8838197 You have to admit that having "Comedy" tag means certain obligations, though. Also, good guys tend to win unless there was no chance of them winning or the story is not "grimdark realism" type, both of which don't seem to apply there. Not every car arrives to its destination safely, yet most of them do.
8838547 Commedy was strong in this chapter, but dont rule it out yet. Comedy dosen't always have to be happy endings. I could think of many movies where it involves comedy and its not when the bad guy wins or the harsh truth is terrible. "Cabin in the Woods, Final Destination series, This is the End, and so many more. There are movies where the end of the world is happening and it is ending on a happy or comediac note.
Dont expect comedy where you expect it. Instead, find the humour in that anyone can be entertained by the notion that bad ends, don't mean sad ones, rather that the character is willing to go out with a smile on their face.
I came in this chapter worried that there was some major shift in tone or a complete departure. From your blog post I was worried you jumped the shark. I am happy that wasn't the case though, rather you simply have continued the path of this story with each chapter getting progressively darker and less filled with comedy. While this was the darkest and least comedy filled yet, in universe; it still had jokes that were there to try to lighten the mood for the audience. I would of liked a little more story but that was because the sex was not my cup of tea. But I can still respect, and more importantly believe that this character would act like,this. So final thoughts this was a good chapter that continued to,progress the tone of the story. I felt the narrative was a bit stagnant, this is the climax and it clearly makes more,sense to stop and take it slow here to give each character their due.
8840365 This Eris chapter is my favorite one so far. And I really love the whole Pussy-Ception concept with Eris being both outside and inside her own vag that the same time. I hope to see some more interesting and strange concepts with Eris in the future.
9230812 I honestly have the next chapter done. As well as the final ones, just the editing and layout. Think Avengers 4. It's done just needs re edits and re works.
Comment posted by DarkAngel864 deleted Oct 14th, 2018
His head slowly looked up at her. She didn’t see the anger of a stallion whom was annoyed at her antics. Nor did she see the dopey face of a colt whom just got laid. She saw nothing of Dusk that she was use to. She saw only pure anger and anger that was deep within his violet eyes. It was there… and it scared her.
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You have to admit that having "Comedy" tag means certain obligations, though. Also, good guys tend to win unless there was no chance of them winning or the story is not "grimdark realism" type, both of which don't seem to apply there.
Not every car arrives to its destination safely, yet most of them do.
oh man, arent they worried about a possible nightmare version making an appearance? wellp, guess we wait and see!
Never occurred to them that Dusk might have his own dark side.
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8838547 Commedy was strong in this chapter, but dont rule it out yet. Comedy dosen't always have to be happy endings. I could think of many movies where it involves comedy and its not when the bad guy wins or the harsh truth is terrible. "Cabin in the Woods, Final Destination series, This is the End, and so many more. There are movies where the end of the world is happening and it is ending on a happy or comediac note.
Dont expect comedy where you expect it. Instead, find the humour in that anyone can be entertained by the notion that bad ends, don't mean sad ones, rather that the character is willing to go out with a smile on their face.
I came in this chapter worried that there was some major shift in tone or a complete departure. From your blog post I was worried you jumped the shark. I am happy that wasn't the case though, rather you simply have continued the path of this story with each chapter getting progressively darker and less filled with comedy. While this was the darkest and least comedy filled yet, in universe; it still had jokes that were there to try to lighten the mood for the audience. I would of liked a little more story but that was because the sex was not my cup of tea. But I can still respect, and more importantly believe that this character would act like,this.
So final thoughts this was a good chapter that continued to,progress the tone of the story. I felt the narrative was a bit stagnant, this is the climax and it clearly makes more,sense to stop and take it slow here to give each character their due.
Soon enough they'll discover just what they're doing...
8840365
This Eris chapter is my favorite one so far.
And I really love the whole Pussy-Ception concept with Eris being both outside and inside her own vag that the same time. I hope to see some more interesting and strange concepts with Eris in the future.
That was a awesome read but Ihope he can still turn them good ,and he can forgive before his dark salf fully awakens.
let your darkness out dusk and punish them severely
Is this porn, or a story with sex in it?
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Both
8905124
Should you add the 'porn' tag?
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This was before that tag was inserted.
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Do you want to add it now?
When's the update coming up
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When Tarturas gets a Jacuzzi
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What I'm confused what do you mean?
By the way is dusk going to show the four girls his wrath his darkside they are going regret what they did to him
9230812
I honestly have the next chapter done. As well as the final ones, just the editing and layout. Think Avengers 4. It's done just needs re edits and re works.
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Ok then I shall bring baby cute changelings to attack you by cuteness
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Noooooooo!!!!!
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Yeesss your queen is so proud of youderpicdn.net/img/view/2012/11/29/166552__artist+needed_source+needed_safe_queen+chrysalis_cute_cutealis_nymph.png
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Is this fic dead?
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Story is strong but the clop is weak... can write the overall story but need help with smut. Can't write smut anymore!!
Big oof
RIP AND TEAR