Techno Blue's Travels

at least I amuse myself #1 · Oct 5th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 1: Accident ·

34k words is awful long for a single chapter (that's the length of a novella in itself!), and the organization is a bit disjointed. I started losing track of things about a third of the way through.

I'm betting most of those dislikes came from people who didn't make it past the intro/first couple paragraphs, though.

I do think it has some potential, but it could use more editing. I'll keep an eye on it out of vague curiosity.

Happy Dalek

Happy Dalek #2 · Oct 5th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Accident ·

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Thank you. I will see what I can do about it.

3A

3A #3 · Oct 10th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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Can't wait for more!

Happy Dalek

Happy Dalek #4 · Oct 10th, 2013 · · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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Thank you.
I had written most of it in one go, so the next few chapters are a bit off still.
I wasn't sure if it was alright or not. I'm sure there is definitely room for improvement.

Seeing all those thumbs down didn't help with my confidence, plus I discovered a sad song about scootaloo at the same time as posting this. So my self-esteem wasn't great for a day or so.
Thank you.

3A

3A #5 · Oct 10th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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3327508 I don't even know why they would down vote it.

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at least I amuse myself #6 · Oct 11th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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I first clicked on this story because I was curious about unusual number of pure downvotes it had collected before anyone had even had a chance to read it, actually!

The only reason I would have had for downvoting would have been that it felt a bit like a rough rough draft, but I don't think that was why. Maybe it was, I don't know.

Happy Dalek

Happy Dalek #7 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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Originally you said it was because of the organisation, plus it was awfully long for one chapter. I appreciated your feedback then and now.

I have since edited it so it flows better. I have asked my sister to go over it and suggest changes to the outline, She is taking a bit longer than I would like, so in the meantime I will continue writing the next chapter
I do feel I can do better,

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at least I amuse myself #8 · Oct 11th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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Well, I originally thought that most of the downvotes were from people who had only read only the description and disliked it on some misguided principle, hence, "I'm betting most of those dislikes came from people who didn't make it past the intro..."
Even the more popular stories featuring certain things can get a visit from the dislike fairy when they hit the front page and fall under everyone's scrutiny.

The organization was just what I thought was the most important thing to focus on here. Nitty-gritty details and prose take a backseat to characters and overarching organisation/pacing/flow, I think, especially in the early stages of editing.
Putting together a clean final product in writing is a lot of work

but the most important thing at this stage is to keep writing -- worst case scenario, you still get a little more content to fiddle with and get a little better at it to boot.

Happy Dalek

Happy Dalek #9 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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Even the more popular stories featuring certain things can get a visit from the dislike fairy when they hit the front page and fall under everyone's scrutiny.

Wow
I thought Bronies were better than that.

bahatumay

bahatumay #10 · Oct 13th, 2013 · 1 · · Chapter 6: Replace ·

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I agree with 3330745. I read because I was curious about the downvotes, especially with the Doc Ock arms (which is a sick concept). It wasn't downvote-worthy, but it did feel a bit messy at times. It could have used another proofreading. I also felt the main character was a bit overpowered.

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