Chapter Five - Day
The carnival only happened in Ponyville once a year. When the carnie-ponies finally came around to this part of Equestria, and took over the field next to the local elementary school. They toured the nation, bringing entertainment to the masses, and ripping off plenty of ponies along the way. At least, that's what was going through Spike's mind as both he and his date walked through the games area.
Twilight warned Spike long ago to watch out for this kind of thing. However, he couldn't help but notice that in spite of the fact that most of them were losing, everypony was having fun.
"OO!" Sweetie Belle said, grabbing Spike's arm. "Let's play a game!"
"Uh," Spike said hesitantly. "I don't know Sweetie Belle, I'm pretty sure they're all rigged."
"Huh?"
"They're impossible to win."
Just then, not far from the young couple, one stallion screamed, "YEAHHHH!!" as a carnie gave him a giant stuffed raccoon.
They both saw this, and when Spike turned back to Sweetie Belle, he saw a giant smirk on her face. "Well," he explained, "obviously they're going to let somepony win on occasion to keep up appearances."
She just looked at him.
"UGH! Fine!" Spike said, giving up. "Which one?"
Sweetie began looking around, and gasped when her eyes finally settled on one. She galloped off ahead of Spike, and he ran after her.
They arrived at the stand with guns. The goal was clearly posted on the wall at the back, surrounded by several giant stuffed animals. One had to shoot out the star in the centre of a piece of paper with a BB gun. Seemed simple. But then again, most scams did.
"How much?" Spike asked the gruff earth pony attendant.
"Two bits a go," he said, chewing on what Spike presumed was chewing gum.
Placing two bits on the counter, he quickly grabbed the rifle that was lying on the table and carefully aimed it at the star that was hanging six feet away. Firing off a few BBs, he noticed they ended up a few inches to the left. He continued firing, aiming a few inches to the right, trying to make it look like he was honestly trying, so Sweetie Belle wouldn't think his eventual loss was intentional.
He continued to fire, and by the time he was out of bullets, the star was still there, though it had a few holes in it.
"Oh well," Spike said, placing the rifle back on the counter. "Come on, Sweetie Belle, let's check something else out."
"Hey, buddy," the attendant yelled. "You can always have a second go."
"No thanks," the dragon said with a wave.
As the two were walking away, Spike could hear the attendant scoff. "Figures," he said, "Scaly little rodent."
The young dragon stopped in his tracks, turned his head, and looked directly at the attendant. "Did you say something?" he asked.
"I said you can try again."
Not many ponies knew how sensitive dragon hearing was. So Spike wasn't entirely surprised the attendant would lie. But he still didn't want him to get away with it. Spike walked back and asked quite simply, "How do I get one of those big ones?"
"Those?" he asked, pointing to the prizes at the very top. "Well, shoot out three stars and I'll let you have your pick."
"Set it up," Spike said, setting two more bits on the counter.
Once the rifle was ready and the star replaced, Spike fired a single shot and noticed this rifle was leading an inch to the right, so he aimed an inch to the left of where he wanted to hit, and fired around the star in a circle. The star fell out onto the ground.
"Well, good work," the attendant said, as both he and Sweetie Belle applauded. "Wanna try again, get one of the bigger prizes?"
Spike shook the rifle just a bit and noticed he still had some ammo. "Yep," he said, right before aiming at the star next to it. A few shots later, it too fell on the ground. Spike then proceeded to shoot out the star next to that one. Then, just for fun, he fired two more BBs in the paper above the hole where the star once was.
The attendant's jaw hit the ground.
"Okay, where'd you learn to do that!?" Sweetie Belle asked, as she carried a giant pink bunny that was nearly twice her size, on her back.
"Well, after I tried that first time, I quickly learned how to fire the thing," Spike explained. "After that, it was all strategy."
Sweetie giggled just a bit. "Did you see the look on his face?"
"Yeah! That was really cool."
The two began laughing together as they walked through the crowd.
"So," Spike asked, once the laughter died down. "What do you want to do now?
"Hmmmm..." Sweetie Belle said, hoof on her chin. "Sugarcube corner has a booth somewhere."
Spike remembered hearing that from Pinkie earlier in the week. The carnies always allowed some local merchants to showcase their wares, just for fun. Primarily because most of the time, there wasn't any competition; and it allowed some of the older patrons to waste time, while their younger charges played around. Plus it garnered them goodwill with the locals, which everypony loved.
"Hmmmm..." Spike said, claw on chin. "Sounds good!" he said with a smile.
The two youngsters walked through the crowds searching the local merchants. Sweetie Belle staying as close as she could to her crush, as he navigated the fairgrounds.
The two of them passed the booth for Quills and Sofas, which was next to the Tumbler. It was a ride that spun three different ways and was notable for the puddle of vomit next to the ride's exit.
"Scootaloo would love this thing," Sweetie Belle said, as she watched the machine spin along its main axis, while the cars attached ran along the outside of it, causing the individual carriages to spin.
"Yeah," Spike replied. "Let's avoid it."
Sweetie Belle giggled as the two continued on. They passed the Twister, which was another spinning ride, but looked a little less crazy since there were no cages, and it didn't go up in the air; and the classic bumper cars.
They were about to continue on, when a familiar face stopped them. "Hiya! Care for some Rainbow cupcakes!?" went an excitable yellow earth pony, with a tray of treats balanced on her head.
Young Apple Bloom was wearing a white shirt with pink and brown accents along the edges with a matching visor; and selling some very familiar treats: Pinkie Pie's signature Rainbow cupcakes. They had five distinct flavours contained within, and were always well-stocked at Sugarcube Corner.
"Hey, Apple Bloom," Sweetie replied. "How's the summer job going?"
"Ugh!" the young earth pony groaned. "Pinkie's a bit of a slave driver, but it sure beats working the farm." As the pan balanced on her head, she looked at the two before her, and slyly said, "So, I see you took my advice."
"Huh..." Spike responded, crossing his arms. "So, I have you to blame for this!"
"Yep!" She said, as a big grin emerged on her face. "So, cupcakes?"
"Sure," he said, reaching between the scales on his right hip, and like a true gentledragon asked, "Sweetie Belle?"
The young unicorn smiled in response. "Please!" she said.
"That'll be four bits," the young salespony announced, holding out a hoof.
Spike gave her the payment, as he took two cupcakes from the tray, and handed one to his date, who grabbed it in her hoof.
"Pleasure doing business with you." Apple Bloom said, as she put the funds in a white money pouch hanging from her neck. She looked up at the giant toy on her friend's back. "So, Spike, I assume you won her that thing!?"
"Yeah," Sweetie said, excited. "He shot out three stars in one round."
"Really?" Apple Bloom said, "Impressive."
"Yeah," Spike said, proudly, running his free claw across his head. "Yeah it was."
"So," the earth pony continued. "Have you two checked out any of the rides?"
"I don't know," Sweetie Belle said, as she was chewing a bite of cupcake. "They look kinda scary."
"Yeah, but they're fun!" Her yellow friend responded. "You can ease yourself into it, the Twister isn't too bad."
Spike looked back at the ride they passed a few minutes ago. Sweetie noticed her date's smile and said, "Yeah, let's do that!"
"Really!?" Spike asked. He didn't think Sweetie would try any of the fast rides. Apparently he had a lot to learn about the little filly. "Alright!" he said, eating half his cupcake in one bite. "Let's go."
As the two walked away, both with big smiles, Apple Bloom said to them, "See you later lovebirds."
Just then, realization hit Spike. "Could you wait here Sweetie Belle?" he said, as she finished her cupcake. The young dragon ran back and caught up with Apple Bloom. "Hey, Apple Bloom," he said, as she was trying to sell more cupcakes.
She turned from the potential sale to look at her scaly friend. "Yeah?"
"Could you do me a favour?" he asked.
"What is it?"
"Could you keep what you saw here...quiet?"
"You mean you and Sweetie Belle?" Apple Bloom was confused. She was planning on doing so anyway. After all, even though Sweetie Belle didn't care how the rest of the town reacted, Apple Bloom certainly did. But why did Spike care? Did he share her concerns?
"Yeah," he replied. "That's not a problem is it?"
Apple Bloom shook her head. "My lips are sealed!" she ran her hoof along her lips.
"Thanks," he said. Quickly running back after his date.
Apple Bloom raised an eyebrow in confusion at the evacuating dragon, before returning to work.
The two youngsters were on the Twister as it spun around inches from the ground, seated in one of the ride's dozen-or-so cars. As they spun around, the two of them slid into each other several times, trying to stabilize themselves by holding onto the safety bar, and laughing all the while.
Several dome-shaped cars were driving around a metal arena. In one of them, was a young purple dragon, and as he drove around the arena, he was spontaneously hit in the side, sending his car into the nearest wall. Once he recovered, he looked to the source of the interruption. Another car, driven by a young white unicorn, with a big evil smirk on her face. She hit him again.
"HEY!" Spike exclaimed.
Another hit.
"Stop it!"
Sweetie backed up for another run. But Spike responded once she began her charge, by backing up himself. She hit the wall her date was previously pinned to.
Then, before she could recover. "AHHH!!!" the young unicorn yelled as she was hit in the side by her former victim, who now had his own big evil smirk.
As he backed up for another hit, Sweetie Belle got ready for her counter-attack, and as her car was hit again, she had leapt from it, and right onto the dragon.
"GAH!" the dragon screamed and laughed as his date attacked him. Once he opened his eyes, he was surprised to see the young filly smiling, her face inches from his. His smile disappeared.
Sweetie noticed their position and quickly jumped off. "Sorry," she said, as she jumped back into her car.
The young dragon had only one thing to say regarding what happened: "What the-?"
Spike wandered through the corridors, lined with mirrors, each of which reflected his image. He walked towards where he thought the exit was, only to stop when an image of him stood in the way, as if to laugh at him. He was growing annoyed.
"Spike!" he heard behind him. Sweetie Belle was standing in one of the 'mirrors,' smiling and beckoning the young dragon.
He walked towards his date and began following her. "You find the way out?" he asked.
"I think so," she replied.
They continued walking until they entered a circular room lined with mirrors.
"Oh...nevermind," she said. "Okay, how do we get out of here?"
Spike turned around, and said, "Better question is, how'd we get in?"
The two began frantically looking around the room.
At nearly fifty metres tall, the dominating figure at the carnival had to be the Big Wheel. It was big, pink, metal, and very imposing. But wasn't intimidating. Next to the teacup ride, it had to be the most relaxing ride in the entire park. So the young couple wasn't nervous at all as they boarded the circular gondola before them. At least, they weren't nervous because of the ride.
They were able to get a carriage all to themselves, since the line wasn't very long that day. They sat down on the cushioned seats, and Sweetie placed her giant rabbit on the opposite side. The wheel moved, then stopped suddenly as more ponies boarded the ride.
"So..." Spike said. The wheel started moving again, then stopped just as suddenly. "This is fun."
Sweetie giggled.
As the wheel began to turn again, and before it suddenly stopped again, an awkward silence fell upon the car, since neither really knew what to say. The incident in the bumper cars made things a bit awkward.
Spike twiddled his thumbs, thinking of a way to kill the awkwardness, then it came to him. He hanged his head in resignation.
"Sweetie," he said hesitantly. "I need to tell you something."
She closed her eyes, and said, "I know."
"You do?"
"Spike," she began. "I had a great time today, and that's probably because it was with you. You're kind, sweet, fun to be around, and I really like you, and...I know you don't feel the same way." She began to hang her head in sadness. "But!" She popped her head back up and looked at the dragon with a forced smile. "I'm really happy you agreed to come with me anyway! This was fun!"
Spike's lips quivered as he looked at the young filly. "That...that wasn't what I was about to say."
Sweetie Belle looked at her date, curiously.
"...because...I had fun too. A lot of fun...and I'd love to do it again, because...I...kinda like you too."
The joy in Sweetie Belle's heart made her feel like she was going to explode.
Spike opened his mouth to continue, but before he could say anything, Sweetie jumped on him and hugged him. Just then, the entire wheel began moving again, and didn't stop. It was finally finished loading, and they were ready to ride, but Sweetie Belle wasn't thinking about that. Her face was once again inches from the young dragon's, and this time, she took advantage of the situation. She kissed him. Which caused his face to turn beet-red.
The moment she broke the kiss, Spike looked at her; and after a moment, grabbed the back of her head and briefly kissed her back. He then said, "You know, we should really try to enjoy the view while we can."
Sweetie jumped off of the dragon, and began looking over the side of the capsule, as it rotated around the centre axis. As Spike joined her, she looked at him, and then he looked at her. They smiled.
The pink bunny was sitting on a bench, alone, as Spike was pacing in front of it. There were several scenarios that he planned out in his head early that morning, but this was not one of them, and he simply did not know what to do about it.
His fear and nervousness was almost palpable, and an aura like that attracts just the sort of creature that loves to destroy it.
Spike turned around again, and before him, inches from his face, were a plate of cookies, being held in the mouth of a pink earth pony wearing a white visor. "GAH!" He screamed in shock as he jumped in the air and landed right on his rear end.
A uniformed Pinkie Pie threw the plate in the air, and caught it with all the cookies on her head, as she began speaking. "Spike! What's up!?" she screamed!
"Hi Pinkie," Spike said as he got back to his feet. Tired after such a hectic day, he was not in the mood for Pinkie's shenanigans.
"Cookie!?" she offered.
"No thanks."
"You sure!? It's on the house!"
Spike just sighed and took one. Biting into it, he smiled and released a moan of pleasure.
"Like it!? It's a brand new recipe!"
"It's really good," the young dragon said. "What's in it?"
"OOP! That's a secret Spiky Wikey!" Pinkie never stopped smiling, and it annoyed Spike just a bit.
He just sighed and took another bite.
"So, something wrong?" Pinkie asked with genuine concern.
"Kinda..."
"Does it have anything to do with Rarity!?" she asked with a smile.
Spike looked at the pink earth pony with a bit of shock. She knew! "Sorta," he said, a bit scared. "Pinkie, could you do me a favour?"
"Yep!" she said with a giant smile. "Wait! What is it!?"
"Please don't tell anypony about me and Rarity."
"Okie Dokie!" she said, giant smile returning. "Wait! Why!?"
"I'm not sure about where things are going, and I don't need any pressure from anypony else."
"OOOOO!" Her eyes went wide. "She's going to be heartbroken!"
"Well, I'm not...wait...really?"
"Mhmmm!" Pinkie nodded vigorously. "She really likes you Spike!"
"...and I really like her!" he said. "That's the problem."
Pinkie tilted her head curiously. Holding the cookies in place with her hoof so they wouldn't fall off.
"Forget it, Pinkie," He said, giving the mare a sad smile. "I'll figure this out, it'll be fine."
"You sure?"
"I really don't want to talk about it."
Pinkie paused for a second before responding. "Okie Dokie Lokie!" she smiled and hopped off. Spike was about to turn back to his thoughts, when suddenly, the moment he turned, Pinkie appeared before him again. "Don't forget! If you ever change your mind! I'm always free!"
"Yeah, thanks Pinkie!" Spike said.
"Okie Dokie!" she said as she hopped away...again.
As Spike was watching Pinkie leave, he noticed something to his left. Turning to look at it, he saw Sweetie Belle standing next to him.
The young unicorn turned to look at her date, or as she saw him, her boyfriend, and smiled.
"Cookie?" he said, offering the rest of it to the young unicorn.
"Thanks," she said, levitating it towards her mouth.
Spike went to the bench and grabbed the big bunny. When he got back she said, "Mmmm! This is really good!"
"I know!"
By the time Spike entered the library, the sun was already starting to set. He saw Twilight at the other end of the main sitting room, crouched down in front of a book...natch. He closed the door behind him, and walked into the room, he wanted to make a beeline straight to bed, but he also wanted food.
"How'd it go?" the mare asked, getting to her hooves. "How'd she take it?"
The dragon looked at his best friend, and looked away in shame.
"Oh, what happened!?"
Spike remained quiet.
"What'd you do!?"
He quickly rushed into the kitchen.
"Spike!" The purple mare followed him. "Spike!!!"
He opened breadbox and pulled out a few slices of bread.
"Spike, what happened?"
He opened the pantry and pulled out a box which contained some broken gemstones.
"You made her cry, didn't you!?"
Placing a few stones on one of the bread slices, he put the box back where he got it, and went to the refrigerator.
"Did she get mad when you told her about Rarity?"
Pulling out a bottle of honey, he closed the fridge, and began pouring it on his sandwich.
"Did she tell Rarity?"
He placed another piece of bread on top and took a bite.
"Did Rarity get mad?"
He continued chewing as he walked back into the main sitting room.
"Spike, what happened!?"
He took another bite.
"Tell me, Spike! Tell me! Tell me! Tell me!"
"I fell for her all right!?" Spike yelled at Twilight, and himself.
The unicorn stood there, dumbfounded. It took her a second to process the information before asking, "You fell for...?"
The young dragon turned away in shame and said, "Sweetie Belle."
Twilight scoffed, "I knew something like this would happen."
"You did!?" Spike asked, turning to look at the young mare. "Why didn't you tell me!?"
"I thought I did!"
Spike put his claw on his face and shook his head. It might not have been avoided, but at least he would have had a warning.
Twilight walked up to her assistant and put a hoof on his shoulder. "So, when are you going to tell Rarity?" she asked.
"...I don't know," he said, dropping his hand.
"You don't know?" Twilight lowered her hoof.
"I still have feelings for Rarity," Spike explained, twiddling his fingers over the sandwich. "I just also have feelings for Sweetie Belle."
"What?" Twilight said, a bit confused. "Spike, you can't juggle two fillies at once!"
"I know!" he said. The young dragon was growing frustrated, more with himself than anyone else. "I just need to think things through. I'll choose one of them, but not right now, just give me a few days I'll figure everything out."
"Spike!"
"Just!..." he held up a claw to stop her. "Let me figure things out...on my own." Spike then walked to the stairs that led to his bed, but paused at the foot. He turned around and said, "Twilight."
"Yeah, Spike?" the mare said.
"Do me a favour, don't tell anypony."
Twilight nodded. "You have my word," she said, right before Spike proceeded up the stairs.
Twilight went back to her book, lying on the floor, exactly where she left it. As she crouched down to continue reading, she realized she couldn't. The unicorn closed the book and sighed. "My little Spike is growing up...I wish he'd stop."
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Because I am childish....
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Another fun read, and I somehow knew that this would happen (mainly because I read it on your site a couple days ago). Can't wait for the next chapter, and if you post it on your site before here can you please leave a link so we can read it? Thanks!
There is NO WAY that Twilight is gonna keep this secret for this long.
685284 At least you where epic about it
*Reads Description.*
I'm not gonna lie to you, this is sounding really gay. (Not Trolling, Just speakin' my opinion.)
OH WHERE IS IT GOING TO GOOOO!?!?!?
THIS ENTIRE SERIES IS JUST CLIFFHANGERSSSSS.
Sadface.
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This reminds me of a fic I was writing by the same name, only it was about the Flim Flam brothers...
I'm marking this to read later.
685392 I try.
Applebloom with Rainbow cupcakes made by Pinkie and she has a secret recipie for cookies too. I hope RD shows up somwhere in the fic later
This is gonna get a lot worse for them before it gets better.
Seems like the sort of thing that ends with stabbing.
I've actually been waiting for a fic like this. Even though you may or may not have wrote it, I'm really grateful for it!
Wooo, more to read! I look forward to the train wreck...
YESSSS been looking forward to this update for a while. I can't wait for the impending shit storm!
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Oh god, WHY did you have to remind me of School Days? That anime traumatized me so badly.
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Spike, GTFO of there!
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No, I assure you, a guy liking a girl is generally considered straight. Now, it is true that most romance fics on this site are gay, this one most certainly isn't. There's only two pairings, and they're both heterosexual. So I have no idea where you're coming from with that.
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I'm going to ensure that every character that can make a cameo, do so in the final act. That includes Rainbow, so I assure you she's still breathing.
Speaking of which, wait until Fluttershy shows up!
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Really? Well I know of an extension that can allow you to alter how a site is formatted using CSS. I forget the name right now, and am a little hammered so I probably couldn't explain
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Stabbing? .............I don't think so. Would a stabbing require a knife?
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.....HOW LONG HAVE I BEEN WRITING THIS!?
NEEDS TO BE FINISHED!!!
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...Thank you Captain Obvious. Who said that wouldn't happen?
687225 It's says it's On Hiatus
686912 I don't mean the pairing, I mean the subject matter at hand.
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Yeah, "On Hiatus" not cancelled.
Look, I give you my word, I'll come back for the next act. The main reason I ended it now was because the next chapter will start with a time jump, and I really need to work on some of my other projects.
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Howzat? Because it's about a love triangle? Yes, because those never happen in real life.
687694 I think I'm done here.
Oh... Things are gonna look bad for Spike at this point.
oh that smells like trouble
vs 
My little Spike is growing up... I wish he'd grow a brain too...
This does not bode well.
woooooooooooooooooooow asesomeeeeeeee !!! haha poor spike but xD he is soo dump mm i hope he will be fine xD
this could be 1 of my fav fics vary well written 10 mustaches to you
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My friend had an encounter with a shooting booth. That lady didn't even try to hide the fact that she was ripping us off, and charged something like five-six tokens a shot.
I wish the mirror mazes at real carnivals were that challenging.
And that is the sentiment of mothers everywhere.
I'm betting Rarity will find out sooner or later. SB knows about Rarity and seems to understand Spike's predicament, but how will Rarity react?
Either way, this can't end well for spike. Keep going!
Oh boy, this is just getting better and better, well, for me as a reader anyways. Spike? Eh, not so much. XD
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...Encounter!? You make it sound like you were attacked. I'm suddenly reminded of the time when the topfree laws were passed here in Ontario and someone on the news said her family had an "encounter" with a shirtless woman. Holy crap! We saw a tit, it was horrifying!!
Yes, the carnies rip you off, you didn't know that? It's like a casino, you go in, knowing you're going to get taken.
“The state lottery is not a tax on the poor, it’s a tax on all those people who never did well in mathematics.” - Neil DeGrasse Tyson
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at that last part
So spike lets get this straight...
Sweetie bell literally handed you a way out and you turned it down.... Do you wish for rarity to have a broken heart???
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If only 'twere that simple. You're forgetting that Spike fell for Sweetie Belle, probably during the bumper cars. So when she offered him 'a way out,' so to speak, he didn't take it because he wasn't sure if he wanted out. He'll figure it out eventually though...with a bit of help.
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I got that perfectly I'm just saying...awesome spike...awesome XD
This is a terrific way to explore all the tension between the sisters without getting maudlin about it. Love the soap opera idea plot contrasted with the brisk, perky pacing that keeps things funny and believable even if the setup is a wee bit contrived. I especially chuckled over Twilight's inner reactions. Eagerly awaiting more updates!
Can't wait for the next chapt... (read: on hiatus)
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please continue soon
i needs it
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I'm really sorry about this. But it wouldn't be fair to my other works if I focused solely on this one. I'll try to get a chapter out in the next month, if it pleases you.
Though I thank you for showing an interest. Glad some people are excited.
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I'm also looking forward to more, this story's very fun! Keep up the good work.
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Scootaloo? It's made pretty clear where Scootaloo is in the very first chapter.
I usually avoid stories with the "Romance" tag on it .
But this one here is very well done, enjoyable and reallistic .
Plus your description of the carny folk is very accurate ( i'm one myself) .
Keep up the good work !
Holy crap.
A psuedo-SweetieSpike story.
That is actually well written.
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IS THIS WHAT HEAVEN TRULY FEELS LIKE.
Any clue to when you will re-start this story?
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Once I get further along in one of my other stories. I got other work too.
You want a timeline? Next chapter might be released early October, but I make no guarantees.
Good take your time .
I dont want to have anything rushed like "Discordant" again ^^
Thought he was a lizard...why did the game owner say rodent?
OH GOD. NEVER PUT IN "Rainbow cupcakes" IN THAT STORY EVER AGAIN. HORRIFYINGLY CLOSE TO THE Cupcakes STORY.