Rainbow Dash inadvertently stumbles into an unusual game of Hide-and-Seek
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Rainbow Dash inadvertently stumbles into an unusual game of Hide-and-Seek
> not a clopfic
I was almost expecting the 'And then they had sex' ending when I first read the title...
this was nice, like a little short straight out of the show
4th WTG entry I'm giving input on.
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I noticed there was a whole lot of telling and not a lot of showing, but I suppose we could chalk that up to there being a four day deadline. Either way, the 'show and not tell' rule should always be kept in mind when creating a narrative. I also noticed liberal amount of name-usage when referring to characters, which can get pretty stale if you're not careful.
As far as the premise goes...it's nothing special, but still entertaining in it's own right. I think Antor put it quite nicely
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