Never Forget

by SweetCocoa

Into the forest

The Changeling
I stepped into the Pale green shade, and Slinked on. My senses were dull, Because of my departure over a year ago. I heard a hiss to my left to find my old Friend Winter Green.

"Hey Crystal Clear!" Her friend pounced out of a bush of ferns.

"Hello Winter Green. How has our colony changed over the years so far?"

Winter green was more of a child then me. Since of my feeding I had grown more slender, my hair longer, and my wings larger.
Winter green was smaller with a tiny horn.

"Well, Queen Larva has returned from her journey, and The queen has made a grand feast for your arrival back home." The chattering pony said.

I just nodded, and followed her down a large slope with a dark mouth entrance. Inside were Gems for light, of ghostly beauty and dark caves for us to Dwell. Feasts were obviously held in the main courtroom.

"AAAHHH.....Miss clear! You have returned. Was the journey worth the effort?" The queen giggled.

"Yes. I notified my leavings, and traveled here instantly"

The queen led me to a large and long wooden table, on it where stallions and colts, Mares and children- All tied up. The other changelings turned into the room and inched towards the tasty meal. I felt rather green, And went to my room- To my bed- And took out parchment. Then wrote...A tale. All about my adventure. With Him.

Author's Note:

I'm done with this story! I want to make more stories like this, So please leave good suggestions and tips. Follow me on twitter. @sailormellow or @lovetwibright. (sailor is my back-up) Please don't leave bad comments or I'll cry. have fun. Keep in mind this is meant to be short! REALLY short. Its a tiny sliver of what we see from after her leavings.

Comments

[SweetCocoa]

Hope you enjoy

[Onlyicanhear]

Good idea but too short and underdeveloped, also in the second chapter you don't even mention a possible pain or regret, unless she lied to him about loving him

I think the worst mistake is having completely skipped shining reactions and thoughts, he has little to no emotion during the whole chapter, were you merely told us his reaction instead of showing it, and that extricated us readers from the story, giving us an empty, blank feelings to it

Better next time

[SweetCocoa]

3691662 Thanks....I'm not a very good writer but I still like creating stories that pop in my head