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Blue Tune is a young Alicorn, not only known for being the best, and youngest musician, but for being the only son of the ruler of Equestria, Princess Celestia. Ever since he was born, he has lived a perfect life of a young prince. Everything was perfect, from living in the castle, to his private lessons, but what was mostly perfect, was the love he got from his mom. Yet, he always wondered what happened to his dad, but Celestia would never tell him what had happened to him. She always assured him that everything would still be alright. A few years later, everything fell apart when Princess Luna returned to the castle. She was so shocked at the fact that her own sister had a son, that she found it hard to believe that it was true. Determined to find out, Luna decides to investigate in order to find the truth. After being questioned so many times by the young princess, Blue Tune decides to join the investigation, believing that it will lead him to finding out what happened to his dad. Yet they don't know that the truth hurts, and this truth will break more than one Alicorn's heart.

As obvious as it seems, this is the first time I have ever written a story, especially an mlp fanfic. I'm not a professional writer, so the story might sound weird at times, but I will do my best to not make it a poorly written story. if you have any suggestions and/or tips for me, please leave them in the comments, I would really appreciate it. Thank you, and enjoy.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 11 )

If Celestia were to have a son, I'd picture him to be spoiled down to the core. :trollestia:
Always getting what he wants and always having people listening and adoring him. I think you hit that right on the nose , you also did a wonderful job with the detail, considering this being your first story. But, I did notice that this story could use more punctuation. I'll rate this story a good 3/5. I hope to read more soon.

Thoughts are usually put into italics.
Other than that little error.
This story isn't half-bad....
In fact, I rather like it.

3376869 Yes, I actually play the trumpet.

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1) Your description does somewhat resemble Blue Tune, but I really don't plan on making him seem that rotten, that's Blueblood's thing.
2) punctuation and grammar are usually a big issue to me when it comes to writing, I'll try to fix any errors before publishing chapters, but I might miss some things, so, sorry about that :facehoof:
3) Glad to hear that your enjoying the story :pinkiehappy: . sorry for the long wait though, but I will try to publish more chapters as soon as I can.

4241054 Glad to hear that you like it. Thanks for the advice, by the way. :pinkiesmile:

3376869 I'm curious. What would make you ask such a question?

Wow so many dislikes for a realy good story

They don't know who their pissing off.
ME

Wow way to go I want more. so keep it up.

I really like this story and hope to read more soon

Cmon lad update this soon.

Or lady don't want to be sexist

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