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The beautiful art of chaos

four mysterious unknown ponies out side ponyville try to bring the god of chaos back to life

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the beginning · 8th Mar 2012 · 1,284 words
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the chaotic minds of judgments gate · 9th Mar 2012 · 1,108 words
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Zanmatsuken

Zanmatsuken #1 · Mar 8th, 2012 · · · the beginning ·

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Alrighty then, let's do this!

ininbbtfctub

ininbbtfctub #2 · Mar 8th, 2012 · · · the beginning ·

Y U NO USE GRAMMAR!!!!
Also I can't follow it, just no detail

DawnFade

DawnFade #3 · Mar 8th, 2012 · · · the beginning ·

There are several grammar mistakes in the story that make it nearly unreadable. I suggest getting somebody, a sibling or a parent perhaps, to go over it and help you fix it up. Writing stories can be fun but if the technical aspects of your story are missing or done incorrectly, the rest of the story is degraded tenfold.

Love, DawnFade

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