The story follows Scootaloo and the tragedies she suffers during and after moving to Ponyville. The story details how she slowly comes to terms with her past and her realization of how she should continue her life.
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bloodyfox
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Can't wait how this story progresses. keep up the good work!
Thanks!
good chapter once again. keep up the good work.
Thanks again for the encouragement
498375 is fluttershy gonna be a mommy
499801
Perhaps. You will have to keep reading as I get chapters up to find out
500002 God i hate you and your cryptic messages
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500605 Well played my friend
I think im gonna love Futtermom
I HATE YOU!
when wll there be the next chapter!!!!
534481
Haha. Funny you should ask. I am actually in the middle of proof read/putting some finishing touches on the next the chapter. I was going to leave a comment with some extra information when I added it, but I since I'm already here I might as well take care of it.
While I was writing chapter 3 and thinking about the previous chapters I realized one of my flaws in my writing was my lack of descriptions(I know there are others, but I feel the lack of description is the major issue). I had been writing the story straight forward and to the point, when I should have been writing it with intricate descriptions of the visuals that were happening in the story. After all I am writing a fictional story and not an encyclopedia.
In chapter 4 I tried being more descriptive and I hope that I have done a good job. Probably the most important description I have failed to make up to this point is that of Skylark. She is a pony of my own creation, and I have failed to give you, the readers, any real visuals of her other than the fact that she is a filly and therefore small. So I decided to try and make up for that by creating her through a pony creator. Without further ado I present to you, Skylark.
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very butiful i'm a trackin
534805
Glad you liked it
534930 Is Fluttershy a Mommy?
535090
She is more like Scootaloo and Skylark's guardian. Remember they have only been together for about 1-1½ day(s) and are still getting to know one another.
I will be doing more inter-character dynamics development as the story progresses. As of right now, I plan to make several more chapters. I may come up with more ideas for more chapters later. I will be giving this story a definite ending though.
On a side note. My chapter output may slow down a bit from here on out, because I may be getting a job finally. I will try to get at least 1 if not 2 chapters put up per month based on how much free time I have.
nice chapter and cute story at that.
keep up the good work!
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and congratz at your new job!
But still some gaurdians consider the children they care for there ow
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535670 they're so cute and fluttershy would make an excellent gaurdian
they're so cute and fluttershy would make an excellent gaurdian by the way i accidently replied my own comment my bad
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535689
It usually takes time before the children take the step from viewing their guardian as just their guardian to viewing them as their parent. Especially in this situation where the fillies are not quite ready to fully accept their parents' death and move forward.
535482
Thanks
535871 Even if they don't accept it they still may consider fluttershy more than just a gardian maybe not a parent but definitly more than just a gardian
535896
True.
536217 thanks at least we agree on somthing
Im loving this please tell me fluttershy will be there mother!
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That's confidential information
1. i dont know what dat means
and 2. I WANT NEXT CHAPTER !!!!
550905
It means I can't tell you
At this point I'm not sure when I will be able to get the next chapter out
Alright! The fourth chapter is up. Between working and some other responsibilities, it has taken me a while to get some time to write this one. It's 2:30 in the morning here and I did some last minute editing, so please bare with it if there a still some mistakes. I hope you enjoy(ed)
d'aaw!
poor idiotic little fillies!
I hope flutters will find them fast enough.
keep up the good work!
668626
Aww. I wouldn't necessarily call them idiotic. Their actions weren't the most logical or well thought out, but they believe they are doing what is "best" for Fluttershy's sake. Their feelings of being in the way and/or useless causes them to blow the situation out of proportion.
Thanks
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
669285
I'm guessing you don't like that they ran away.
669998 no not really
This is really cute. I can understand that they feel they're a burden to Fluttershy and decide to leave. Guess they still haven't figured out Fluttershy. She'll beat herself up over their leaving.
Watched, faved, and can't wait for more.
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Glad you like it.
Chapter 5 is now out!
I feel this chapter was missing....something. It just seems off and I'm not sure what it is. If any of you have any thoughts on it feel free to comment.
Yay for a new chapter! I really liked it, but it felt a bit too quick. I'm not sure, but I think there might have been some more time spent searching for the girls. Still, it's nice to see them back together.
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Perhaps that's what it was. I had originally thought about having them stay by themselves in the in forest for a day or two, but I wasn't quite sure how I would fill up the timeline, and I was also rushing myself a bit so I could have another chapter up for you all before the end of the month. Thanks for the input.
I liked the chapter, but it felt kinda rushed indeed.
I think they kinda... missed some action adventure in the everfree or something. Also, I think you didnt put in enough detail in it. You might put some more detail on the scenery or something... just trying to improve your writing.
don't worry, I still like the story
keep up the good work and keep on improving... I do say that you have improved quite a bit since your first chapter, but thereis always room for more
826697
Thanks for the critique. Next chapter I will start on early, so I have time to detail it.
827462
can't wait for it, and good luck
825712
I thought it was a really nice chapter. Perhaps having the search take a little longer could have helped. More so if Fluttershy became more and more frantic as the day went on. If they spent the entire day searching and found them at night, Fluttershy could have been a panic stricken mess once they found them, and the joyous reunion would've been cut short with Skylark's illness.
I can't wait for the next part, and I hope the two fillies learn to love their new home.