Voleur Crux, alias Shadows, is just a typical hacker bat pony out for a night of fun and profit on the big city of New Seaddle. With her friends the earth pony Tranquil Spirit and the pegasus Candy Cotton they seek to squeak out some bits from the shadows.
Random shadowrunish bat pony story written in like a day for the Equestria Daily Batpony Writeoff.
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This story isn't quite pony enough, given how far removed from the show it is, but I do actually like stories like that. If you slowed it down some and put more work into your characters, you might be on to something. Keep at it. :)
3493834 Oh my thank you so much for your feed back!
I have been getting some but it's great to have it from the community here!
I'm certainly in agreement there. I was writing these quickly to meet a deadline. Some folks were nice enough to look at and give me pointers on the first part. The second part.... I haven't even read the second part since I wrote it. I'm honestly a bit scared to given how much editing it probably needs.
I'm not really sure how to ask the editing and reviewing groups here for help.
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They've each got their own methods. Check around the group's front page or the stickies on their forums, they'll most likely have the rules down somewhere. :B