A Last Letter

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Princess Celestia and Twilight Sparkle have a special bond, but one night, Luna murders Celestia. What did Twilight reply to her last letter?

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Dazzleme

Dazzleme #1 · Aug 5th, 2014 · 3 · 1 ·

Im not a hater so I wont down vote. But maybe you can get an editor?
Im happy to help if you ever want to send me your stories to edit . I remember when I started out writing I was horrible but it just takes practice and someone to help you. So, yeah. Im sorry you got so many down votes, I mean,people should just not do anything at all if they don't like a story down votes hurt.

Pump It Up

Pump It Up #2 · Aug 5th, 2014 · 2 · ·

Interesting...

You need an editor, first off. Second, it seems to go a little too fast, but not by much.

A couple of story things you need to fix:
- What became of Princess Luna?
- What exactly was Twilight doing at the end? A clear explanation isn't given, so I'm not quite sure what happened.

xxXFluttershyXx

xxXFluttershyXx #3 · Aug 5th, 2014 · · ·

It's was too fast. And what's with the ending? I don't get it at all. Please continue. I gave you a like.

pokefreak13

pokefreak13 #4 · Aug 5th, 2014 · · 2 ·

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What if the story was horrifically bad?
For the author: Do not worry, this does not concern you. Ignore(Or give me your opinion)

Dazzleme

Dazzleme #5 · Aug 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

4806216 Then dont say anything. its obvious this author really tried. Dont try and down vote them to make them feel worse.

RejectedPony

RejectedPony #6 · Aug 6th, 2014 · 1 · ·

4806098 well twilight brought princess celestia back to life of course its pretty straight forward "My beloved student".

xxXFluttershyXx

xxXFluttershyXx #7 · Aug 6th, 2014 · · ·

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Ahh

TheSwordofFlames

TheSwordofFlames #8 · Sep 4th, 2014 · · ·

WELL, idunnoboutyou, but I won't be sleeping tonight!

epicn00b

epicn00b #9 · Sep 28th, 2015 · · ·

Honestly, that last section wasn't at all necessary, and seemed too much like a deus ex machina. I think it would have been a better choice to end it with Twilight's grief.

Nyx-E-Stix