Meet Fenrir and his brother who both belong to a species called Nephillim (i know that this species is used in other stuff (like for example the darksiders series) and you actually write it with one l but i happened to like the sound of it and so i used it to name my species.)
This is my very first fanfiction and english isn't my main language so constructive critisism is welcome.
btw the alternate universe tag stands for some story arcs that i have planned and so that i could make the equestrian history my bitch. (^^)
Chapters (5)
No offense dude, but you are mixing 3 separate religions and iconography in your story. Id get that sorted if you want to be taken seriously.
Again, nothing personal, just tying to help. If you want any help on that just let me know.
Thanks for the tip bro.
but there is a reason that i asked for constructive criticism so thank you.
A tad sad that my first comment on my story is a negative one
I enjoyed your first chapter, but I think you should spend a little more time on grammar or get a proofreader. I'm looking forward to chapter 2.
is the grammar really that bad
oh well i warned in the discription (which is no excuse for bad grammar at all) thanks for the tip. could you point some things out so that i could correct them.