Princess Celestia has decided that Equestria needs a second chance. A clean slate, if you will.
Can Twilight save her hide, and those of her friends, before they all die a quick and painless death?
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This is gonna be a heavy one, I can tell.
That said it's really good so far.
I like the concept, but I see flaws...
In the scene in which Celestia and Twilight hug, you do not mention that Celestia is in a hazmat suit. Although we could assume Celestia is immune, just after they entered the room, Twilight took her suit off and laid it on the bed and then sat next to it. She is basically sitting next to an object that has likely come in contact with the disease at least several times.
"It was aiming for major organs, as if it were a thing alive. It swatted our treatment aside like little more than flies. It traveled by air, water, and could stay alive without a host for an indefinite period of time."
Several things are wrong with this statement. If the disease is bacterial, then it is alive. Even if it's a virus, it's arguable that the statement that it acts as if it were alive is still unnecessary. It is quite often that diseases change over time to fight back against antibiotics.
If it were to travel by air and is able to sustain itself for days outside of a host, then there would be few ponies left as I'm guessing most do not have an air-tight seal on all windows and doors. Please note that a disease that can be transmitted through a cough is not considered air-born as it is actually body fluids suspended in the air that are causing the transmission of the disease.
I will continue to read the story, and I apologize if I have come off as being overly critical, but as I have worked in hazmat situations before, I cannot help but correct such inaccuracies. If you have questions or would like advice, do not hesitate to send me a message.
-Starshine
NOOOOOO! NOT FLUTTERSHY!
Anyways, this fanfiction is pretty good so far. It's just missing one thing...
F-F-F-FLUTTERSHY!
Awesome!
WHY, FUTTERSHY? YOU MONSTER! REALLY? WHY DID YOU HAVE TO DO IT MAN? This story is well written! Might follow it. NO! I WON'T!
huh... thank god I got one of these
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Genocide in MY MLP!!!!! Its more likely then you think.
anyone read the death cure?
guard 1: the test so far is complete. all life forms have gone off.
guard 2: yeah. wait. i see movement!
guard 1: what the-
guard 2: HOLY CRAP! THEY ARN'T DEAD!!! BY CELESTIA, THEY'RE EATING HIM!
guard 1: AHHHH-
(transmission end)
celestia: ...shit.
I love this! Please update soon! I love love love love love love love love love love love love it! The weird thing is I'm actually not that sad about Fluttershy, it seems like something she would do in the series if this were to occur. Applejack probably would have carried her along with some help, though. The loss of one makes the rest stronger though, not only that but who says shes even dead? Maybe her animal friends helped her. Or she got there safely and they'll find her later. As I said I love this and update soon!
Yours Truly,
(I like signatures, they make everything formal!!)
TheSnowyPegasister