Queen Chrysalis is an aggressive and powerful leader, but even queens can develop feelings for others...
In this story Chrysalis finds a stallion who left Ponyville behind after years of abuse and torment, Although throwing insults and threats at first, A relationship starts to blossom and a fight for survival soon kicks in for the Changling Kingdom...
(Twilight Sparkle Tag added due to Chapter 4)
**Author's Notes**
First of all, This is actually a story I based on a Dream I had whilst sleeping. The story is rather gripping on myself as I put some elements of my real life feelings into it (The pain and sorrow of someone you thought loved you giving up on you)
Secondly, This is my first ever story, so I appreciate any and all comments on the story. Whether Positive or Negative.
Thirdly, This story isn't a clopfic, but I guess if you imagine hard enough you might get somewhere.
I've also set it to "Teen" as it has Swearing, Suggestive Sexual Themes and Violence.
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There are not enough stories about Crissy so ill read it when it has more chapters,
oh and heres a Thumbs up just cause changlings are awesome.
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Thanks! I'm in the process of writing chapter two, It'll feature a more Crissy perspective and an advanced understanding of my OC and chrysalis in general.
Thanks for the TU, For my first story I'm already proud of it :3
Ooo whose your OC? is it a changeling or pony?
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It's a pony... For now.. :3
Do i hear a hint of changeling assimilation?
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The possibility is there
I've also planned ahead and made an Epilogue and Possible Sequel if this story goes well! :)
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So you have the story already planned out to its full extent?
Cool that means fast updates right?
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The beginning was the hardest, As this was all based on a dream I had last night and my brain skipped to the mid-way/ending/sequel, I just need to extend chapter two and I'll be done with that (3/Epilogue will most likely be uploaded same day as Chap. 2)
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Aww i was hoping this was going to be a long story.
Also last night i had a dream i was king Sombra,
i now realise i read waaaaay to much Fim Fic.
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Chap.1 was 2500 words so pretty small, I'm attempting to space Chap.2 out as that has doesn't have much in the way of stuff, So I need to plan some more, And chap.3 will most likely have less than 1000 words as it's just a small ending piece with a possibility of a sequel :) :VinylScratchHappy:
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Sometimes Love is a one way street,
And your not always going the right direction.
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Agreed, That's what also motivated my story :/ (As noted in the Long Description)
I lost the one I loved, And now I can share it in Pony Form for all to read...
When we lose something dear, we often will hide,
The pain that we're feeling, deep down inside,
But if you allow this, your feelings fester and bide,
So choose someone close, in which you can confide.
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And nothing is closer than a Changling Queen <3
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Who better to help you deal with love lost,
Then a creature that eats it.
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Words that touch deeply within.
I will work my editorial magic on this and make it 20% more awesome!
Because it is, y'know. And I'm not just saying that because we're related.
I really like this story so far.
~ Michael
3383457 Agreed, Changelings are awesome! That is why my OC is a Changeling.
~ Michael
There's a lot of grammatical errors, especially where speech is concerned. But, overall, it's a nice start.
Good for first time writing.
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Not bad. You have my attention, that's for sure. Keep it up
That's the perfect place to stop. Whetting our appetites and making us hungry for more. The main character is believable and the cliffhanger you left us with is having our minds mull over the right kind of questions to pique our interest. This is a good piece, looking foreward to reading more.
I'm liking it so far! The story, de-demonizing the changelings from what the ponies believed them to be but is it true? The part I'm really liking is also that you're giving Chrysalis a vulnerable side, a very human side. I'm glad I faved this story!
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Changlings exploit vulnerability to feed, But is it possible that Chrysalis herself could be falling into a trap?
[It's a trap!.GIF]
The possibilities are endless, Thanks for your comment! :D
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No problem, it's a good story. I love these kind of stories.
Ze Story is very, very very very interesting :D
I like the way you made Queen Chrysalis a bit soft :D
I'll be stickin around commentin on moar of yer story =D
Floop :3
-Lime GreenSharde'
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We are all softies at heart, Even Queen Chry :)
Thank you, Every View, Comment, Like and Fave brings me one step closer to a possibly new career in FIMfiction
Excellent chapter my friend.
But one tip, keep the romance in good pace. Don't rush into things.
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Well the relationship is put to the test and the romance is extended in Chapter 3 (Coming out soon) however chap.3 is roughly 3000 words, So the romance isn't really expressed that much. I'm believing that if the story goes well I could expand into a sequel, In there the relationship may go above and beyond (Possible Mature rating too.)
But I'll finish this story first before getting ahead of myself too much :P
Thank you for your comment, I love to hear feedback :D
I'm getting a very butterfly effect related feeling here and I like it.
The chapter's good but it feels like it's missing something. What I mean is that even though there's the vocalization of the plan I feel a bit out of the loop with Sam explaining the plan to Chrysalis but not really knowing it in its entirety yet. Also, to me, it seemed short. Don't get me wrong, I loved it but I just thought the chapter got cut off too soon.
As always, have fun writing it and let any of us know if you need help.
'Til then, I'll be waiting for your next chapter. Hope you have a happy new year.
That all being said, I'm glad that this story's still going. I've really missed it.
Oh boy, let's see what happens next.
This was a great addition!
I kinda wish there was more to this chapter though. 
There were a few small mistakes (the biggest being when you said "time felt like time was moving slowly" I know you probably meant he or it instead of the first "time") I'll bet Geo just LOVED the bit with Twilight. 
Altogethery, great job as always, my friend. 
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I will neither confirm or deny th— okay, I loved it.
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I knew it!
Is he still a filly or a middle age Colt?
And has he Brain damage or ist this some kind of magic, what explain itself later in the story?
Oh and i like it, but it´s a bit confusing.
I don´t know the name anymore, but i think the girl beside Chrysalis is the one who rescurred him, maybe Chris was her name.
Well not bad i think i like it.
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