Ravenelis, a country ruled by strength, half way across the world from Equestria. Constantly in an ever growing civil war, only held together by the royalty's elite guard. The Selene Knights, each member chosen for an unique talent. With twelve members in total, they're nearly unstoppable. With their never ending civil war and with one spot open in the Selene Knights, the country is failing apart. While frantically searching for their new member and trying to keep her country together, Nighting Gale La Selene, captain of the Selene Knights and second in line for the throne of Ravenelis hears of a powerful unicorn living in Equestria. Nighting Gale leaves her country in hopes of recruiting the unicorn to save her family and country.
Twilight Sparkle hadn't ever heard of Ravenelis before, or the Selene Knights when her world is turned upside down when she is attacked by strangers one night in Ponyville. Saved by no other then NIghting Gale! Twilight must soon learn to live in a world where friends can turn foe and foe can turn friends in moments, while learning how to survive her training in The Selene Knights!
Currently looking for prereaders and cover art.
Interesting description.
Break up the paragraphs. Seriously, people will not be able to keep track of the story if you do not. And remember, anytime you change speaker, you need a new paragraph.
A sentence is a self-contained idea. A paragraph is a group of related ideas.
4372560 Thank you! I will do that.
4373466 Much better. Now I can upvote.
Please continue.
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That would be nineteen out of twenty. And in words. Any whole number less than one hundred is written out in word form.
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Fixed! Thanks for the feedback!
5349600 Since I'm using it as a name I'm going with two words, but anyway thanks for the feedback!
I like them.
They are Pinkie pie level crazy and/or above.
Tell me more!
Teehee teehee
..........Oh I like her! Gale gots guts!
You actually found a way to make that sentence hilarious! Congrats to you!
Classic...