The whole reason why he gave up helping people go back to his time there. In Equestria he will face new dangers and new allies as he tries to save Gaia from ending up like Galifrey.
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its good, but make those paragraphs smaller!!!
Will try to do! thanks for your input.
I won't lie, this story has peaked my interest. If you want any critiques them first I agree with frost. Secondly one of the iron clad rules of grammar is: New speaker, new paragraph. If discord talks then fluttershy, fluttershy's line begins on a new paragraph
I'm not sure if you've just recently updated, but if you haven't please get round to writing another chapter. This book is one of the really good DW/MLP fanfics I've read.
5527846 Do not worry. Winter break just ended and I am back in college. New chapters will be coming soon. I promise!
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Cool can't wait 
Celestia = Donna from what I'm getting from this.
Also nice chapter ^^
composure
5533561 Don't you just hate when you make that kind of mistake. Lol thanks for the point out.
Good chappie, though the mistakes I saw where
and
when it's Twilight Sparkle and Bon Bon, I'm not sure whether it was intended or not.
The only error that I saw that wasn't already pointed out:
Replace the bold words with "once stood, but now the large tree castle now resides" to improve the flow and quality of this sentence.
5703288 I fixed the error with the description of her home as you pointed out. Thank you for helping
5702857 You know I have never been clear on how to type out their names, thanks for the clear up...and yes Bon Bon was a mistake. I knew that name was meant to be that way. I fixed her name. In future chapters I will fix Twilight's.
5715320 Happy to help.
Be sure to use commas to have the sentences flow more freely .
Here he was, in a new universe and still he could not enjoy himself as much as he wanted.
He didn’t like where this was already headed.
“Yes! You declared to me that by the 91st year of the third century of my reign, you would arrive to help me win the war.” She was stern and got right to the point. Tired and in need of sleep before tomorrow’s battle, Celestia wanted to send them back into their TARDIS and debrief them in the morning.
However, now that they had arrived to help her, this whole war could end differently; the very fact that he and the Doctor came here means they are now responsible to make sure Celestia wins this war.
A soft vroom sound rang out as the exterior of the TARDIS turned into a small rectangular tent.