Chapter Fourteen - Water
Scootaloo's first day back home had barely started, and already it had been a rollercoaster.
Not that she didn't expect this, at least partially. But she presumed it would have something to do with her new role, not some relatively minor conflict between her friends.
She tried to wipe those thoughts from her mind. All the young pegasus wanted to focus on this day was her friends, and nothing else.
But it was difficult.
She strapped her helmet on, and pulled her scooter out of the small shed. Trotting back inside, she pulled out her favourite wagon, and attached it to the vehicle.
Her front door creaked open. Out trotted a solemn white unicorn, her eyes bloodshot and her hair lifeless. All of her cosmetics had been washed off, and her coat was disheveled.
It was apparent that at this moment, Rarity did not care about her own physical appearance. She was that distressed.
"Hey Rarity," Scootaloo said, as the unicorn slowly trotted over. "You... um... how're ya feelin'?"
"Slightly better," she replied. The unicorn sat on the ground and took a deep breath.
"Anything you wanna talk about?" the filly asked.
She raised her head slightly. "Yes," the mare responded. "When did you figure all this out?"
The pegasus took a seat on her scooter and took a deep breath before continuing. "Well, pretty much immediately after Spike first told me what happened. It seemed pretty obvious."
"Then why doesn't he know?"
Scootaloo scoffed. "Something like that, it's hard to figure out when you're in it. He's just not in the right position."
Rarity had another question. "If you knew he wouldn't pick me anyway... why did you want me to forgive him?"
She cocked her head to the side. "Why do you think?"
The unicorn paused for a second, before nodding in acknowledgement.
The pegasus brushed her hair aside. "I really am sorry."
Rarity released a slight chuckle. "I know."
An awkward silence descended.
"You know what you're gonna do?" the filly asked.
"No," came the simple reply. "I could fight for him. But... I'll always know I was just his second choice. And Sweetie Belle..." The unicorn shook her head solemnly. "It would not be fair to her..." Tears hit the dirt below. "I can't... I can't do that to my own sister, not when I know... this. It would merely be malicious, not..."
An alabaster hoof wiped the moisture away.
"So, you're gonna break up with him?"
Rarity thought for a second. "If I do 'break up' with him... Sweetie Belle will always question it. She'll always wonder if he really wanted to be with her." She turned her gaze to the young pegasus. "I'll have to lie."
Scootaloo didn't respond.
"It's the only way. Isn't it?"
She scratched the back of her neck. "I guess so."
Her eyes drifted. "I do not believe this."
"Neither do I." Scootaloo bit her lower lip slightly. "You gonna be okay?" the pegasus asked.
Rarity looked up. "I have to convince my boyfriend that we're still together, while you convince him that he's in love with my sister. Do you think I'm 'okay'?"
"No... probably not."
There were many thoughts running through Scootaloo's head: There are plenty of fish in the sea. You were too good for him, anyway. Better to have love and lost, than to have never loved at all. It'll get easier.
And she knew they were all stupid, and would only make her upset.
But one thing... one thing just might work.
Scootaloo stood up and trotted over to the alabaster unicorn, sitting on the dirt beside her.
"Take all the time you need," she said. "I'll talk to them, you won't have to do anything. You can go home, relax. Try to put it all behind you."
Rarity took several slow, methodical, deep breaths. Calming her heart, and controlling her thoughts.
It took at least a minute before she turned to the young pegasus, and said, "That will not be necessary. Only I can successfully convince Spike I forgive him, and that I'll fight for him. And that is exactly what I shall do. For my sister, I'll do anything."
Scootaloo smiled.
"But first, we shall stop at my home. I must look my best for such a performance. I also have a bottle of wine I wish to drink. Do you mind giving me a ride?"
"Yeah, sure, it's not a problem," she declared with a smile.
As Scootaloo took her position on the scooter, Rarity loaded herself into the attached cart.
"Oh, one more thing," the unicorn added.
"Yeah?" the pegasus responded.
"Congratulations," she said with a smirk.
Scootaloo smiled. "Thanks."
With a jolt, the two began their journey.
Sweetie Belle had no idea where she was, or where she was going. She just ran. Ran as fast as her legs would carry her. She didn't care where she'd end up. All she wanted was to be as far away from Spike, Rarity, Twilight, and Apple Bloom as possible. She wanted to be alone, and away from everypony. She just wanted to wallow in her own sadness and mourn the love she just lost.
How could this happen? How could a dragon whom she loved with every fibre of her being turn out to be such a jerk!?
He betrayed her, it was just that simple. There were no complexities, there was no minutiae. He betrayed her, and tore her heart out.
He was a bastard, and at that moment, that was all the reason she needed to hate Spike.
But she didn't. She couldn't. And that just made it all hurt even more.
Noises. Random noises. Voices? It didn't matter. None of it mattered. She just ran. Ran as quickly as she could.
Saline stung her eyes. She could see nothing. But she didn't care, she just ran.
Suddenly, a pressure on her flanks. A vice, holding her back. She couldn't run. She stopped.
She cried in despair, and collapsed on the grass beneath her hooves, allowing the tears to fall.
More noises, hoofsteps, voices. What were they doing?
"... didn't do a thing!"
"Is she alright?"
"I don't know."
Raising her head, Sweetie Belle wiped the tears away, and turned toward the voices.
"Sweetie Belle!" Applejack cried. "Are you alright?"
Her throat would not obey her commands. So the young unicorn merely shook her head.
"It could've been a lot worse," Rainbow Dash explained. "You need to be more careful, next time I won't be there to stop you."
The unicorn buried her head in her hooves, as her eyes continued to gush.
"Ow!" the pegasus exclaimed.
A shifting in the grass. "Somethin' wrong sug'?" the farmer asked.
Sweetie Belle nodded.
"You wanna talk about it?"
She shook her head.
Silence. A shuffling of hooves.
"You wanna come inside?" Rainbow Dash asked. "Applejack's got hot chocolate!"
She lay there, motionless for several seconds, before eventually nodding in the affirmative.
"Great! Here, let me help you!" The weathermare reached down and lifted the young unicorn, who grabbed onto her neck, which quickly became soaked with tears.
"Okay," Rainbow Dash said, slowly floating toward the farmhouse. "So, you do have hot chocolate, right?"
"Somewhere."
Twilight wandered down the streets of Ponyville, searching for a missing unicorn.
The librarian knew she messed up. Her plan to get Sweetie Belle to forgive Spike had backfired so tremendously, that it felt like a bad joke she failed to get.
But it was worse than anyone else knew. For Twilight knew exactly where the dragon's heart truly lay; with Sweetie Belle, the one who now hated him.
Spike didn't love Rarity. Twilight knew that from day one. If he did, he would have never said 'yes' to Sweetie Belle. He would have never fallen for her at the carnival. He would have never allowed the charade to continue for as long as it did.
He thought he loved Rarity. That was the problem. He confused attraction with love. A superficial emotion with one that permeated the soul. That was why she knew his relationship with Rarity would never last, regardless of Sweetie Belle's involvement.
But now, Spike's first real chance at true happiness was gone, and it was all her fault.
"Twilight!" The sound of an orange and white blur flying past the unicorn, too close for comfort, knocked her out of her thoughts, and off her hooves.
The scooter skidded to a stop, and two familiar friends quickly disembarked.
Scootaloo ran toward the unicorn, shouting, "Twilight! Twilight! Twilight!" She was still wearing the same dress she wore earlier in the day, which struck the unicorn as slightly odd. But there were bigger problems to worry about.
"Twilight!" she shouted again, very much out of breath. "Where's Sweetie Belle? Didn't you go after her?"
"Uh... yeah... I did." the unicorn responded.
"Well, where is she?"
"Um... well... she... ran off."
"What?"
"Rarity!" Twilight exclaimed. "Are you alright? I know this may be difficult, but just remember, your friends are here for you."
Scootaloo raised an eyebrow.
"I'm fine, Twilight," the fashionista responded. "All thanks to Scootaloo here." She rubbed the top of the filly's head.
"Alright, Rarity," the pegasus said, restraightening her mane. "What do you mean, 'she ran off'?" she continued, back on the original track.
"Who?"
"Sweetie Belle."
"Is she alright?"
Twilight finally decided to answer. "Well, we were talking, and I pretty much told her everything."
"So," Rarity responded. "You did know everything."
The librarian grinned sheepishly. "I'm sorry, Rarity. I should have told you a while ago."
The designer released a small smile. "It's alright, Twilight. There was nothing you could have done. Do not worry about the past."
"Rarity," Scootaloo interjected. "Focus."
"Oh, right! Sweetie Belle!"
"Uh, yeah!" Twilight continued. "So, I told her everything I knew, and I tried my best to get her to forgive him, but... I think it just made her more angry."
Rarity was taken aback. "How angry?" she asked.
"Well, um... do you want her exact words?"
"Please."
"She said, you warned her about colts like Spike, and that she'll never forgive him."
"Oh... this is a disaster."
"What? Wait, why?"
"Twilight!" Rarity exclaimed, grabbing her friend. "Those two belong together! They are in love!"
"What? And you're okay with that!?"
"Of course not!" She released the librarian. "But my love for Spike must remain secondary to my sister's happiness."
"Really?"
"Of course!" she responded with pride, before quickly shifting to sorrow. "Also, Spike and I have no future, regardless."
"What exactly did you say?" Scootaloo asked.
Twilight's gaze drifted. "Uh... well, I summarized the past month for her. Told her all about how she asked Spike out after he'd already started dating you." She pointed toward her friend. "I also told her the story about how you convinced him to ask her out, and... well, you know how Rainbow started flirting with him?"
"Yeah, I was there. She was pretty drunk."
"You sure that wasn't just 'Rainbow'?" Rarity asked.
The filly ignored her. "Did you tell her about how he reacted to that?"
"What? Oh, yeah, how he didn't take it well, and rejected it outright?"
"The 'every mare in town' comment?"
"Yeah, mentioned that. I think that's what ruined it."
Rarity's attention was caught. "How?" she asked.
"Well, since dragons are naturally monogamous, she was probably angry that Spike went against that."
The two ponies stared at her for several seconds. "What?" they said in unison.
"She was angry Spike went against his instincts."
"Of monogamy?" Scootaloo asked.
"Yes."
A hoof hit her face in exasperation. "You told her dragons are monogamous?"
"Yes... why?"
"And where exactly did you hear that?"
Twilight was befuddled. "Um... I just presumed..."
"Rule number one when dealing with inter-species couples: Take their natural intuitions into account, and don't get them wrong! That's how most conflicts are created!"
"Huh?"
"Dragons aren't naturally monogamous, they're naturally polygamous!"
"What? Why do you say that?"
"Because that's what the book says!" she exclaimed, pulling a hardbound book out of her saddlebag.
"Alright!" Rarity exclaimed. "Enough! Twilight, do you know where Sweetie Belle ran off to?"
"No," she replied. "I have no idea!"
"In that case, I'll have to find her my own way."
"What? Why?" Scootaloo asked.
"Because, I should convince my sister to forgive Spike," the unicorn explained. "Such a situation is much more perilous. Scootaloo, I'll leave the rest in your capable hooves."
"Not a problem," the filly replied, with a salute.
Without another word, Rarity trotted away; leaving the two ponies behind.
"This book is in Tronese!" Twilight exclaimed.
"Neightonese."
"Oh..."
Sweetie Belle slowly sipped the mug of hot cocoa in her hooves. It raised her spirits only slightly.
Applejack sat at the table patiently, waiting for the ideal moment to ask a very crucial question.
She placed the cup down with a clunk, and the farmer asked, "Feelin' better?"
Sweetie Belle looked up, then down again, and shook her head.
"Wanna talk about it?"
She shook her head again.
Rainbow Dash scooted closer to the filly. "Can you at least tell us what's eatin' you?" she asked.
She shook her head one more time.
"Can I guess?"
Sweetie Belle didn't respond.
"Great! Okay!" the pegasus brought out her pensive look, and briefly stared into the distance. "Is it about Apple Bloom?"
No response.
"That's a 'no,'" she interpreted. "Is it about... your cutie mark?"
No response... again.
"Is it... is it about your sister?"
The unicorn flinched slightly.
"Rainbow!" Applejack scolded.
"What? I think I'm getting close!" the pegasus rebutted.
"Look, Sweetie Belle, if you don't want to tell us, that's fine," the earth pony explained. "We don't need to know anything you don't want us to."
Then the words just fell out of her mouth, without a thought. "It's about Spike," she explained.
"Ooo!" Rainbow replied. "What about him?"
Sweetie Belle hesitated slightly, rubbing her hooves together before continuing. "Me and him... we've been dating for the past month." Her voice started to choke. "But today, I found out he was also dating Rarity behind my back." The tears flowed once again.
"Oh, Sweetie Belle," Applejack responded, embracing the young filly. "It's alright. Everythin'll be alright."
"Why did he do this?" she cried between tears.
"I don't know," she replied. "I'm sure he didn't mean to hurt you."
"But he did! He did!!!"
"But that makes no sense!" Rainbow explained. "Why would he go after you two, after turning me down?"
Applejack shot her friend a look that said, 'Shut up, Rainbow.'
The pegasus complied.
Suddenly, and without warning, Sweetie Belle's horn started to glow brightly, and faded just as quickly.
The distraction managed to silence the filly's sobs, as she asked, "what was that?"
The two non-unicorns shrugged.
In Ponyville's town square, surrounded by shoppers and commuters, one unicorn was oblivious to the crowds, and focused on her work.
Rarity's horn was aglow as she methodically moved it around, pointing the appendage in every conceivable direction.
Eventually, one particular corner of the town drew her attention. She smiled and ended the spell, before trotting in the direction of Sweet Apple Acres.
The day was looking up.
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Been a few months waiting... but the wait was worth it.
Good work here.
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She sold her soul to the devil for a cutie mark, does that work?
Actually that's not true, but Twilight thinks otherwise.
It'll all be explained, calm your tits.
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Waited all Summer for this update.
Alriiiiight. Update! Now MOAR!
3469140 Or when they confuse Cantonese with Mandarin. That is just painful.
About time!
Anyway, nice. Hope to see more soon!
Ah... some of the narrative was confusing. When Twilight talked to Rarity, for instance, her reaction was that of her just noticing Rarity arriving, even though they were both in the Scooter and wagon. At a glance, I barely realized that Rarity was there until randomly Twilight called Rarity. This made the narration a bit confusing.
When there's a scene change, and especially a character POV change, it's usually bad practice to refer to someone as "familiar friends", because that is very vague from a narrative standpoint. Or if you are going to do that, make sure to very quickly identify them so that there's no question as to who they are (after all, for all we know, Scoot may have ditched Rarity and picked up someone else on the way).
I mean, yes, we could eventually figure out who they are and what happened exactly, but it took a second look for me to realize what you meant exactly. Inefficient narration, in other words.
Hope I'm not being unduly harsh, but this is definitely something to watch out for in future updates.
>Arby finally reads it expecting a polygamous ending
>seems to be SweetieSpike
shiet son
Whelp another spikebelle fix
*sigh*
Nevermind
well, i officially stop following and faving this.
3475264
I'm also not enjoying this anymore, the Story is fucked, but i'll stick around to see how bad it can get .
There are many, many more examples of this throughout, and it's called LUS (Lavender Unicorn Syndrome) it's basically when you replace someone's name with a short description when you feel the name is overused. It breaks the immersion, even for a few seconds, and to be honest, it's kind of annoying. You could use pronouns, their actual name, or just try to avoid LUS in general. Sorry if you already know all this, I just want to help and give my opinion.
Other than this, I like it. Keep up the good work
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What's with all the SpikeBelle hate? It was pretty obvious that that's how this'll and I figured it out before I even read the story. And even so, SpikeBelle's, not that bad. I'm probably going to get downvoted to hell with this comment, but I'm just doing what I can to defend my OTP, so I'm ready for it.
That is all.
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It's not the chosen pairing that makes this Story bad, it's the Story itself lol .
When i first read this Story i actually liked it, from what i recall the interactions with Spike and Belle were what sold me .
The Author seems to just want to make it end asap, and it really shows in the writing quality .
btw; What does "OTP" mean ?
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Huh, I didn't really notice that. Maybe he lost the will to write the story? And maybe he's just continuing the story because he feels obligated to finish what he started. I dunno, maybe.
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Look at his conversation with candrew in this comment section .
He doesn't seem to be able to take criticism/advice and says that he thinks his Story is uninteresting (despite it being his most popular one, i might add) so i don't really know why he's even continuing the Story either .
3480000 no hate on SpikeBelle. I just prefer not to realize that Spike spent a shitton of hours helping Rarity and doing a buncha shit only to never actually have it pan out in the end... hence why I prefer Sparity.
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For me yeah it is spikexbelle hate.
But not because I hate them. I just hate the idea of them together, and the reason is addressed in the story itself. To some degree.
Spike has loved rarity since day one, that is understood by everypony so much so that it is a running gag on the show (and to what we believe as the real ponyville[the understood existence of how ponyville works in the fandom]) so the idea that spike stops going after rarity and instead goes after sweetie belle, I believe, would not be in spike's character at all. I truly believe that spike would see that "can't get the one sister, go after the other" mentality is a real dick thing to do. Spike is not a dick thing, he is just trying to find love. Maybe someday down the road he could be with sweetie, but to go from rarity straight to her. I don't see that happening.
As for this story I don't know what I was thinking was gonna happen but I guess I was rooting for sparity, or better yet a three way. He does have two.
Also I wish he would just say what scootaloo is upto. Its kinda annoying having him talk about another story while writing a different one
Have to say, Twilight and Scootaloo are really OOC...
But good story so far!
What's guna happen?!
Wait did rainbow say she tried going out with spike too? Spike is dangerously close to becoming a Gary Stu...
Starting to understand what's going on. Dammit Scoots, stahp being so mysterious.
I'm kind of confused on that conversation with Scootaloo, Twilight and Rarity. Am I the only one?
I think I'm confused because during this conversation it is difficult to tell WHO is speaking.
3518687 It happens to me too. Just me though I usually get confused on who's talking in stories.
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I didn't read all of that because of one reason: It has nothing to do with my story. It's not even remotely related. I assume that's all from some D&D manual or something. Well, this is not D&D.
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Thank you very much, something to look out for in the future.
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I don't think she wanted to kill them.
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"I just prefer not to realize that Spike spent a shitton of hours helping Rarity and doing a buncha shit only to never actually have it pan out in the end..."
...What? So you're saying the only reason Spike helped Rarity out was not because he was being a good friend, but because he was making an investment for future sex?
That is... the saddest thing I've ever heard in my life. Literally.
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Don't worry, she probably wasn't serious. He was just the only guy in the area.
As for the Gary Stu-ness. Trust me there won't be any trace of that in the end.
3608267 wat? No, what does sex have to do with anything? I simply meant that I'd rather the time and effort spent assisting Rarity went somewhere more mushy and such rather than be violently ignored like most fanfics that feature a Rarity romance. Or something, I dunno. tl;dr, I just like to see Spike get the girl in the end so either way this story is fine.
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Well he did get the girl. But later learned he wanted another girl.
3608341 HENCEFORTH HE NOW LOST OLD GIRL but that's my Sparity fanboy crying. AT LEAST he managed to succeed for a little while; I like stories that at least acknowledge that Spike likes Rarity.
3608267 I like your "no BS" comment replies
I like this story. its good
must read next chapter asap
New chapter! please! I will DIE without it!!!
Edit: Scootaloo confuses me.
Why exactly are you on hiatus? I would love for the story to be finished.
LOVE THIS STORY!
ok...WHAT IN THE FLYING FUCK IS GOING ON WITH SCOOTALOO!!!!!??
(comment regarding the congratulations that she received from rarity)
Please update this fic as soon as you can keeping us in suspense like this is killing me.
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, since I was intending 'polygamous', but the below comic was sticking out in my head at the time and I thought that "biligamous" would be the term for dating two people, when that actually falls under "polygamy". I blame my past self for being a bit dim. 
A biligamous relationship is *consults the internet*..... Ok, so I messed that up
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"Bigamy" is when you are married to two different people at once. Often fraudulently.
Sorry for the confusion I caused.
Now we shall wait for the new chapter together!
Hope you brought your own tent, Mine is cramped with my camping stuff.
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Well if it’s ever been time for me to smack a bitch, it would certainly be now. Not only does the harem genre make me wish for it’s violent death, I despise its very existence because for someone like me who can’t hold a girlfriend, when some bloody sod who has one girl then has to have twelve more chasing after his two inch erection, it makes me was to murder him with a giant Rainbow Dash-themed love pillow!
Maybe I’m being a pedantic because I’m not too fond of Rarity or Sweetie Belle. Rarity’s a bitch, second only to Rainbow Dash, and while Sweetie Belle is a good character, she’s also a child, and like all children she’s an annoying little sh– um… she’s an adorable little angel.
Sibling Rivalry is something that I had an actual fear for when it came to reviewing. The way I see it, I have two paths before me: pussy-whipped bitch or cynical prick… Cynical prick it is. I’d imagine that staring right into the sun while it’s exploding would be far more entertaining than this garbage.
Sibling Rivalry is a the tale of Spike, who dicks around for a chapter or two before he finally works up the gall to ask Rarity out on a date. Then through some all-too-contrived events, he and Sweetie Belle end up frolicking through a carnival, and then comes the eventual, “I can’t choose between these two!” I attempted to reread it since it has been awhile, but fuck it! I couldn’t make it back through first three chapters.
If you are going to try and mimic every harem anime ever, then at least make it likeable, because this story is about as interesting as a speck of dirt hidden within the wrinkles of a whale’s scrotum. If I wanted to read this shit, I would pick up a copy of Love Hina instead, or if I wanted to be entertained, I would play Dark Souls. If I wanted to torture myself beyond human comprehension, I might decide to read this story. Furthermore I- ...what’s that? ...A new chapter of The Mystics has been dropped? Well, screw this noise...