Hi there Fellow Brony. I'm From Texas, and Rainbow Dash is best Pony. I hope you enjoy whatever I write, and I wish you a good day.
At the age of 25, a Odd Pegasus lives in the town of Ponyville. This Pegasus's name is All Over. He is a practical genius, and has invented, wrote, and thought his way through life. All Over lives in the small town of Ponyville, with few friends. This story will track his Adventures in Ponyville and throughout Equestria. My first story, enjoy.
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You cannot have more than one character speak in a single paragraph. Each character gets a separate paragraph. This would be a decent story if it were possible to keep track of who was talking.
3454427 Duly Noted, I shall handle it.
short but enjoyable you don't seem to have any bad writing habits but maybe short writings is a bad habit too ? I couldn't care less.
good chapter
again nothing overtly grammatically affensive.
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good job 4 stars (you get the fifth star if it's long and good
I noticed that to when they were at pony joe's most specifically but yes separating everyone comments and identifying them accordingly (while long winded ) is very beneficial to the reader.
4 stars
this is an altogether great work while I feel you have the potential to make longer chapters I encourage you to write whats comfortable because forcing content has been known to cause muse deficiency (you stop liking writing)
3456001 Wow, didn't expect 3, much less 4. As well, I plan to have many short chapters, I just can't write huge chapters. As well, I write for fun, but when people like and enjoy my story, I work harder to give content.
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good to hear I believe that writers can bemotivated with positive reinforcement.
like dogs
3457401 Well then.......
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3457685 Hi, I would like to ask your opinion of the story so far?
That feeling i think its(head starts to hurt)love....?
D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww