Noo! She had him in her grasp, he was an inch away and poor Nightmare Moon still didn't get any action. Well this is not going to be the last of her, I do wonder how Chrysalis will do it. For some reason I expected Derpy to be sharing his bed.
4638868 Believe it or not I actually planned that but seeing as Twilight manage to grow a mustache on him or turn him into a 50 foot tall dragon, I discredited that theory.Maybe when there older. Also, you have some great psychic power if you thought I would put that.
Well, the mustache you can say was something she put ON him, not making him grow it so it works around that, and you can say his temporary growth spurt was a huge magic surge (She did get all glowing eyed when it happened)
Sweet, maybe you should consider using Dusk instead of Twilight when referencing said evening time. I keep thinking, wait now he's a she? Meh, minor nitpick. Otherwise nice warm up, don't know why she left him a Virgin though, that's a really big oversight on her part. Unless she had means of controlling when and how he lost it the first is a powerful memory that will give some measure of psychological power over him. I suggest a magic lock on his libido, he can't get up unless it's one of them, (this also allows for him to break it since he is the Avatar of Magic). Otherwise this plan has many glaring holes. Like besides a vague threat of "or else" once she leaves her control and surprise is gone, by alerting the princess measures can be taken to safeguard them. And knowing the plot the elements can answer back by using the same tactic, came Dusk for their own. Though that could be a funny development...
4638977 I think most of us were thinking it. I thought it would have taken a little longer than that, though. On the other hoof, Nightmare, Eris, and Silhouette were all trapped for centuries without getting any, and Chryssie has likely never truly been loved (hypnosis doesn't count).
ok im going to guess that dusk is going to put the sweet charm he has on them and turns them good and part of his herd XD still nice story i can sympathize with him about being left hanging but still hope to see the next chapter soon! ^_^
Calling it now: Queen Silhouette is going to be the first to crack. She is going to fuck him, then cuddle up close and sleep next to him until sunrise. Then she is going to get jealous of the other villain enacting their part of the plan and try to keep her position as Alpha Female. Does Nightmare realize if Dusk smells like her and his friends notice they are going to become jealous, but they will support him. "Way to go Dusk! Who is it? I wanna shake the hoof of this lucky gal! She must be something special." It may even drive others to up their game and get him into their beds; Lyra and Bon-Bon will fight over him, Trixie's going to go to new lengths and embarrass herself, his Bromance buddy Flash Sentry will have to let him lie low at his place...
Next story hopefully done before weekend is up!
Well that was fast.
And now we check on how Dusk is doing with NMM's scent all over him. Lucky bastard.
Noo! She had him in her grasp, he was an inch away and poor Nightmare Moon still didn't get any action. Well this is not going to be the last of her, I do wonder how Chrysalis will do it. For some reason I expected Derpy to be sharing his bed.
Great chapter.
Well since the changeling queen likes love, she'll probably go all the way. Probably tease him and do weird things.. Anyway nice job!
Is it odd I kinda expected a bit more comedy at the end there?
Dusk: Wait, What about Spike?
NMM: My spell will wear off at dawn and your little pet will be fine
Spike:You know that 'Pet' can hear you
NMM: Y-You're awake?
Spike: Dragon's are magic resistant, you would have needed to power up that spell a lot more to effect me.
Dusk: And you just let her do...THAT to me?
Spike: Yup
N/D: WHY!?
Spike: Seriously? She's hot and you really need to get laid, bro.
I so called how this story would go
Tiny little slip up. Just thought I'd point that one out, mainly since I'm kind of OCD about things like that. But great story so far!
like please update soon
4638868 Believe it or not I actually planned that but seeing as Twilight manage to grow a mustache on him or turn him into a 50 foot tall dragon, I discredited that theory.Maybe when there older.
Also, you have some great psychic power if you thought I would put that.
Argh, such a nice story idea but so many spelling/grammar errors! Whip this into shape and it'll be super good!
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Well, the mustache you can say was something she put ON him, not making him grow it so it works around that, and you can say his temporary growth spurt was a huge magic surge (She did get all glowing eyed when it happened)
Should I feel bad for reading this? I seriously am lovin it
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Sweet, maybe you should consider using Dusk instead of Twilight when referencing said evening time. I keep thinking, wait now he's a she? Meh, minor nitpick. Otherwise nice warm up, don't know why she left him a Virgin though, that's a really big oversight on her part. Unless she had means of controlling when and how he lost it the first is a powerful memory that will give some measure of psychological power over him. I suggest a magic lock on his libido, he can't get up unless it's one of them, (this also allows for him to break it since he is the Avatar of Magic). Otherwise this plan has many glaring holes. Like besides a vague threat of "or else" once she leaves her control and surprise is gone, by alerting the princess measures can be taken to safeguard them. And knowing the plot the elements can answer back by using the same tactic, came Dusk for their own. Though that could be a funny development...
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I think most of us were thinking it. I thought it would have taken a little longer than that, though. On the other hoof, Nightmare, Eris, and Silhouette were all trapped for centuries without getting any, and Chryssie has likely never truly been loved (hypnosis doesn't count).
4641595 very true cuz love freely and genuinely give probably be more filling then what she and her changelings are used too.
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Or you could change it to dragons being resistant to mind-influencing spells or sleep spells
4641141 this has its on funny development so I did cut few corners but did find someways to replace them
4641780 ok cool Ill just have to wait and see
ooh i so hope their plan backfires and the genuinely falls in love with Dusk.
it seems Nightmare Moon only wanted to be loved deep inside her heart but.....maybe she aint ready to open her heart yet.
hope Dusk manage to open her heart eventually along with the rest of the villans
I come back always checking for an update BUT THERE NEVER IS ONE
ok im going to guess that dusk is going to put the sweet charm he has on them and turns them good and part of his herd XD
still nice story i can sympathize with him about being left hanging
but still hope to see the next chapter soon! ^_^
Huh. I forgot to favorite this. If I'm gonna edit this, I have to at least follow it, yes?
Calling it now: Queen Silhouette is going to be the first to crack. She is going to fuck him, then cuddle up close and sleep next to him until sunrise. Then she is going to get jealous of the other villain enacting their part of the plan and try to keep her position as Alpha Female.
Does Nightmare realize if Dusk smells like her and his friends notice they are going to become jealous, but they will support him. "Way to go Dusk! Who is it? I wanna shake the hoof of this lucky gal! She must be something special." It may even drive others to up their game and get him into their beds; Lyra and Bon-Bon will fight over him, Trixie's going to go to new lengths and embarrass herself, his Bromance buddy Flash Sentry will have to let him lie low at his place...
4685223 Four villinesses vs Dusk Shine..... only.........
This f-(bleep)-ing plan is so stupid. (Albeit magnificent. )
No pun intended.
4697652 Thanks??
Twilight?
I onyl notice it now actualy after reading it twice already
The dragon was said to almost be as smart as Twilight able to transfer scrolls to and from Celestia.
You mention Twilight instead of Dusk xD
I hope to see more nightmare moon
Aw shes just lonly i hope he can turn them all good.
Aww, she just needs some honest friends.
Original concept.
Execution is terrible. Get an editor, I can't read it.
Grammar level - 0.
Well, I can see where this is going!
"We will make your our sex slave, then use your absence to take over Equestria!"
"Or you could, you know, not. And I find someway to help you emotionally?"
"TAKE US YOU SEXY BEAST!"
"Oh shit, I didn't think this through."
Cliche as all hell... I approve.