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This is the emotional tale of Bramley Apple, the father of Big Macintosh, Applejack, and Applebloom. He has returned to make amends with his family he abandoned over ten years ago. However, the sudden appearance comes to a total shock to the eldest sibling as he is resentful and determined not to accept his father's unexpected visit.

~ Kudos to Blaster Master for his assistance with the proofreading!

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Comments ( 73 )

Always thought of doing something like this. Personally, I think you did it better then I could

What a beautiful story it was so sad:applecry:

Beautifully done!

Touching and awesome. Well done.
Bramley Apple, huh? The name fits their father well.

:pinkiesad2:SSSSSoooooo ssaaaaaadddddddd *boohoo* ":pinkiesmile: "No party tonight though ,this calls for sassperilla. "

Gosh, it made me tear up. From the moment he gave that letter, I knew what was coming. I kept hoping for a happy ending, but good stories don't always have to have one.:pinkiesad2:

My gods, so beautiful. So freaking beautiful!:pinkiesad2:

Is the story that good, people? :rainbowderp: I'm touched! Thanks my fellow Bronies. Your comments hit me right in the feels :twilightsmile:

Congrats on your story getting featured! I'll have to put this in my read later list... :pinkiehappy:

Gah! That ending, my weakness, you just had to throw in an emotional Applejack, didn't you?:ajsleepy:
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Eh, this was..... okay. Lost points for being cliched as hell in some parts, but it was okay.

Why would you bring me these feels on a stressful work day? :raritydespair::raritycry::pinkiesad2:

Great read but this sucks that you ended it like that

This really touched me at a personal level. I haven't seen my father since I was 3... and I turn 20 this Saturday... Hell, come to think of it, I don't even know my father's middle name... I don't really remember anything about him... Damn it, now I'm depressed... Thanks a lot, both seriously and sarcastically.

Man...That hurt to read, :raritydespair: Im really looking forward to more of this.

3247187 You know what the complete tag means right?

Also liked this story but it gets points off for probable cannon violation.

3247377 Yeah I know :derpytongue2: The concept for this story was actually put together a long while ago. Just never really had the time to get to work on it until now. But I respect your opinion.

Is it okay if I give this a thumbs up even if I can't read it because sad stories make me feel horrible? The description itself is enough to earn that...

Comment posted by JetstreamGW deleted Sep 24th, 2013

This punched my feels...

Words.
Put them together and they can make a sentence
Give them care and they can grow into something bigger
Show them your heart and they can make a story which can touch anyone who reads them.
Thank you for a great story :pinkiehappy:

3248127 Well thank you for an awesome comment! :eeyup:

"Aw, Big Mac should be along shortly," Answered AJ, "He went to walk Fluttershy home and drop off some supplies at Sugar Cube Corner."

The unfamiliar name rang in his next question. "Hold on a minute, who's Fluttershy?"

"Oh! Fluttershy is one of my friends." Applejack cleared. "She and Big Mac have been seein' a lot of each other lately."

Bram knew very well what that meant, and he nodded with a proud grin. "I always knew my boy would find the perfect mare."

You're a FlutterMac shipper, aren't you author? :yay::heart::eeyup:

3248321 Maybe...Kinda....Sorta...Yeah :pinkiesmile:

The feels are strong with this one.:pinkiesad2:

Beautifully done.:eeyup:

So.....:fluttercry: so sad!!! :raritycry::raritydespair::applecry: I really do wanna cry now :fluttershbad: I don't know if it's the fact Mac asked him to eat out with him in three weeks or the fact I've lost my own dad after he's made similar promises :raritycry::raritycry:

Stahp,Your making my feels hurt! Please continue. That is all. :eeyup::ajsleepy::applecry:
Edit: Now that i've collected my feels, I can give an HONEST review! Ha ha ha... sorry. Anyway, this fic is absolutely GORGEOUS. You present a well known family, add a member, some heartbreak, and some connections, and you get this piece of gold. The only flaw I could find is FlutterMac, which I WILL let slide, due to this shipping being very common and believable. (Also, No, I don't hate FlutterMac, I just generally dislike ships in a fic that presents itself in a canon-istic style). So all in all, 10/10. I will be expecting more of you, and you deserve my watch.

dammit, until I started reading MLP fics i never cried at stories.

Now yours is at least the 5th or sixth to make me an emotional bloke - i don't do emotions dammit!

Really good story man.
:pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile: / 5

3249017 Hey thanks! :twilightsheepish: These awesome comments are really making my day!

3249344 Thanks for reminding me to watch you... darn my short term memory. Anyway, you are very welcome sir. Your writing style is very good.

I HAVEN'T EVEN READ THIS YET AND I'M ALREADY CRYING
ALTHOUGH THAT MIGHT HAVE MORE TO TO WITH MY EMOTIONAL INSTABILITY THAN ANYTHING ELSE

Great work! You should consider sending it into EQD. It's written well enough to get a post for sure.:raritywink:

3248049

Well SOMEBODY just completely ruined the story for me.

Thanks.:trixieshiftleft:

Ouch. Does anybody know where I can get a new heart? I think mine's broken. :fluttercry:

3249769 Don't read comments before you read the story, mate. That's pretty academic.

Comment posted by Canon Fodder deleted Sep 24th, 2013

3249769>>3249775 Hi guys, you both raise some very good points! Reading comments before the story does have drawbacks like potential spoilers, and some people like to read the comments just so they can see how people liked/disliked the story they're about to read, just to see what the hype is about. Although I do respect your views on my story, JetstreamGW, I really do, I will have to remove your previous comment. I'm sorry, but spoilers do raise red flags. Nothing personal my friend. :applejackunsure:

This story stung a bit: my own children are two states away, and as a result I don't get to see them very often. But as Bram reminds me, it's always worth the trip.

3249769
yeah dont read commets heres a video for what to do when someone wants to ruin the story or anything. [youtube=http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=KeKyqc_wXNc]
Sorry if link does not work. just copy and paste. or dont it really doesnt matter.

(Video Scribblenauts in real life by smosh.)

3247377 :ajbemused: Well sorry for not noticing it...

I have sad face from this story.

I suppose the one thing that really threw me off, was that he still felt a level of forgiveness for his father.

Not to say that he shouldn't feel a certain level of sadness, but...when a father up and leaves for eleven consecutive years...you don't just let that anger go away. That kind of thing stays with you forever. Hell, you don't even necessarily feel sadness, so much as a messed up form of pity. And disgust.

I have mixed emotions about it really. The story-telling was great, as well as the pacing. Though, I'm not sure a character like AJ would feel so forgiving as well. She'd ease into it better and probably end up okay, but for a character that we can infer that Mac would be? I think it's safe to say that I"m not the first one who would think that Bram would be getting a stiff hoof to the jaw the moment they made eye contact.

Regardless, good story, great pacing.

As soon as I read the bit about the time frame on the letter, I knew exactly what the story would be about.
...:fluttercry:

I sort of have that happy-sad face at the end.

Vinny...Well, things never really worked out for him since he got himself into trouble with a mob

is that a darkness reference?

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