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Apples, Cherries, and Plums

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Twilight discovers an outfit that Applejack had recived at Dodge Junction, an outfit with a story behind it. Applejack tells the story of who she met and what she did during the week she spent at Dodge Junction.

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Starwind Dood

Starwind Dood #1 · Apr 4th, 2012 · · · The First Day ·

As luck would have it I needed a ride, so I told him.

“It just so happens I am in need of a wagon service, are you on the job?”

Lines like this make it awkward to read, but for now you have a tracker.

ChromeRegios

ChromeRegios #2 · Apr 5th, 2012 · · · The First Day ·

make that two...

darthrex

darthrex #3 · Aug 16th, 2012 · · · The First Day ·

You need to extend the framing device, either here or in the prologue. A short scene where Applejack arrives at the library and gives Twilight some short exposition would clarify what is happening vis a vis the shift from 3rd to 1st person.