Twilight goes on Tumblr

by ElementsOfHarmonyStudios

Whelp, Derp

Author's Note:

Yes, I know I've been lacking to do the story. But get this, ITS JUST FOR LAUGHS
So yeah, if you hate it, hate it. If you like it, like it. So deal with it and sit in your seat and read!

Comments

[Radoran]

That was an interesting first story. Especially the bloopers. I lieked dem blupars

[ElementsOfHarmonyStudios]

4363926 First off, I am a girl, and second...
DELETE!

[Dizzy Daze]

Well, this was definitely an interesting concept. However, the execution itself needs a lot of work. It's not necessarily lacking anything in particular; there are some extremely rushed scenes, but that's not completely unforgivable. You've already pointed out multiple times that you recognize that problem, anyway. The atrocious grammar, though, needs to be fixed. It made it really hard for me to follow the story because there were so many sentences that made absolutely no sense until you read them five or six times. It was a good attempt, though; I would just recommend re-reading or having someone else proofread for you and fixing it from there.

[Psycho]

wha-wha-WHAT THE FU—
*head explodes from pure mindfuck and confusion*
*walks past*
I ain`t cleanin` THAT up!

[ElementsOfHarmonyStudios]

4371861 Read the 5th chapter...AAAAANNNDDDD
DELETE!

[GlazenDew]

4400006
I did. A half-assed excuse insulting the readers who want to give you legitimate criticism is in no way a valid reason for your blatant ignorance.
Deleting will still never work.

[GlazenDew]

4392146

At least I'm not the only one. Watch out mate, she'll delete you if anything you say threatens to criticize her work, and in turn, her precious ego.

[ElementsOfHarmonyStudios]

4401087 I know I've been deleting your comments, and here's the reason: Your critzem just didn't..well...{insert stupid saying here} Soo...well...uhm...if you do a...more less likely for me to delete the comment critzisem. My Celestia that sounded stupid. So..sorry I deleted deleted your comment. Now you can hate this comment if you want. Now hate me now!

[GlazenDew]

4427086 Yeah, sorry about that. I was being too harsh. You should just work with the criticism, though.It can be very helpful sometimes.

[Peridance Glow]

Well. I was interested in this story until I saw the childish antics of the author. Not reading now.

[Twiface]

4392146
I can't follow the story either. It's way too disorganized and I can't tell what's going on.