Rarity and Spike head north. Their mission? Find and retrieve the plans for a weapon that could turn the tide of a once-hopeless war. It seems like a romantic getaway in the snowy mountains. But nothing could be farther from the truth...
3445334 I finally got around to reading the metaphorical meat and potatoes. Pretty good. Definitely better than the old description (pouring salt in the wound, I know, I'm so diabolical ). There were, however, a few errors I noticed, like this:
The half dozen or so romance novels they’d manage to scrounge
As far as I could tell, in the larger context of the story, they had already gotten the novels, supported by a description of their number and location. If you use 'manage', it implies present-tense, which means that they still scrounge around. Now, if they still do scrounge around, you can't really describe their number.
I know, I know. I'm a Grammar Nazi. Sue me.
This is still a great story. I just have to find the time to read Fool's Gold...
So far as I know, the proceedings of this continuity stand thus:
Big Red ^ Fool's Gold ---> Diamond in the Rough ---> ??? ---> Finale??? v Colder Weather(x) ???(x) ???(x) ???(x???)
Not factoring in any surprise twists, this is how things have proceeded and can be expected to proceed in the near and distant future, Merc, Peregrine and JJ willing.
3444443>>3445490 While I can't speak for Merc's additions to the description, as for the story itself... I'm the usual editor on these things, but we've gone ahead and released this before I've had a chance to go over it. Yes, there are mistakes (in a quick glance, I've seen them myself). Please refrain from pointing them out, as, while I do appreciate it, I will most likely find them when I get time to do a full read-through edit.
However, glad you're enjoying it! (Though you really should read Fool's Gold and Diamond in the Rough first, heh.)
3445728 Oh just third? Oh, OK. Not like I'm writing half of the whole shebang or nothing.
3446685 That's pretty close. I'd, however, shape it thus:
Big Red ----------> ??? ^ (Pro) --> Fool's Gold ---> Diamond in the Rough --> Heist 3! ---> ??? --> Finale???
v ^ ^ Colder Weather(x)
???(x)
???(x)
???(xstill unguessed backgroundpony -OC)
Wow. OK, that's a mess, but hopefully you get the picture, heh.
3447259 So, lemme see if I can wrap my head around this:
There's a prologue of some sort floating around in the miasma of creativity you, Merc and JJ seem to share a space in, and there's a sequel to Big Red in the works? Possibly? All on top of Heist 3 and the finale.
3450043 The prologue is actually mine (though will likely be hashing with the bros, and they're welcome to join if they like what I have in mind. I will only say that it might be a little different from all the others. Though still starring a canon character!)
That was my bad on the Big Red...mostly that was to show that its own timeline pushes forward. So theoretically, there might be something after that. I can't say, as while I'm a part of BR, that's mostly JJ and Merc's thoughts. Though I love my Llewellyn Shields--
--and then I just remembered that I do have something planned. While not a sequel per se of Big Red, I plan on taking Captain Lew with his own story after it, yes. Gotta throw in the better half, am I right? So yes, there's at least one story there, too. If I get them all done. I'm kind of bad at that, but I love this stuff, and want it out there, so we'll see.
I luv this :D a lot of maybe too redundant and unnecessary description, but that may just be me, also because I'm spanish native and get tired when read too much stuff I don't get, but I still enjoy this and love it. You've got me hooked!
Eee!
Dis goodun, Merc!
My Grammar Nazi instincts are kicking in...
YAY, another sidestory/tie-in to the overall plot line of this magnificent world you have created. I cannot wait to read it.
Awwww yeahhhh, dis gon be gud! Hope to see more soon, Merc!
3444443
I spell checked that damn description twice too...
3445334 I finally got around to reading the metaphorical meat and potatoes. Pretty good. Definitely better than the old description (pouring salt in the wound, I know, I'm so diabolical ). There were, however, a few errors I noticed, like this:
As far as I could tell, in the larger context of the story, they had already gotten the novels, supported by a description of their number and location. If you use 'manage', it implies present-tense, which means that they still scrounge around. Now, if they still do scrounge around, you can't really describe their number.
I know, I know. I'm a Grammar Nazi. Sue me.
This is still a great story. I just have to find the time to read Fool's Gold...
yay
I have a list. It's a list of the people who can do a decent Spike/Rarity fic.
So far, only two are on it.
The Descendant and Path_Of_Cloud.
Now there's a third.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3445728
Might want to add Notarealponydotcom to that list, m8. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/17578/that-deep-romantic-chasm
Also True Blue Spark http://www.fimfiction.net/story/56198/greenfire
And Draconian Soul http://www.fimfiction.net/story/114208/as-sweet-as-lavender
3445755
They're good... But those
twothree are masters of it.~Skeeter The Lurker
3445728
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That comment actually made my day. Thanks, Skeet. I honestly mean it.
3445822
Not a problem at all,
GabeMerc!This story is DAMN good.
~Skeeter The Lurker
It's finally here! :D
The Heistverse? YES!
Spike and Rarity? DOUBLE YES!
So far as I know, the proceedings of this continuity stand thus:
Big Red
^
Fool's Gold ---> Diamond in the Rough ---> ??? ---> Finale???
v
Colder Weather(x)
???(x)
???(x)
???(x???)
Not factoring in any surprise twists, this is how things have proceeded and can be expected to proceed in the near and distant future, Merc, Peregrine and JJ willing.
3444443>>3445490
While I can't speak for Merc's additions to the description, as for the story itself... I'm the usual editor on these things, but we've gone ahead and released this before I've had a chance to go over it. Yes, there are mistakes (in a quick glance, I've seen them myself). Please refrain from pointing them out, as, while I do appreciate it, I will most likely find them when I get time to do a full read-through edit.
However, glad you're enjoying it! (Though you really should read Fool's Gold and Diamond in the Rough first, heh.)
3445728
Oh just third? Oh, OK. Not like I'm writing half of the whole shebang or nothing.
3446685
That's pretty close. I'd, however, shape it thus:
Big Red ----------> ???
^
(Pro) --> Fool's Gold ---> Diamond in the Rough --> Heist 3! ---> ??? --> Finale???
v ^
^
Colder Weather(x)
???(x)
???(x)
???(xstill unguessed backgroundpony -OC)
Wow. OK, that's a mess, but hopefully you get the picture, heh.
3447259 Cool. I can respect that. Don't hesitate to ask me if you want some help, though.
Oh yes! It continues!
Pretty awesome chapter. Can't wait for the next one
I'm sure it will be filled with more of this glorious writing!
3447259
So, lemme see if I can wrap my head around this:
There's a prologue of some sort floating around in the miasma of creativity you, Merc and JJ seem to share a space in, and there's a sequel to Big Red in the works? Possibly? All on top of Heist 3 and the finale.
Excuse me while I clean my keyboard.
Nice start towards this wonderful continuation tale of a world. Please do keep up the good work upon such a great idea.
3450043
The prologue is actually mine (though will likely be hashing with the bros, and they're welcome to join if they like what I have in mind. I will only say that it might be a little different from all the others. Though still starring a canon character!)
That was my bad on the Big Red...mostly that was to show that its own timeline pushes forward. So theoretically, there might be something after that. I can't say, as while I'm a part of BR, that's mostly JJ and Merc's thoughts. Though I love my Llewellyn Shields--
--and then I just remembered that I do have something planned. While not a sequel per se of Big Red, I plan on taking Captain Lew with his own story after it, yes. Gotta throw in the better half, am I right? So yes, there's at least one story there, too. If I get them all done. I'm kind of bad at that, but I love this stuff, and want it out there, so we'll see.
3457752
Le squee.
Big mistake putting pleasure before business.
I luv this :D
a lot of maybe too redundant and unnecessary description, but that may just be me, also because I'm spanish native and get tired when read too much stuff I don't get, but I still enjoy this and love it. You've got me hooked!