This needs to be much longer in order for it to be a decent clop fic. The lack of detail in it hurts the effort.

That and some of the scenes were worded in a really silly way.

Really your just making everyone who like mlp gay like this... No wonder people bully bronies cuz they like pony dick, see how ridiculous that is its bad enough your gay but now you throw ponies into it too.

4669687 Wut?

4669699 Not talking to you.

4669724 You are now.

4669762 well I wasn't I was clearly talking to your favorite author sense you were asking for more detail on the clop. LOLOLOL

4669775 I was giving suggestions as to how the author could improve the quality of his fic so other people could enjoy it to a better extent. Considering the low word count, it shouldn't have come as a surprise that the scenes were going to be in less detail than I would have liked for them to be in. I was merely telling the author this so he could take note if he ever wanted to write better clop fics in the near future.

4669999 How did you know I live in the south.. And being gay is not wrong but being gay for fake animals is I'm not trying to offend you these are just my beliefs please don't put me down like that because of my opinions.

4671175 With what?

4669687 One last thing.Why should we as bronies care what some morons think of us as fandom?If they look down on us because they find out we're gay or we're bronies they're fucking stupid.You shouldn't worry about idiots who make fun of us because even if we didn't have stories like these people would make fun of us just because they can.

4672038 I've couldn't say it better myself man i just want you to know that I respect you. :)