I don't have a cutie mark...yet.
The story of a blank flanked earthpony who changed Equestria forever. The story includes the main cast but focuses more on backround ponys like nurse Redheart, Doctor hooves, Derpy, Vinel scratch, sir, Fancy pants, and many others.
Give this story a chance.
... Side not some ponys will be added later.
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I like the idea, but there were quite a few grammatical errors, such as not "dieing" by dying, and Pony ville as Ponyville.
Otherwise I think you've got the right skills to make a great story, you just need to brush up some on the spelling/grammar.
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No problem.
Just going to point out for you that when it comes to dialogue, try to break it up a bit because a lot of it looks like a giant wall of text. Other than that, I'm liking the story so far, keep up the good work.
seems very good so far but there are spelling errors and I am too tired to point them out (it's like 2 in the morning
) but it still is a good read
p.s. see you on Xbox later (it's metroidman in case you're wondering)
P.s. I am a very busy pony so I will be releasing part 3 and 4 in the begining of next month. In the meantime I'll try to fix the first two.
P.s.s. you can add me on facebook for sneek peaks and add me on tumbler for any random questions you may have.
Thank you -
John Redheart.
I'm no expect writer or anything, but maybe you should change "I" when you're speaking to "He" Y'know?