After a rather painful wake up, Jackson Hail finds himself in a rather scaly skin. Just what is he? How did this happen? Where is he? What's with the quivering yellow horse thingy? You already know this answers, but let's come along with Jack as he finds out.
(Your standard Human in Equestria story, with some not so standard elements I hope. I came up with the idea after I saw that almost nobody thought of this. Please note that this is my first fan fiction, so, you know, the usual dribble. Also note that I have no idea as to what categories this falls into quite yet, so I'll be modifying as I go along. Critique is encouraged. And thanks for your time!)
Chapters (5)
This is very interesting. Tracking the hell out of this.
I don't really see many HiE stories where the human becomes a dragon. You're doing some awesome work right here so keep it up!
Nice start, nice pal, nice dragon. NOW GO AND KICK SOME ASS AND MAKE SOME FRIENDS
Excellent. And the Aww Crap at the end was great.
Finally a HiE where the main character doesn't become a pony!
I am so tracking this
-Glassed
Very interesting, im looking forward to more. Tracking.
161585 Ikr! I was so happy about that xD
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Painful has one L
Other than that, I love you already
Thank you very much everyone! Here I am worrying over reception. Glad to know I'm on the right track.
fantastic
Can't wait to see the other ponies reaction to a fully-grown dragon un their midst. That might be pretty awkward explaining it all. Oh yeah, and great job on this chapter,
Good story, keep it up
Good chapter. Looking forward to the next.
"The forest seemed to extend over for miles, but I could see a few lights of in the distance" - off
"To recap, I was a blue reptile, a dragon from what I know deduced" - now
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Referring to this:
"The scales themselves where thick, and shined in a deep royal blue."
"Besides the main body where a set of long, broad, webbed wings, the same blue hue as the body."
"The robust trees where covered in vines"
"She hadn’t heard of friendly dragons besides spike." - Spike
"He’s name was Jerry." - His
Nice chapter! You have new ideas, I'll give you that
Not a brony, yet still knows about the show? Great!
-Glassed
I would use a 'BRILLIANT' Image macro but i dont have one so... BRILLIANT!
Forget the ponies, I'm wondering how Spike will react!
Territorial? Admiration? Both?
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Thanks a lot! I'll make sure to correct them as soon as I can.
Excellent
more
Loved it, as the others said, more. However i can wait if need be.
Hello there everyone! New chapter and hope you enjoy!
Now, I've must admit, that I feel a bit iffy about this chapter. It's the longest thing I've written. Ever. So it's bound to be full of mistakes. There is also a few things that bug me. I feel like I put to much emphasis on the eyes. It might not be a problem, but it still bugs me. I also fear that I might screw up characterization in the near future.
Anyway, thank you all for taking time to read this, and thank you those who pointed out mistakes.
Remember, critiques are always welcome!
As awesome as ever... I like Spikes reaction to the protagonist seems legit.
Anyway I would have said TAKE ALL MY STARS But uhh... Thumbs up I guess? 
((Hate the new rating system))
I have to say this chapter went quite well, I would put more effort into this comment but I'm really, really tired.
Why doesn't he just say "I never learned to fly or breathe fire, I don't want to talk about it that much?" It wouldn't even be a lie. That aside, I'm enjoying this story. Thumbs up. I miss the stars.
Hell, could have reasoned that he didn't want to set the forest on fire. Lack of flying would have to be explained, but could be rationalized as not thinking about it.
Doesn't matter, pretty good so far.
The way I see it, a dragon that can't breath fire is very weird. I assume that since Spike wasn't raised by dragons, and only had possible tutelage by Twilight, that fire breathing instinctual. Same thing for flying. I'm also assuming that both Spike and Twilight would find that odd too. He's telling them because they are the ones who are more likely to find out. He's keeping the secret away from everyone else. And maybe I said to much. Oh well. Thanks for reading!
"It must been a hell of a party for me to be this hangover" -
"I hope those heal soon, I really want to try" - Try to stick with the same tense
Time to go to sleep...
I SHALL FINISH READING THIS CHAPTER TOMORROW!
Great job! :). Just a few tiny errors. Everything else was FANTASTIC! Way to go my man!
...Simply amazing. Very original, too, which already makes me smile
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The fact that it's very well-written and rational (Well, as rational as a vortex appearing and transporting a human-now-turned-dragon into a world filled with colorful talking ponies can be) makes it completely awesome.
...Although, I can't help but wish that Jack would shout Fus Ro Dah. I know I would. Just to check, y'know? If anything, it was worth a try.
Or maybe that's just the Skyrim nerd in me, who knows?
Anyway, great chapter and awesome story overall. Keep up the awesome work!
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
“Technically, I’m in his territory I believe.”
Please, dear god, please don't type Pinkie out like that again. Writing conventions are in place for good reasons, because no one can read text blobs that. Why write something no one can read? If you want to convey to me that the narrator can't understand it, tell me that instead. Heck, you can even get rushed across with spaces, just make the character speak the run-on. Grammar rules don't apply in dialogue, on readability rules.
Besides that small part my brain couldn't find the will to read, good story. Definitely tracking it.
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Thank you!
I'll admit that I didn't really put too much thought into that part. I don't really remember what I was thinking, but it was certainly along the lines of "make it look that she's talking way to fast". So you can say that I meant it not to be read, instead using it to exemplify her intelligibility. And now I'm just typing bull. I'll edit that along with a few other mistakes when I upload the next chapter, which will hopefully be this weekend.
Anyway, glad you like it!
This is a nice story.
Overall the characterization is consistent and is accurate enough as far as I can tell. Spelling and grammar is A-OK. Structuring has improved noticably from the first chapter.
The only complaint I have right now is that dialogue is baked into the middle of descriptive paragraphs occasionally. This might be a personal quirk, but I think it looks messy and makes reading slightly more difficult
Also, having a new speaker on a new line helps readability.
I've seen a few variants on the "human turns into creature, usually pony, upon arriving in Equestria" idea, but I have not seen one turn into a dragon previously.
All in all, interesting idea, excellent execution for a first fanfic, minor formating issues and I'll be reading.
Tracking, thumb up.
Why havent you updated yet?!
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In all honesty, I'm stuck. I got about half the half the chapter planned, but I can't get past the 1/5 mark. I'll try to get it done soon, but there are other things in the way first. Like complete children's book I'm supposed to write AND illustrate for my english class. So, in other words: Soon.
Just glad it isn't dead. Though given that you're doing a full children's book it should probably be:
So, in other words: Not soon.
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It's not that much honestly. 20 pages, with a minimum of 20 words each. Story itself it's done, I just need to shorten it to something usable (I like to write a lot). And I've enlisted my sister to help with the illustrations, so it should be done by the end of the week. And I'm still working on this one whenever I get an idea. So yeah, soon-ish.
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Fair enough. I look forward to it then
. Your story is one of the more unique so I was hoping you wouldn't get too bogged down.
324526 Trust me, i feel your pain. I had to write one for health class and my team mate dumped everything on me. Not cool.
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Soon™
-Blizzard Corporation*
*(Soon™ is a trademarked phrase belonging to Blizzard Corp. All rights reserved.)
cant wait to see how things turn out. Good luck with the children's book btw i shall twiddle my thumbs in anticipation
I'm terribly impressed Jackson didn't get the least bit miffed with ALL of the mane six. Then again, he knows the show...
ahumm If you are not having to much trouble could you maybe release some more chapters?.. if you are okay with it I mean..
Actually if this story dies I'd definitely like to see some other authors try this approach. Turning a human into a Diamond dog was really well done in Echo so I'm hoping this type of story also takes off.
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Oh nonono. It's not dead... Just stuck of sorts.
And for those who haven't done so, you might want to look at my journal. I would be very grateful if you did.
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Huh, your concept is unique enough I'm surprised you're having issues. Still PM sent.
He should just go with the whole amnesia thing if he doesn't want to tell the story of what happened to him.