Chapter Seven - Cupcakes
Ponyville was a bustling little town, filled with ponies from all walks of life. Earth Ponies, Unicorns and Pegasi all bought and sold various goods and services on the streets, and in stores throughout the downtown area. But typically, all this ended once the sun went down, and everypony settled in for a good night's sleep.
However Sugarcube Corner was not a store that settled down that easily.
The bakery was mostly quiet, as Apple Bloom swept the front of the store. She prided herself at being a diligent worker, and it was something that impressed both the store's owners, and her manager.
"Looking good, Apple Bloom," came a cheery voice from behind her.
"Thanks Pinkie," she replied, turning to face the back kitchen, and her boss. "Need any help back there?"
"Nope, everything's okie dokie in the stovie."
"Don't you mean 'oven'?"
"Yeah, but ovenie doesn't sound right."
Apple Bloom raised an eyebrow at the pink pony's proclamation.
Ding-a-ling
A bell rang from behind the young filly. Turning around, she saw a very familiar purple dragon enter the store.
"Hey, Spike," she said happily before throwing the broom up in the air, and kicking it across the room. It landed perfectly in the nearby supply closet, and the door closed in response.
"Hey, Apple Bloom," he said with a sigh.
"What's wrong, Spike!?" came a concerned voice from across the room.
"Oh...um...nothing, I just need somewhere to think. Can you get me a sarsaparilla and a vanilla cupcake?"
"Vanilla?" Pinkie replied. "Ugh! Boring! But alright!" She dipped into the back room.
Apple Bloom approached the young dragon as he took a seat at one of the front tables. "Somethin' wrong Spike?" she asked with genuine concern.
"Kinda," he replied.
"Wanna talk about it?"
Spike paused for a second, he really did wanna talk about it, but Apple Bloom was so close to Sweetie Belle, who knew how she'd react. "No, thanks."
"Okay."
Pinkie rushed out of the kitchen and dropped Spike's order on the table before him. "Spike, you look so sad," the observant party pony declared.
"No, just...just worried."
"What about?" Spike was about to open his mouth before she held up a hoof and said, "Wait! Don't tell me! Problems at the library!"
Spike shook his head as he grabbed his cupcake.
"Hmmmm...Is somepony sick?"
He chewed the sugary treat and shook his head.
"Hmmmm...ooo! Trouble with Rarity!?"
His eyes went wide.
Apple Bloom turned to look at the elder pony. "Rarity?" she asked. "What does she have to do with anythin'?
"Oooop!" Pinkie said, throwing her hooves to her mouth. "I wasn't supposed to say anything was I? I'm sorry!"
"Say anythin' about what?" the yellow filly asked.
"Rarity and Spike's relationship-oop! I did it again!"
To Pinkie's surprise the young earth pony began giggling. "Oh, Pinkie, you're such a kidder. He's not in a relationship with Rarity, I know that for a fact!"
"What?" she asked.
"Mmmhm, Spike's been datin' Sweetie Belle for the past three weeks, Rarity has nothin' to do with that."
The pink pony's jaw dropped as her head cocked to the left, and her eyebrow raised in confusion. "What?"
"Yeah, she can't stop talkin' about him, tellin' me how much fun they have together. Kinda jealous actually."
"What?"
"Well, no not in that way, I just wish I had a special somepony of my own."
"What?"
"Pinkie, are you okay?"
She vigorously shook her head and came back to her senses. "He's been dating Rarity for the past three weeks, what are you talking about?"
"Nooooo, he's been datin' Sweetie Belle. I know because I told her to ask him out and she's been continually tellin' me how well it's been goin' for the past three weeks, and I've even seen 'em together a few times too. Trust me, they're datin'."
"Nooooo, for the past three weeks Rarity's been telling me and Twilight how well things are going between her and Spike, she told us all about these romantic dinners, and how good of a cook Spike is. In fact, she keeps giving us too much information if you ask me. She said he does this thing with his tounge..."
"...where he wraps it around..." The earth ponies said in perfect sync, motioning their hooves around their mouths. Their eyes widened in shock.
"Spike," Apple Bloom said, turning around. "What's goin' on?"
The young dragon was frozen in place. The first bite of cupcake was still in his mouth. His face was a pale white. His irises had shrunk to pinpoints.
"Spike?"
The dragon's eyes drifted slowly to his left, to look at the young filly.
"What's goin' on?"
His mind began racing. He could fake a seizure, maybe. But he forgot what actually happened during a typical seizure. He had a chunk of cupcake in his mouth, maybe he could force himself to choke on the pastry. But that was quickly dismissed when he realized cake was quite soft, so it was unlikely to work. It also didn't help that his dragon instincts would likely kick-in and he's just incinerate the food-stuff while it was in his throat.
"Spike," Apple Bloom said, bothered by the silence. "Swallow."
He slowly downed the contents of his mouth. The fear on his face did not go away. He was trapped. What could he say? The answer was simple: nothing...except the truth.
"Okay," she said, slowly. "Now, tell us what's goin' on."
His mind started racing once again, this time, with only one simple thought: 'CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP CRAP!!!!!'
"Spiiiike?"
She wasn't going to let this go, the young dragon realized. So he resigned himself to his fate. Turning in his seat, he looked at the two earth ponies. Pinkie's expression was easily to pinpoint, she was confused. Which didn't surprise him. What did surprise him was Apple Bloom's face, which was harder to interpret. Determination? Confusion? Suspicion? Anger? She looked at him dead in the eyes; her mouth in a slight frown, open just a bit; and her face was inches from his. It didn't make him uncomfortable though, mainly because he thought he deserved it.
"Spike, you're not leavin' until you tell us what's goin' on."
He sighed, and lowered his head. It was now or never. He preferred never, but he also preferred not to have them figure it out on their own. "For the past three weeks I've been dating both Rarity and Sweetie Belle, sometimes on the same day, without the other knowing."
Silence descended on the small pastry shoppe. The young dragon didn't look away from the ground. He was afraid to do anything else. Eventually the silence got to him. He slowly raised his head, and was met with a yellow hoof hitting him square in the chest, throwing him to the nearest wall, which was only a few feet away.
"You rat bastard!" She screamed. "You've been two-timin' Sweetie Belle this whole time!?"
"Apple Bloom!" Pinkie Pie interjected.
She trotted up to the dragon, who had already collapsed on the floor. Raising her hooves in the air, she was all ready to slam them down on his body...but she was interrupted.
"Go ahead," he said, looking up at the young filly. "Just do it. I deserve it. I know they're eventually going to find out, and they're both going to hate me forever. So just do it."
She slowly lowered her hooves to the ground, a solemn look appearing on her face, which quickly transformed into frustration as she screamed, "RRRRAHGRHHHH!!!" and turned around, trotting away.
Pinkie walked up to the young dragon. "Are you okay, Spike?" She asked, holding out a hoof.
"Yeah," he said, using the mare's help to get to his feet. "Thanks."
"Why are you helpin' him!?" Apple Bloom asked from across the room. "He's been lyin' to Rarity and Sweetie Belle...and us!"
"Oh, Spike's a nice dragon," the baker said with a smile. "I'm sure he had a good reason. Right Spike?"
"Oh, this'll be good," she trotted up to the two-timing bastard, as she thought of him. "I can't wait to hear this!"
Spike could still hear the anger in the young filly's voice. He recoiled as she approached. His eyes darted back and forth, between the two ponies. Releasing a sigh, he decided to begin his tale.
"Okay, I guess it started when me and Rarity went on our first date. It went well, or as well as could be expected. Afterward, I went for a walk through the park."
Apple Bloom's eyes went wide. "Oh," she said.
"Yeah...Sweetie Belle was there, and she was trying to do some magic, I thought I should teach her what I knew. The next day, she asks me out on a date. I don't know why I said 'yes,' but I did. I was going to try to let her down easy when we were at the carnival but I...I didn't, because I..." He paused, unsure of how to continue.
"Spike?" Pinkie Pie was concerned.
"...because I fell for her. I'm in love with two different fillies, and I know I can't stay with both of them. But I don't know which one I should stay with, and which one I should...leave behind."
Apple Bloom was taken aback. Spike was in love with both of them? How was that possible?
"I know one of them is going to be left heartbroken, and the other will only stay with me if I'm really lucky."
"Spike," the yellow filly explained. "It's been three weeks, and you have no idea who you want to be with?"
"No."
"Oh Spike," Pinkie said. "It's obvious who you should be with."
"It is?" he responded.
"Yeah, it's obvious!" Apple Bloom declared.
"Well then who?"
The two earth ponies replied in sync, "Sweerarity Belle." ...Sort of. They looked at each other.
"What!?" Apple Bloom asked.
"Sweetie Belle?" Pinkie was incensed.
"Rarity? She's a stuck-up old snooty pants!"
"She's mature, and she has passion and dignity," the elder mare explained. "What does Sweetie Belle have? Immaturity and no cutie mark!"
"Well...Rarity's crazy, a little grape juice sends her into a panic!"
"Well...Sweetie Belle...has...um...OO!!! She's reckless! She spends half her days doing stupid stunts that could get her killed!"
"We all agreed to those stunts!" Apple Bloom was starting to take it personally. "And at least she's tryin' somethin' different! We're tryin' to find our cutie marks, we're not waitin' for 'em to come to us, we're goin' after 'em head first!!! Rarity just waited around for her horn to drag her to a giant rock!"
"Rarity has experience, she knows how to show him a good time!"
"Oh, sure, a borin' dinner and walkin'! Soooo excitin'."
"No, other good times, in other places! Didn't Applejack or Cheerilee ever teach you about that stuff!?"
As Spike's eyes went wide. Apple Bloom stared at her for several seconds before the pieces clicked. "OH!" She exclaimed. "Oh, that! Well, Sweetie Belle can read up on that stuff, I remember findin' all sorts of books about that in Twilight's library!!!"
The dragon wasn't liking where this was going.
"Oh, sure, then what?" Pinkie asked. "She'll get her cutie mark in b-"
"ALRIGHT! ALRIGHT!!" Spike exclaimed, stepping between the ponies. "This isn't helping! Thank you both for trying. Really, thank you, but I think I'll go back to figuring this out on my own."
"Spike!" Apple Bloom explained. "You can't keep leadin' 'em on like this!"
"I'm not leading them on, I really do love them," he explained. "I just...can't decide who I love more." He solemnly shoved his claws into his scales.
The girls looked at each other. Unsure of what to say.
"Promise me you won't tell them," Spike said. His head still hung low.
"We promise Spike," Pinkie said. Grabbing him in a hug. "You need to be the one to tell them."
"...and you better tell 'em soon," Apple Bloom declared, as he squirmed out of the mare's embrace.
"I know...and thank you." He walked back to his table, and started sipping on his drink.
As Pinkie walked toward the back room, the younger filly followed right behind.
As the door swung closed, Apple Bloom asked the most crucial question. "So, should we tell 'em?"
"What!?" Pinkie exclaimed in a whisper. "We promised Spike we wouldn't, he trusts us, and-"
"-losin' a friend's trust is the fastest way to lose a friend forever," she explained, with a deadpan expression. "I know that Pinkie, Spike trusts us to keep his secret. But Sweetie Belle trusts me to help her, and keep her safe. She trusts me to tell her if I know somethin' she needs to know, and this is somethin' she needs to know."
The curly-maned mare put a hoof to her chin. "Well, do you want to be the one to break her heart?"
"I wouldn't be," she explained. "But I would be partly responsible. RRRRRAH!" she screamed in frustration. "We need to do somethin'."
"Hmmm...perhaps we could help him figure out which mare he should date!"
"We already tried that Pinkie. It didn't work."
"Yeah, because we each only heard one side of the problem."
Apple Bloom tilted her head. "What are you suggestin' Pinkie Pie?"
The pink mare smiled.
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This chapter. So full of hilarity at Spike's predicament.
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Spike is on borrowed time
Rarity Rarity Rarity
Pinkie has a plan?
Spike is sooooooo bucked now. 
As for the chapter? I had a real good chuckle, great work brony.
So Pinkie was all like
and Applebloom was all like 
at the possibility of Spike choosing Rarity but Spike should choos Rarity because she goes all 
when she sees spike 8 D
Technically, bigamy is LEGAL in equestria. But just in case I'm wrong...
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This story is interesting.However, this chapter had a major flaw. Pinkie Pie was simply out of character.
Pinkie Pie isn't confrontational. Discussions and arguments are natural, but this was a confrontational one-upping, and worse, mud-slinging verbal match. Pinkie Pie doesn't seem like a pony who would even think about one pony being better than another, she loves all ponies in Ponyville. As somepony who's determined to be friends with everypony in Ponyville, she would need to concentrate on the positives of any pony she meets,while ignoring the negatives.
Speaking of which: whether Pinkie knows about any negative sides about Sweetie Belle or not, she would never use that in a misguided attempt to highlight positives sides about another pony. She would just need to do what she does best, concentrate on the positive.
It ends up coming too close to insults, which Pinkie Pie wouldn't do (especially not about ponies she like). Speaking of which, Applebloom was right there when she basically insulted the CMC. Thus insulting Applebloom. To her face.
That's just all kinds of wrong.
And overall, she just didn't seem...'bubbly' enough, to be a convincing Pinkie Pie.
I understand what you were trying to do with the scene, but it could have been written in a way that produced the same results, without having Pinkie Pie acting wildly out of character.
Example:
Instead of Applebloom and Pinkie Pie trying to one-up the the pony they didn't think was right for Spike, and have it devolve into a shouting match of insults, they could have simply concentrated on the positive aspects of the pony they thought was right for Spike. Pike Pie excitedly listing off "a bunch of fun stuff about Rarity", in order to help spike make a decision (without trying to force the choice on him), is a believable scenario. With Applebloom doing the same, along with a remark or two about how fussy rarity can be, would also make a lot more sense. If nothing else, it would remove the quite unnecessary amount of drama and negativity between Pinkie Pie and Applebloom. Hopefully, it would also allow the story to concentrate on Spike's indecision as he is reminded of all the positive things about both mares, none of which he wants to risk losing by making a choice.
I'm just giving my honest opinion here. Hopefully in the form of constructive criticism. However, at the end of the day it's not my story. You have the full right o just ignore everything I have written.
Its never good when Pinkie Pie smiles
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I think you're right. But you'll notice Pinkie didn't have those insults at the top of her head, she had to dig for them, and Apple Bloom initiated the negativity. Pinkie Pie was in a panic, she wanted to defend her point, or more accurately, defend her friend. She got emotionally invested in her friend's relationship. Naturally she would get a bit aggressive.
But you're probably a bit right. She should have been a bit more hesitant.
Now, while I could have had the argument go with Pinkie listing only Rarity's positives, and Apple Bloom listing Sweetie Belle's positives and Rarity's negatives, it would have been a bit unbalanced. I want to keep things balanced for now.
ARGH! I hate cliffhangers!
Seriously though, this is a REALLY good story so far. You have a really good representation of what it is like to be in love with two different people, in this case ponies. Great writing and suspense. Looking forward to more! 
Well, for some odd reason, I think Spike should be relieved that it was Pinkie and AppleBloom that got ahold of him first, instead of somepony much more dangerous, like Dash and Scootaloo. XD Still, yeah, good luck with that Spike. I'd go Rarity.
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Hmmm...you know, you might be right. Scootaloo would take it a bit harder wouldn't she? Damn, I didn't think of that. I might have to rethink chapter 11.
Damn, good luck Spike..... Incoming shitstorm, and it's gonna be a doooooozzy.....
I've got a BAD fealing about this.
Spit's about to hit the fan!
Goddamit Spike...
Every time, every single Spike ship, he does something monumentally stupid or naive. Even within my own stories but still, is Spike secretly George Bush or something? Because they seem to have the same amount of sense when it comes to handling relationships. Be it internationally or interspecies as the case may be.
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He's young. What do you expect?
To be honest the tittle scarred me but relived it did not go that way. Any way cant wait to see Pinkie's plan and how much more deeper Spike's hole will be dug.
One week later a Pony named Friday working homicide gets assigined a new case. One dead Dragon.
That does not seem like something Pinkie Pie would say
That's much too cold for her character in my opinion.
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Well, you're not the first one to point that out. I definitely made her too aggressive. Let's just say she's a bit too excited and panicky, I mean let's be honest, Apple Bloom started with the insults, and Pinkie wanted to defend her friend. Notice that she had to dig for most of those insults.
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It's on several sites. I first posted it on one of my homepages.
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It just really stood out to me using the lack of a Cutie Mark as a reason.
Still, great storydl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png
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Yeah, normally she wouldn't use that as a negative. I knew that at the time. But my thought was Pinkie was quite incensed that Apple Bloom disagreed. So, she started grasping at straws. Whatever negative traits she could think of. Pinkie can be a real bitch if she wants to.
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True...very true.
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Personally...
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The story was funny, but I think you really did go out of character with pinkie there.
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Alright! I get it! Enough! Pinkie is incensed and desperate and passionate! Yeah, she's a bit more aggressive than normal, but I'm still learning about maintaining consistent characters.
Besides, sometimes people's personalities shift in certain situations. She's defending her friend!
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I didn't say any of that XD Pinkie has got aggressive once or twice in the show, and even desperate if you count the fake friends thing. If I was to say anything, it would have been the whole content of that argument, but I didn't say anything XD
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What do you mean? She wouldn't have gotten involved at all?
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No, the nature of the conversation or better yet the direction the conversation went is one I don't believe either pinkie nor Applebloom would've took it. Whether or not she was defending spike or Rarity, and again I really wasn't going to say anything about it; because...again the chapter was funny as hell.
Pinkie's getting involved now? ...Oh, boy.
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Possibly, but it was such an odd situation, they probably didn't know how to react.
You really don't think Apple Bloom would get pissed if she found out her best friend's boyfriend was cheating on her?
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Getting pissed is one thing, but turning it to the point where both apple bloom and pinkie pie was arguing who could literally be more sluttier for spike... not so much.
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Oh...that part. Well, notice that things sort of escalated. If Spike didn't stop them when he did, who knows how far they would have gone?
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I repeat, I didn't say anything XD
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...okay, why aren't you saying anything?
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Because I get tired of being told "Your over analyzing stuff."; bla bla bla its my nature so sue me XD.
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I like overanalysis. Hell, if I'm doing something wrong, I think someone should tell me, after all, not telling me...well that's pretty damn cruel, don't you think?
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Nope, I'm also ebil!!!
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I have been called that a couple of times
Plus like I said the only thing that was out, was the whole "who's sluttier" thing.
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I threw that in merely because I thought it was funny.
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Again; it was funny!
First, let me say that this story is not bad at all. It is rock solid. Yet, when I am read it, I am always torn apart on whether to continue or put it aside.
On the one hand I really enjoy your style of writing. The pace and general flow is just right and the dialoges come together nicely.
On the other hand, I think that the way you handle the plot is too stiff. I mean, at its core the story obviously has "love triangle" stock plot. Now stock plots aren't bad at all. But when you take one of those to an already existing setting, you have to consider the preexisting circumstances. And, basically, I don't see that in your story. A prime example from the last chapter is Pinkie arguing for dignity and life experience, which makes sense from the requirements of the plot, which is that she is cast as the friend of Rarity and her role here is to praise her advantages, but disregards Pinkie's established character, which is definitely more on the immature and reckless side.
But in the end, I was always drawn back to the story, because I really like the way you write it, even when I don't always agree with what you write.
As an afterthought: Creating a story from a stock plot always seems to me to be writing as a craft. It's my opinion, that only when an author leaves the path of elements, that have been proven adequate in a thousand similiar works, that a story can become a work of art.
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So, so far your only complaint is the fact that I got Pinkie's character wrong in chapter seven? Acknowledged. I guess I have to work on that.
Pinkie saying Sweetie Bell will get a cutie mark for blowjobs! DAYAM! Gotta love a mare who can talk like a sailor!!!
from what i here it seams pinkie will be the one with the best ideas
I'm a bit late but.
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