've seen tons of different spellings.

The name of a place or thing thing isn't capitalized unless it's the proper name of a very specific place or thing (usually a unique thing, but not always). Dreamless sleep probably shouldn't be capitalized, as it appears to be a common noun here.

Dreamless Sleep is the name of the potion. Thus like a brandname / name of a specific thing it'd get capitalized. While getting a potion for a dreamless sleep wouldn't get capped. Getting a few potions of Dreamless Sleep would.

The Realm of Dreams may or may not, depending on how it works. If the realm of dreams is specific to the individual consciousness, then it is a common noun, not a specific place, unless you explicitly mention which one it is.

Actually from what we see in canon. the Realm of Dreams is the collective unconsciousness that Luna opperates in that connects all minds and dreams together. She just opens a door, and walks through, occasionally bringing others with her. With many times in canon, showing her altering dreams for the betterment of a specific individual.

Weather Team, again, is a odd case. If they are a single organization with a wide area of operations, then it should be capitalized. If each town and area has their own weather team (which is the way it appears to be in canon), then don't capitalize it unless it is an obvious reference to a single specific Weather Team (this usage probably does imply "Ponyville Weather Team," so capitalization would still be reasonable, but not required).

Actually in Canon. All weather comes from Cloudsdale. With all ponies who make up the Weather Team being technically employees of Cloudsdale. With a type of conscription of pegasi when it comes to making a water spout to fill Cloudsdale's water needs for the year. But we did see Dashie go to the Weather Factory without raising any eyebrows ... of course she also brought Tank along. Which I have no idea how common that is for her to do.

So while each place has their own group, it's still part of the over all Cloudsdale Weather Management / Bureau / what have you.

But even then (and I agree it's a tricky one). Technically groups of individuals who work for a unified goal / thing (or an organization) gets capped. But if they aren't a part of Cloudsdale's Weather Factory, and it's a generalization. Then ... yes. But then again I usually err on the side of caution. They get pay for dealing with the weather, take orders from Cloudsdale, and ensure that everything works in an organized, pre-arranged system. So technically they fall under all the general categories for getting Capped, unless it's mentioned in a more generalized sense. Like the Royal Guard (group), and the royal guard [a singular employee, vs. the organization] is really confusing and filled with technicalities.

[Btw. Nice comment. It's nice to know another way of writing that highly annoying contraction. Seriously you're in Southern has to be the most annoying word to ever pop up in literature. To write at least.]

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Even in cannon, the evidence is that the Weather Factory doesn't directly work with or organize the individual teams except with certain critical tasks. Nopony stepped in for the water delivery in Hurricane Fluttershy, despite two failures on the part of the local weather team, and that would have completely shut down the Factory operations.

Dash having direct access to the Factory is kinda odd, under the circumstances, but she is a known leader for the Ponyville Weather Team. Her name is probably on the requisitions, and chances are she's the one receiving the deliveries too. On top of that, she's also known to work directly with two of the Princesses and is a known member of what would appear on the surface to be a group of government agents, one of whom was just crowned. Trying to define what rights of access she should have is rather sketchy regardless of the level of association between the Weather Factory and the weather teams.

Manufacturing and operations are almost never the same organization, especially when you're dealing with bureaucracy.

On the subject of the Guard, you've got a different set of technical issues. If their actual title is Royal Guard, then it should still be capitalized, even if you're talking about an individual guardspony (because it's now a title of office). On the other hand, if they were titled as minor nobles (real world royal guards were usually squires or knights, and titled as such), then you wouldn't capitalize royal guard when you're talking about a single individual (and you wouldn't capitalize their title when their name does not immediately follow unless they were landed nobles).

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Actually they could've been watching to see how it played out (or it could be a byproduct of the cultural negligence that's ingrained into the youth of Equestria.). But still, Cloudsdale produces all weather, and all places have pegasi get their weather from them as well as move according to an over all bureaucratic timeline that fits the Weather Factories, as well as Cloudsdale's weather budget (they only have X amount water for all of Equestria yearly) / needs.

Still, even as individual teams. That wouldn't make them not part of the Weather Factory, rather their own autonomous nodes of an over arching system. That and they'd still be a group of individuals who earn salary for doing said job. So like any team, or group of likeminded individuals (that are acting as an organized unit) they'd get capped.

That was great I got caught up with all the chapters I do Fleet Foot gets her quality Twilight time I would really like to see them do stuff That whole Princess battling for the official posistion was funny Also why do I have a feeling that Spike is harboring feelings for Twi, that or he knows Rarity wants to joing Twilight's herd Oh and that Tom battle delightfully chaotic I'm sure Discord is quite pleased with himself. I WANT MOAR SOON! If that is alright with you.

In case of awkward conversation use sleep spell

Twilight barely resisted the urge to facehoof. “If I tell you, will you give me the potions?”
“Agreed, and I wish you the best of luck, now tell me, which do you like to f-”
“Oh, you were just waiting to use that rhyme, weren't you?”
Zecora smiled. “I confess nothing. Now less talk about this, and more about bucking.”

Sweet Jesus Zecora

Bast? Probably can't pull herself away from the war.

Um, Bast is an Egyptian Goddess, and the show is more based off of Greek and Roman mythology. Also, Bast wasn't in a war, she was sent to Apophis' prison to fight him for an eternity when Ra (Pharoah) stepped down from the throne for Osiris (death) to take over, who was dethroned by Set (chaos, evil, and desert), and then Set was dethroned by Horus (war).

“A princess does not kiss and tell, Spike.”

“So more than a thousand years then?”

“I believe it is time for the sleep spell.”

If Luna hadn't added Spikes name at the end of her first sentance, I'd be worried about her turning into Zecora.

I hope this story updates soon!!!!!!

i miss this story, it is so well done and such a great idea

I hope you plan to finish this story, it is VERY well done with some rather interesting ideas.
8/10 (you will get 10/10 when finished)

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Once it reaches 900 likes. No, I'm kidding. In all seriousness though, I've got a rather large project that is close to completion and I've been focusing my attention on that now that World Worth Dying For has finished. Once the big project is out of the way, I fully intend to revisit this story.

Just a shout out for this fantastic story!! Can't wait for more!!

I can't wait for this story to get some love again. TwiHarem stories are almost unilaterally the funniest things on FimFic (if you like embarrassed princesses and raunchy humor anyway)

I remember when I first read this story it was a good one and I put it on my read again list.

And now that I have read it again I think it's still a good read but I have some peeves with like the magic limitation ring.

I get that it's a part of the story but, why is twilight still wearing it? It's not like there was much story to it. Except for the Wonderbolt academy back story (that I liked very much).

So why not get rid of it? Twilight isn't panicking anymore and just dashing off.

But anyways I really like the story and hope that you continue it (hopefully soon). Keep up the good work.

Any chance of an update? Please?

This doesn't have any more chapters. WHY DOESN'T IT HAVE ANY MORE CHAPTERS?!?

On another note,

“Agreed, and I wish you the best of luck, now tell me, which do you like to f-”
“Oh, you were just waiting to use that rhyme, weren't you?”

This was pure genius

But seriously, more when?

Is it sleeping, or is it dead??

I am very sad to see that this has not been updated in two years. Having a story just like this myself, I know what that actually means. Still, The comedy is top notch and i shall miss the funnies you have put forth here. Mayhaps one day you shall return to it. Til then, Best of luckl.